[re:] Poetic ars nova Season #1 ~ Morality

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  1. Cat~ Transformation

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    Welcome to the first new & improved Poetic ars nova Season!
    [deadline for entries: May 18th]
    [re:] number one | M o r a l i t y

    Rules:

    The poem must be at least two stanzas, though this is the bare minimum. Feel free to do more.

    The poem has to cover morality in some way, whether it be upholding laws or judging another's deeds.

    Poem has to have some sort of rhyme scheme. No free form for this round.

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    And remember kids, the winner of all PanS contests going forward will receive this wonderful pin (made by our graphics god, Llave).

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    Now get those rhymes going and your keys tapping! Just remember that this is a KHV contest, so all site rules still apply. If you have any questions, feel free to peruse this thread or message me.
     
  2. cstar stay away from my waifu

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    In the Family

    I was always told
    that killing is wrong,
    that life is sacred,
    that love should be strong.

    I took it to heart
    believed in it fully,
    showed it in believed it
    never once was a bully.

    But as I grew older
    the world seemed to change
    I couldn't control it
    it was out of my range.

    Another thing told
    a home
    propaganda
    my family's always right
    in their business and a

    friend or a lover
    it did not matter who
    was no more important
    than dirt on a shoe.

    Turns out my upbringing,
    was quite a lie,
    for more than a decade
    they were
    mafiosi

    One day they tested me,
    and on that one day
    my brother was tasked,
    had someone to slay.


    His victim they chose
    was my lover, my friend,
    Emily, she owed money
    which of course he did lend.

    I told him he couldn't
    my family was mad
    at me not my brother
    I found it quite sad.

    My father agreed
    if I got in the way
    my blood would be spilled
    t'was the cost to betray.

    I was selfish, I stayed silent
    and lost Emily,
    my love's blood was spilled
    I chose family.

     
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  3. tamale Ice to see you!

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    Reserving a post because I forgot to sooner and I can't let Cstar win by default~ :P
     
  4. Sebax Avatar by Xerona

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    A little, personally felt villanelle.


    Choosing
    There was a time I thought I knew it all
    But now, it seems, that I could not, did not
    I feel right now like I am going to bawl

    It took one time for my morals to stall
    My uncertainty is a deathly clot
    There was a time I thought I knew it all

    Thoughts of right and wrong have come to a crawl
    My judgment right now is not worth a snot
    I feel right now like I am going to bawl
     
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    Friendly reminder that we're slightly past the halfway mark!
    Get your poetry pumping!
     
  6. Cat~ Transformation

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    Poetic ars nova Season ends in four days guys.
    Make sure to get your entries in before then!
     
  7. Cat~ Transformation

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    So sorry for the delay, folks.
    To @Godzilla and @Sebax I hope to have the results up sometime within the next week. A combination of personal issues and a hectic school schedule kept me from really addressing this any sooner. I do apologize for any inconvenience this may have caused anyone, but I can assure you that this competition will continue.
     
  8. Cat~ Transformation

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    I would like to give a big thanks to Cstar and Sebax for their participation in this round.

    And now, the results. You both rhymed with conviction, but there can only be one winner:
    [*violent drumming noises*]

    cstar
    Here's what our judges had to say about your piece.
    Pros:
    • Good flow
    • Clear topic
    • Nature v. Nurture
    • Nice Narrative
    Cons:
    • Weird enjambment
    • Not. Enough. Punctuation.

    Sebax
    Here's what our judges had to say about your piece.
    Pros:
    • Nice repetition.
    • "Kudos for doing a villainelle!"
    • Personal nature of the moral struggle
    Cons:
    • Doesn't really flow.
    • Message seemed hollow. Wasn't really unique.
    • Was quite short; could've been expanded upon

    Both of you were great, that can't be denied!
    You did your best and with rhymes, you tried.
    But only one winner can there be
    In this battle of writing such poetry.

    The winner will be receiving their pin shortly.

    Did you want to enter but miss your chance? Don't worry! PotS and PanS run regularly, so you'll get your time to shine soon enough!