Nights' Poetry and Lyrics

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  1. Technic☆Kitty User Is Inactive

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    Thank you and sorry juicy about the quotes, I like quotes and . . . well anyway here is another one. *no more sig* sorry just get tired of typing it I am going to be cool about it can you :D :ninjacat:

    I find myself confined
    inside these castle walls
    not knowing half the time
    if it's me walking through these halls

    Next thing I know
    we have a new member
    blonde hair, blue eyes
    just another number

    Time goes on
    and we grow close
    until one day
    HE decides to go

    Now the boy I used to know
    has left me all alone
    for a life that cannot be
    I grew heartless like a stone

    Seeking for my friend
    I come across a town
    inside of a computer
    no memories have shown

    He cannot remember
    and therefore I must
    make him remember
    my chakrams I thrust

    But now he remembers
    too late it seems
    I can't have him back
    the friend of my dreams

    Hope you enjoyed this little peom about AXEL . . . you thought it was Roxas at first didn't you. So sad, I guess I sympathize with him though. He was only seeking to get his friend back, the friend that as a nobody should have never been :cryinganime: sorry about the grammar, but going for an organization member is a bit harder considering the small amount of parts they play, oh well. And if you're wondering, this ends at the beggining of KH2 where Axel and Roxas fight the technically second time, seeing as the one in the alley wasn't a fight.
     
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    It's not as if you have to have a written signature at the end of your posts, dear. xD

    Where was I? Ah yes.
    Aww, the last poem was really sweet. I can honestly say that I'm becoming more impressed by your vocabulary, you're using a lot of alternative verbs etc. The only thing I noticed was that some of the rhyming didn't quite work, such as "town" and "shown", I don't know if you were aiming for an "a,b,c,b" rhyme scheme or just using similar words.

    The second verse was really nice, especially the bit that said "just another number". It really expressed Axel's emotions about being tired and trapped in his life.
     
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    Awww poor axel I'll be his nobody friend DX I ahve blond hair and blue eyes ;) it was very good I loved it like all of your poems^^ keep it up I can't wait for the next^^
     
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    Night

    This is a small poem of my favorite time of the day. No it's not based on KH, but it is based on me. I figure everyone needs at least one poem about themselves so . . . Here, nope still not gonna say it :D

    Night is a cover
    for those who are weak
    those who are shallow
    evil, or meak

    But for me it's a scene
    of pure happiness, delight
    and that is why
    I love so, the Night

    Sorry if the last line isn't the best in grammar but it sounded like the best way to put it.
     
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    :=D: Your fave time is night just like me^^ me and you can hang out at the same place of night *lover of the night^^* keep it up and don't you stop^^
     
  6. NightofNights Merlin's Housekeeper

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    lol i guess its the three of us liking the night^^ nice poem by the way I can totaly understand what its saying^^ keep it up^^
     
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    Assassins Creed: When day turns to night

    I have recently played and beaten Assassins Creed *the first one* and this is a piece I wanted to do for it. Here, no still not sayin it :D

    When day turns to night
    you'll be in a fright
    with me and my blade
    and the dark as my shade
    you'll surely fall
    as a childs toy ball.

    Indefinite, decise
    I cannot be nice
    mercy I must forget
    to take the target.

    In the end
    nothing can mend
    the tear in my heart
    from my dearly departed friend.

    My master it seems
    had some terrible schemes
    and so is the end,
    but also is the beggining. . .

    I have also played AC 2 but will post on it later, for now let this sink in :ninjacat: and be like him < ninja is close to assassin. *also, if you read this juicy (of course you will) sorry for the mix up, I never read your profile so my bad, . . . I know now, what I should have known then (i think I heard that somewhere)* Anyway, aside from apologies *did I spell that right* Hope you liked this.
     
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    Assassins Creed 2: Born Again

    Okay, as promised *not really a promise* AC 2.

    Born again
    I live once more
    my blades my friend
    I use no door

    My family is broken
    by an old enemy
    I seek revenge
    with help from family

    One by one
    my enemies fall
    a plot I discover
    I must take them all

    In the end I am confronted
    by a strange entity
    one that controls
    the world it seems

    Back to the present
    the enemies return
    a new face in the lead
    a new threat to learn

    Barely escaped
    how can it be
    this is the end
    but also the beginning . . .

    Yes, there is going to be an AC 3. I discovered this while watching E3, it is called Assassins Creed: Brotherhood. It is going to be awsome and when I play and beat it you can expect another poem about it :D
     
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    The line "but also the beginning" messed with the entire rhythm you had going throughout the entire thing. There were a couple other lines that did that in the poem but it's generally a good idea to try and not do that.
     
  10. Technic☆Kitty User Is Inactive

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    Well that was the general idea on the last line, it is just one of those poems. I was just giving the slight hint that there will be more, because there will be another game, anyway it was just something I wanted to post not work on for a year and perfect :sweatdrop:
     
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    Never

    Once in a while
    comes a time in my life
    where there seems to be nothing
    but evil and strife

    I focus on the dark
    only to look towards the light
    and realise in the end
    there is nothing to fight

    For me it would seem
    there is but one end
    a lonely soul
    with a broken heart left to mend

    Left with nothing
    I have nothing to loose
    so it seems it is time
    a path I must choose

    Which road will I take
    one high, one low
    I stare at it now
    so now I must go

    Never ending
    Never bending
    Never bleeding
    Never Succeeding

    . . . . Never is the path I have chosen
     
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    What if . . .

    What if the world were dark and dim,
    no light shining from within.
    With every breathe that you take,
    you fade away to an endless fate.
    It seems to me that world is near,
    chaos is roaring and causing fear.
    If this is the path that we must take,
    then I will not stray, I will not break.
    . . .
    What if there was someone to guide us through,
    someone to be there, even when you're blue.
    Someone who wields the power inside,
    to fight off the darkness with one long stride.
    As I look now beyond us, to the world outside,
    I see him so clearly, his fate cannot hide.
    For once in the shadows, he will break away,
    and lead us all back, to the warmth of the day.
    . . .
    As the sun now sets, on my last day on earth,
    I think back, to the time of rebirth.
    I sit here and ponder, how much is real,
    can one truly know, what one cannot feel.
    And as I fade now, I rest,
    for no one can best,
    my favorite hero,
    that was the deal . . .

    Okay so recap, this is based on a short story I thought of in my head where the world is cast into the shadows for many years. Then one day a hero emerges from within and leads everyone on a journey back into the light. The here is struck down on the final stretch home, and the narrator realizes that the heroes life means more to the people than his own and so he trades his life to save the heroes. In the end the boy gets to see the light as the hero carries him out of the metaphorical door and into the light. The boy, sadly, leaves the world of the living soon after. He goes from being a nobody in the world of darkness, to a hero in the world of light . . . Kind of sad, I know. Well, enjoy ^_^
     
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    A Reprieve From The Darkness

    For thousands of years
    there are those who have feared
    that the slightest of change
    will cause so much pain

    They kept us locked up
    forever it seemed
    until one day
    a star shined and gleamed

    That star was me
    I had no choice
    but to rise up against them
    to raise up my voice

    I spoke of a world
    without fear, and with love
    the people would not listen
    to the voice up above

    I would not give up
    I would change things, no doubt
    no matter how hard
    I had to fight or shout

    I broke free from the world
    but had to leave them behind
    as there minds could not change
    now I journey to find

    A place to live, far from here
    a place with new people, and no fear
    I am still searching for that place that I dream of
    A Reprieve From The Darkness, a place full of love

    Sorry if the ending wasn't that great. This is based (not entirely) on a book I like called The Giver by Lois Lowry. It is a great book with many lessons that everyone should learn (talking about what the main character learned not what everyone else believed). Anyway I don't do many poems about books but I am glad I came up with this one. Thank you for reading this, hope it inspires you.
     
  14. Styx That's me inside your head.

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    I just read "A Reprieve From The Darkness" and liked the story being told very much. It was very easy to picture the events in the tale. It's good that you left some room for the reader's imagination (if that was your intent), but it also would've worked if you had fleshed it out a bit. Can't say what would have been better. Either way a good poem.
     
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    Sunday

    Okay so have't posted for a while, but I have been thinking a lot recently. I have thought about what it is to follow the rules and stick to the guidelines lain out for us. I have thought about what it is to break those rules and guidelines. I have also thought about how you cannot have one without the other and so I had to make something to express how I feel . . . and on that note, I'm gonna rap-

    I lived in the darkness
    fed from the light
    fled to the shadows
    to duck from a fight

    I gave up my courage
    and here now it seems
    that I have lost sight
    of my once favored dreams

    Though I hear that voice
    in the back of my mind
    saying step it up
    you should step out of line

    For what is it truly
    to follow the rules
    but to seek out attention
    from pathetic fools

    Don't take this to heart
    as I still follow some
    but to not break a thing
    I'd as soon bite my thumb

    For the sand will flow
    through the hourglass of time
    and as you may know
    it cannot rewind

    So if you would realize
    and stop being dumb
    only once a week
    must Sunday now come

    Yes, that was that and this is this . . . what it is. I just wanted to say that, if you feel like you are being pushed and shoved around by all these people telling you what to do it is (well not legally) okay to break a few small (very small) rules to feel free. Just remember to always stay within the boundaries of wrong and right. I show sympathy for the devil because he didn't know it was wrong (just go with it), but I show no sympathy for those who knowingly do something that is wrong just to do it.
     
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    Oh wow...I really love all your work! :3
    I like the KH songs,and the one above about Sunday is really good!
    Niiiice work hun :p
     
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    What is life?

    Okay, so here is a poem about a thought I have been having. Misleadingly it doesn't mean anything, but everything as well. Okay . . .

    What is life,
    but just a summer's day.
    I reach up for the light,
    and it seems to run away.

    At night inside my dreams,
    a shadow will appear.
    Though in the end it seems,
    that I will show no fear.

    For I know that deep inside,
    that shadow is only me.
    I cannot try to hide,
    from this reality.

    If only I could run,
    to the ends of time.
    If only I could leave,
    everything behind.

    I have to much to leave,
    and so I have to stay.
    Truly what is life,
    but just a summer's day.

    Okay so thank you for reading, and don't look for a meaning deep inside this poem. I am not going to. So let's just leave at that, okay?
     
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    Oh my gosh, I think I almost cried to these,
    no joke.
    These poems definetly come from the heart and the meaning is pure...
    I just love your work, its rather beautiful...:D
     
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    True Love . . . Rap

    Okay, so . . . never mind.

    Did you mean a word,
    when I said I heard,
    that you were cheating,
    my heart started beating,

    Then you tried to say,
    that it would be okay,
    it's all a bunch of lies,
    you loved me deep inside,

    I believed you for a while,
    I even tried to smile,
    when I watched you drift away,
    to another's arms today,

    It was just a dream,
    if only now it seems,
    that you were truly mine,
    our love was so divine,

    I cannot last forever,
    it seems my heart will break,
    and now i'm looking at you,
    your life is mine to take,

    My heart again is beating,
    as it did before,
    it seems as though you're pleading,
    for us to try once more,

    I don't regret a thing,
    even though I try to sing,
    of the love that we once knew,
    I must sit here and review,

    all the lies that you have told,
    all the truths in which you hold,
    all the time that I have lost,
    all of this and at what cost,

    seems to be that you know,
    the decision I have made,
    seems to be that you see,
    the glimmer of my blade.

    That was . . . a rap.
     
  20. Styx That's me inside your head.

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    Last two lines were my favourite ones in this new piece. Its rhyme scheme was unconventionally regular for a rap. It looked more like a poem at first glance, but a really good one at that. Keep on writing, man!