Walking In Darkness Alone~

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  1. KH ~ Heart Merlin's Housekeeper

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    Walking Alone Where Do i go?
    I Don't Know i can't see anthing. My HeRaT With Light will it stay? or will Darkness just Come and Destory Light. Still can't see Where im going.
    Need to go Home Can't find Home A Castle? Lighting Came Rain now walking alone in Darknes and Rain it Would not end. only the Keyblade Holder can Help.


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    Star Wars? Heartless! Hey, Two Keyblades of Light.
    I Would not give Up Keyblade Help Me I Need to End this.
    Home Here I Am.
    Thank You Light.
    You are the Strongtest thing in the World
    Thank You.....
     
  2. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    Umh, well I see you spoke from your heart . . . but it's kind of lacking structure. I'm not saying a poem has to have structure just . . . Hmmm, Perhaps you should try making your point just a bit more clear. This just seems to be a random compile of thoughts based on light. You were trying though so I give you props, and don't worry. Just keep trying, you'll get the hang of it ^_^ also I believe this is the first poem I have seen that uses animated smileys (not that it's a bad thing)
     
  3. Roxas&Sora4E Traverse Town Homebody

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    I find it rather great and magnifiecent...
    But in some parts I was confused,
    I'm not judging o being harsh...
    Just a couple misspellings, comma's would be great...:p
    But other than that, i'd say this is a great piece...:D
     
  4. KH ~ Heart Merlin's Housekeeper

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    I Don't like this that much i hate please nobody say THIS STINKS Please
     
  5. Daxa~ #stalker

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    But it doesnt stink xD
    But really,I like it...its really interseting to read,and makes sense(after a while) :3