The Lie

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  1. KnightReaper Traverse Town Homebody

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    This is my longest poem, so I don't know if it's as good as the others I've posted.

    Go, Soul, the body's guest
    Upon a thankless errand
    Fear not to touch the best
    The truth shall be thy warrant
    Go, since I needs must die
    And give the world the lie

    Say to the court, it glows
    And shines like rotten wood
    Say to the church, it shows
    What's good, and doth no good
    If church and court reply
    Then give them both the lie

    Tell potentates, they live
    Acting by others' action
    Not loved unless they give
    Not strong but by a faction
    If potentates reply
    Give potentates the lie

    Tell men of high condition
    That manage the estate
    Their purpose is ambition
    Their practice only hate
    And if they once reply
    Then give them all the lie

    Tell them that brave it most
    They beg for more by spending
    Who, in their greatest cost
    Seek nothing but commending
    And if they make reply
    Then give them all the lie

    Tell zeal it wants devotion
    Tell love it is but lust
    Tell time it is but motion
    Tell flesh it is but dust
    And wish them not reply
    For thou must give the lie

    Tell age it daily waste
    Tell honor how it alters
    Tell beauty how she blast
    Tell favor how it falters
    And as they shall reply
    Give every one the lie

    Tell wit how much it wrangles
    In tickle points of niceness
    Tell wisdom she entangles
    Herself in over wiseness
    And when they do reply
    Straight give them both the lie

    Tell physic of her boldness
    Tell skill it is pretension
    Tell charity of coldness
    Tell law it is contention
    And as they do reply
    So give them still the lie

    Tell fortune of her blindness
    Tell nature of decay
    Tell friendship of unkindness
    Tell justice of delay
    And if they will reply
    Then give them all the lie

    Tell arts they have no soundness
    But vary by esteeming
    Tell schools they want profoundness
    And stand too much on seeming
    If arts and schools reply
    Give arts and schools the lie

    Tell faith it's fled the city
    Tell how the country caress
    Tell manhood shakes off pity
    And virtue last breath
    And if they do reply
    Spare not to give the lie

    So when thou hast as I
    Commanded thee, done blabbing
    Although to give the lie
    Deserves no less than stabbing
    Stab at thee he that will
    No stab the soul can kill.
     
  2. Blademaster Mai'kel Hollow Bastion Committee

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    Whoa. That was...insane and intense, dude. Very well written, well done.
     
  3. Falling Star Gummi Ship Junkie

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    It was very good but their were a few mistakes and you might want to work a little on periods and punctuation. Other then that it was a very good poem!
     
  4. KnightReaper Traverse Town Homebody

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    I don't really find the point in periods, since the break between lines to me is another sentence. Thanks though.
     
  5. Cherry Berry Chaser

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    That was the most touching poem I have read in ages!

    There are very few punctuation errors but overall it is absolutely like... Wow!