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  1. FuzzyBlueLights Traverse Town Homebody

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    Untitled.

    Pick up your swords brother!
    An evil like no other, lurks, outside your door.
    It is a beast brother! A fiend like none, we've seen before.
    It the gravest sin, to even let it live.
    So silence it. At it's core.
    Victory awaits the Just.
    Our Father in heaven trusts, no other to do this deed.
    For on this darkest night, we rid the world a plight.
    Tonight! We kill the beast.
    Don't fear it's razor claws. Nor it's invincible maw.
    For we are ordained, our right as men to claim,
    Do not think I'm insane. I just have the righteous flame.
    By God's might, we slay this beast.
    There is no time for bed, you'll never rest your head
    Unless the beast is dead!
    Your flocks will be in shreds. Your families will all be dead.
    Or you can join me now and lay the beast down.
    So put on your hunting boots
    No time to aim just shoot!
    For tonight, we kill the beast!
    Your son's will call you heroes, your wives forget their prequels!
    Just because, we slay this beast.
    My brothers, this cretin's tough.
    His hellish blood lust, will continue 'till we run it through!
    But we are the Lord's hand picked. So put your faith in him,
    As of tonight, we slay the beast.

    Author's note: Inspired by Jayn and Gaston of Disney's 'The Beauty and the Beast.'
    And title suggestions would be nice too. I couldn't come up with a fitting one.
    And I know spelled Untitled, wrong. Typed it to fast on this handheld.
    Constructive criticism wanted. Positive feedback welcomed. Negative's will be ignored. Thank you .
     
  2. Agent.T Destiny Islands Resident

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    I love this! It's like a big pep talk! As I read it I pictured a medieval town and a knight running around shouting line after line of this ^_^ I thought it was wonderful~
    As far as constructive criticism goes I can't think of anything to say so I apologise...But a title...Something as simple as "the beast" sounds good in my opinion :)