Oda's Songs

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  1. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

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    I have some parody lyrics of Lion king songs based from the Sonic The hedgehog comics universe.
    If you wish to see them ask for them.
     
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    Let me Rest in Peace

    Don't cry cos I can't deal
    And that sadness you shouldn't feel
    But in time you'll know what's real
    Hmm-hmm
    Be prepared now you know
    It's time to let me go
    Just get on with the show
    Don't grieve
    Don't shed a single tear
    You've lost nothing you held dear
    So get out off here
    Leave me where I lie
    Leave me here alone leave this place
    Take your grief with you Outta my face
    Don't stand there and start to cry
    Leave me where I lie
    Our victory is no guarantee
    Don't you dare count on me
    That's how I wish it to be
    Leave me where I lie
    I knew I'd soon fall
    I began to hate you all
    Dispite my attempts to stall
    You began to stand tall
    Running while I had to crawl
    Responding to every distress call now it's your turn
    Leave me where I lie
    Leave me here alone leave this place
    Take your grief with you outta my face
    Don't stand there and start to cry
    Leave me where I lie
    You'd better leave me where I lie
     
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    Fixed two spelling mistakes in the quote. Off to of, and dispite to despite. Good poem, nice rhythm, great feel. This one has a sad undertone to it. Can't wait to read more, keep up the good work :)
     
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    Darkness eat my Heart

    I've had enough of this crap
    I'd sooner throw myself into a death trap
    So I beg for you to smite me here
    Make my end come near
    I had an Idol someone om whom I could rely
    But now they've gone to die
    I've given up on such a disgrace
    So just get the hell outta my face

    I've gone out of my own head
    Knowing your not worth a single tear I shed
    And I know I'm not worth your time
    Believing in you was my only crime
    Don't think I'm in grief
    This is a simple belief
    I want to be hit with a poison dart
    I've let the darkness eat my heart

    I believed I was on the hero's track
    Till you came and stabbed me in the back
    That's right I've been betrayed
    Knowing that I still strayed
    Give me hell's golden knife
    I've given up on this life
    Though I'll soon be gone
    I'll be missed by no one

    "You've got a future to save"
    "I Don't" so how can I be brave?
    What future can we have now?
    A good one ha I don't know how
    The deepest caverns of hell
    Are for those who chose the day they fell
    So watch this next part
    Watch the darkness eat my heart

    I had a dream but it is now lost
    You've made me pay a terrible cost
    These are more than mere words spoken
    They are the last breath of a man who's soul has broken
    Let my legend end this day
    And have your memories of me thrown away
    I'm not a man worth remembering
    I'm not a man for whom you should sing

    I'm a fool who has nothing left within
    A man who has made a deadly sin
    Take that cold metallic blade
    And end the story I have made
    Slice through the one who should not exist
    Erase the man who should not be missed
    My legend ended before it got a chance to start
    Now Darkness eat my heart
     
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    Dude . . . Long live Geoffrey St. John!!! This poem . . . this poem just boosted my feelings for the Geoffrey man. This was pretty dark and shows the pain Geoffrey had. Great piece, hands down greatest piece based on any Sonic character i've ever read . . . thank you.
     
  6. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

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    I'm glad you like it Nights, and truth be told I must thank you and Naz for it. It was only after that Rap conversation that my mind was in the right place to write that. So thank you both.
     
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    Yea man sure thing that was a next poem is all I can say.
     
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    A next poem? Don't you mean a nice poem?
     
  9. nasirrich King's Apprentice

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    Next is a different way of saying something is outstanding, amazing cool, things like that. A friend of mine in my French Class got me into saying that. If you say it a lot it'll make sense, and get heads turning like the poem. Yea see what I did there yea man that... That right there is nice man that was nice.
     
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    New Lyric. Jaden just accept this!
    The flow of time

    I've no choice left for me
    to to accept a bitter destiny
    I was happy to return to my friends
    But were they all there well that depends
    Many had moved on and others were still around
    But my question turned to where can my net bro be found?
    He lost his way and his soul
    It was then I knew time had taken it's tole

    He give up the game he used to love
    But I thought he'd return to it after a shove
    But no matter what I tried
    He still retreated back inside
    I kept trying to make it through
    But with each passing day he became more blue
    Fate had made a vile crime
    My friend lost in the flow of time

    I still wasn't ready to give up on him
    Though my chances seemed so slim
    I tried to connect with the new Jay
    But he kept on pushing me away
    But I'm not one to easily surrender a fight
    Not when I can see some light
    I began to see the old Jay I knew
    But a second later the doubt grew

    I called together all I could
    And knew if anyone could break through we would
    Yet we were unable to help him out
    He just continued to whimper and pout
    Yet again we tried to connect
    But it resulted in another reject
    Now I talk in this rhyme
    A friend buried in the flow of time

    My story is nearing it's finale
    You still need a reason from me
    This isn't the first time I've faced this
    And the fact is I must Dismiss
    I've already lost a mate just like now
    And I don't want to explain how
    I watched a second friend turn into a child
    And my anger and hate grew wild

    The self doubt ate away his heart
    Now I've said my part
    Get that self doubt baby outta my sight
    I'm only now bearing for him is Spite
    My explanation is known to you all
    Just know it was my call
    Your ****ing doubt has committed a crime
    Jaden Yuki killed by doubt from the flow of time
     
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    Hmmm ok ok I see my manz coming with the skillz though?
     
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    Another new lyric

    My Old Friend id dead

    I don't need time to think
    Because just now my heart started to sink
    The pull is just to great
    No more time to contemplate
    It is time to act
    The odds are stacked
    Against me unforgivably
    Creating a pure hostility

    I've surrendered the fight
    So get out of my sight
    This battle is over and done
    And my hatred easily won
    I told the story of my failure
    A memory of which there is no cure
    My old wounds have once again bled
    My old friend is dead!

    A warrior I used to be
    But that life is lost to me
    I drifted into a new smile
    But now I face Exile
    A fate I wouldn't wish on my hated foes
    Or even those with whom I come to blows
    Don't fall into this category
    Or i'll make you History!

    No matter what is spoken
    My heart is yet to be awoken
    I write now with the darkness inside
    And I've let out my hidden pride
    I'll turn my back on you
    Your time is grow so few
    I'll unleash my hatred!
    My Old friend is dead!

    The innocence is forever cast away
    And your remains will lie in that ash tray
    I'll burn your lifeless corpse for all to see
    That is what you get for abandoning who your meant to be
    I'll charge you with treason
    Killed in the yuletide season
    I can't wait to see what that is like
    You have ten seconds to get on your bike

    That is right run away while you can
    Your death ends my vile plan
    I slice up your pathetic skin
    And throw your heart and brain into a bin
    They are worthless to all around
    You don't even deserve to walk on this ground
    I'll be your reaper whom you'll dread
    My old friend is dead!
     
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    Man I love the last 2 stanzas a lot. That violence, and raw feeling is how you can really get your point across.
    Now my thing is though could this be you're talking about your old self and how your new persona is killing you off because its sick of seeing you mistreated?
    Can this be friend who, your found to be fake and will make them pay?
    Maybe in a metaphorical sense of someone who you wanted to trust, but unable to because they changed for the worse.
     
  14. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

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    That last one has many different reasons for being but I will let you use your own imagination.
    New Lyric but not dark at all.
    I'll lend my ear

    In a reality so dark
    Many people gain a vile history
    Why that has to be
    Is life's one true mystery
    I know so many
    Who have suffered all their life
    And many with secrets
    Within a place full of strife

    My past has it's demons
    Yet I don't let it get to me
    And I have given myself
    A enforced Philosophy
    "No one doesn't deserve to be protected"
    That is something I hold dear
    And to you all I promise
    I'll lend my ear

    I let my concerns for my friends
    Dictate how I feel
    And I try to be the one
    Who gets through the personal seal
    I want to be the one
    To be the one whom people Confide
    So Let me know please
    Tell me what is eating you from inside

    I have tried to help so many
    I once even saved a life
    Even though at the time
    I was hunting Death's scythe
    Now I won't let anyone
    Live in that horrible fear
    Let out you fears to me
    I'll lend my ear

    I can't bear seeing my friends
    Being upset or troubled by something
    And not being able to help
    Makes my heart endlessly sting
    So that is why I speak this day
    Telling you all for what I stand
    I hope you have learned
    I will always lend a hand

    You can yell at me
    To release the anger buried deep
    And I'll comfort you
    If you need to weep
    Now I tell you all
    I will always be here
    And for all of you
    I'll lend my ear
     
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    This is a nice piece Oda, great formatting and rhyming scheme. However, you might want to check it over for spelling mistakes. I found one, or maybe two, horrible memory sorry. It's very inspiring and was a pleasure to read. Keep up the great work.
     
  16. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Finaaaaaaally I got to read your poems. :3 I gotta say, you improved a lot from the first few you wrote. You put more heart and soul into them each time you wrote another one. Great job. I liked the last poem deh most out of all of them. ;D
     
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    I am glad you do Maka after all I wrote that one right after I met you!

    But right now I think I'll put up my last piece of work one I made in a time of questioning
    What do I want for myself?

    Here I am asking a hard question
    A question that I need to answer now
    The only problem is
    I don't know how
    So I reached out asking
    For someone to come to my aid
    And I now face a choice
    One not easily made

    What do i want for myself?
    Where do I belong?
    Give me a reason
    To be strong
    Here I stand asking
    Have you felt this way
    Should I leave?
    Or should I stay?

    I began with that question
    And I spoke with a friend
    Cloud<3 then helped me realize
    I must be the guy on whom people depend
    I am the most happy
    When I someone confides in me
    And I do what I can to help
    And help them be who they want to be.

    What do I want for myself?
    Where do I belong?
    Give me a reason
    To be Strong
    After some time
    My reality had to adjust
    And now can I be
    Someone who you can trust?

    Now I think back to my past
    I always put myself aside
    Trying to help everyone else
    So they didn't have to hide
    I made my story a sad tale
    One I do not want to tell
    But that doesn't matter
    I'm in a new hell

    What do I want for myself?
    Where do I belong?
    Give me a Reason
    To be Strong
    I need to be needed
    I need to lend a hand
    Since no one needs me
    I don't know where I stand
    Now I must ask
    What do I want
    For Myself?
     
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    I really love your poetry. They have such strong lyrics, and I feel like I can relate to them at some point of my life, even now.
     
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    I am glad you like and here is one I wrote just last night I hope you like it too. And I will say this was written about a member here.

    Judgement day!

    Here I am again in a pain
    One no man can bear
    It caused to act so insane
    And cut a friend who was there
    I made up a reason
    Which may have seemed fair
    But to myself I committed treason
    And can't bear my own disgraced stare

    A friend I respected
    Threw me away
    My friendship was rejected
    That was a horrible day
    I was not given a reason
    So now I must pray
    All through the winter season
    That You'll face your judgement day!

    I thought I had a new mate
    In the timeless savior
    But soon a cold fate
    Altered ones behavior
    An action so easy to do
    Had a lasting effect
    On me but not on you
    You crushed me like an insect

    My heart crushed
    By a bitter betrayal
    My next action felt rushed
    But still I wondered how did I fail
    I proceeded on in my own style
    Even though my world turned gray
    And I won't again smile
    Until Your Judgement day

    I can't bear the shame
    Of my stupidity
    This is no game
    All I have left is my pity
    Pity for myself fills my heart
    And my thirst grows
    I can see this is the start
    Of what? Who knows

    Anger, hate sorrow pain
    Four dark feelings within
    That always leave a stain
    And even drive some to sin
    And I am no exception
    I will make you pay!
    I'll gain my redemption
    I'll be your Judgement day!

    Vengeance in a world so gray
    Timeless Savior face Judgement day!
     
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    Woah, I don't know what happened . . . . but i'm sorry to see you're both not getting along anymore. As for the poem, it expresses a lot of anger and hurt. The words are strong and move the reader in a way to understand the emotions it contains. This is an excellent piece Oda. No spelling or grammar errors. Everything looks great.