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Discussion in 'Poetry and Lyrics' started by Maka Albarn, Jan 9, 2012.

  1. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

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    Nice poem Maka you have a real talent here. But I would suggest you try and write a bigger one and maybe you could not only put across the feel you do but maybe tell the story of the feeling too.
     
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    Maka this is lovely. Your format is excellent, the rhyming scheme was fun, and your choice of words was superb ^^ Keep on writing, you're doing a great job ^^

    Side Note: No spelling or grammar mistakes. Excellent ^^ A+++
     
  3. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Oh hey. :'D Thank you very much for the nice comment. ^^ I try my best.

    A bigger poetry? Tell a story to it? >> Challenge accepted...

    Loving Again

    Pieces from a crystal heart
    All shattered and strewn over ice
    Frozen chills, all alone in the dark
    Shut my eyes and embraced this crisis

    Crimson fluid mix with vibrate white snow
    See the pain; see the anguish I am in?
    My face all but paled, my insides were cold
    But nightmares had only shown me that sinful grin

    Bones creaked, fragile fingers covered ears
    To hide from masked laughs, the sounds of mocked joy
    A love I thought that would last for years
    Killed by a maker I trusted, but was only his toy

    But fun was not yet over for this heartless thief
    Strings were attached, life became but a prison
    The caged bird felt all but pitiless, endless grief
    Through thick barbs broke free and stumbled into the sun

    Broken, cast away like an old doll
    Wounds were concealed, but all was not right
    Hands were offered, but continued to fall
    Wrapped in a shroud, no one to trust in sight

    Snow drifted, falling on the lone figure
    Lost in her shadows, lost in her sorrows
    Soon, dark visions became thicker
    To this wretched, tainted soul, there would be no more tomorrows

    Low, a soldier ventured within the murky storms
    Saw through and beheld the poor creature
    He brought her close, began to mend the sores
    No one could see them, for that she thought she was sure

    One thing then that I did not know
    We shared the same stories, the same loneliness
    Heartache we knew quite well, but tried to not let it show
    And ran into those who demonstrated to us carelessness

    Warmth is gradually returning as you continue to hold my hand
    Although I am tainted with shades and scars,
    You do not care as you carry me to a new land
    You have began to mend back together the tiny shards

    Although I am still frightened, and you are too
    We know whatever happens, we’ll never let go
    My darling, thank you for not giving up so soon
    And let’s just let these feelings grow and grow

    For they say that taking no risk is grave
    So let’s dance, let’s sing, let’s rejoice
    For I am the one that you saved
    And now, to embrace this choice


    ... And this is why I don't do narrative like poetry... they end up being very, very, very long. *facedesks*
     
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    Congratulations Maka you have written a poem that shows a lonely beaten soul finding love with another on the same road. You have done just what i said but I will admit that was quite longer than I expected.
     
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    Actually it's quite the contrary. Well, it is long, but there is nothing wrong with long poems (in fact why should poems be short?) I thought it was lovely, and enjoyed reading through it. As i've said before I love your rhyming pattern.

    This piece is quite beautiful. The descriptiveness, showing the loneliness of two souls who come together and become whole. It's a very good poem, great work^^
     
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    Maka yesh such elegance and amazing ability in your poetry skills NICE!!!!!

    ^..^
     
  7. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Thanks everyone for the comments.

    This is probably going to be one last poem from me for a while. It depends. Too much is going on in my life, and I don't think my company would not be appreciated here.

    The Prices of Solitude

    The damage was done
    Blood on dead grass ran dry
    Knife in hand glinted under the sun
    And all she could do was cry

    Shredded fragments of faces left
    Faces she once saw and then hid
    Strewn around her, sore with regret
    To the dark one she gave after the bid

    The bid that she wished to take back
    But could she now? Oh no
    For night has risen and the mirror now cracked
    Summer fades, in comes winter's snow

    Happiness to her was not a dream
    Nightmares and darkness was her security
    Once something good would come her way it seemed
    Time to cut ties and try to show no pity

    Alone, alone she would always be
    Friendships, smiles, that was not her way
    If only, only she saw the mask she would scream
    For this was not her, she was actually brave

    For that moment she saw the light
    And sometimes felt the warmth of that embrace
    Fear would overcome her, oh what a fright
    Friends became demons, her mind shed no grace

    The crime was committed, no honor was paid
    Loved ones, dear ones close to her now gone
    Down on the ground the knife she laid
    And no more sought for another dawn
     
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    Servant Gossip

    In the kitchen of certainty the voices milk,
    Of phrases and words that are often spilt
    The blackest of hearts will soon be exposed
    To the pack, their words will be made unknown

    The princess at hand has lost her sash
    To a lad whose heart had she latched
    This is a sin for she is to be wed
    To a prince far across the land instead

    But that is not all to be told, oh no
    It seems like the queen’s voice is like a crow
    For she has kissed the messenger sometime ago
    Whose throat was ill and a sickness he freely bestowed

    Laugh and giggle, but that’s not all to be told
    The prince’s horse, it was sold
    For a maiden never to be seen
    Oh what ever could this ever mean?

    The king is not guilty, but woe
    Many heartstrings had he pulled
    For who is to know the children is his or not
    He will perform the same deeds; his wife could rot

    Scandals, awaken
    From your prisons, be shaken
    Heads will soon be rolled
    To smacking lips, this is your toll
     
  9. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    It's been a while since I wrote a poem, so here we are back in business. I wrote this last night when I couldn't sleep.

    Stay/Go

    Should I stay?
    Should I go?
    Endure cold rain,
    Or go against the flow?

    Mend what's broken
    Take what's been spoken,
    Or flee away
    And feel ashamed?

    Words don't come easy
    Thoughts are never clear
    Nothing is breezy
    Scars have been seared

    My spirit is heavy
    Pain cracks my levy
    You are bleeding
    Wanting and needing

    I am no healer
    I have lost my way
    I am too a bleeder
    Wondering if I should go or stay
     
  10. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    You Were My Everything

    Bleeding, my heart is bleeding
    I do not understand
    Why this pain and suffering?
    Why me wanting and needing?

    Screaming, my soul is screaming
    Please help me, I'm drowning
    Is this all I deserve?
    Doomed to forever dying?

    This anguish, it wracks my frame
    I do not wish to blame
    For you were my everything
    And now everything is gone

    This hatred it burns so deep
    Release me, free me now
    Please take this blindfold from me
    Before I burn in despair

    Breathing, I'm barely breathing
    This anguish is too much
    How long will this madness last?
    When will the monsters be done?

    Falling, I feel like falling
    I wish to disappear
    Will you at last be alright?
    If I just leave you behind?

    This anguish, it wracks my frame
    I do not wish to blame
    For you were my everything
    And now everything is gone

    This hatred it freezes me
    Release me, free me now
    Please just please free me at last
    Before I freeze with regret
     
  11. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Background of this poem: Since I was last here in October of last year (and since the beginning of last year even), I went through a lot of change. I pretty much grew up, matured, but I'm still learning things. For those that I have caused pain, I am sorry. For those that caused me pain, there have been other things in my life that caused me more grief than what you did to me. It seems almost silly, even though it was so hurtful at the time. I'm pretty much coming to terms with who I am, and striving for greater things instead of keeping my head in the sand and letting pain anchor me down from growing further. But I couldn't do this alone.

    I have a second family, pretty much my adopted family, who've known me for about thirteen years now that took me under their wing and helped me out. I wanted to show them how grateful I was beyond measure, but didn't know how. So last Christmas we all decided to make handmade Christmas gifts. I ended up writing this poem, put it on fancy paper, put it in a frame, and gave it to them. They cried, then we laughed, reflected on what I've done, and it was fantastic.

    I wanted to share this on here, but it's taken a lot of courage to face this website. I don't know, I just feel a lot of anxiety and grief even though I told myself what happened here happened, and there's nothing I can really do to go back in time, rebuild friendships, start from scratch, anything. But you that knew me helped me grow too. Even though sometimes it was painful and hard, I grew. All of you that were an active role sometime in my life, you helped me. Thank you.

    I Was a Little Girl

    I was a little girl
    Who didn’t know much
    Who didn’t see love
    Who just couldn’t trust


    I was a little girl
    And you were a family
    Who opened arms of love
    To all, including me


    To the little girl who didn’t know much
    Who didn’t see love, who just couldn’t trust
    Who was afraid of a gentle, kind touch
    Who was sad, yet happiness was a must


    I was a little girl
    Who didn’t understand affection
    Who couldn’t accept help
    Who was blind, angry, no direction


    Open arms, though painful, wait
    Patient, thoughts of failing, but naught
    Through tough love, time, Savior’s touch
    Came home, forgiven, still learning


    I was a little girl
    And now a young woman
    Through gratitude give this
    Poem, for mending the rift


    You are a family
    Who knew a little girl
    Who knew what was inside
    And unwearyingly wait


    Through years will soon bloom
    And because of you
    Who knew a little girl
    Who had dreams to free


    I am a young woman
    And you are my family
    Who patched my broken heart
    Whom God will never forget

    For all eternity

     
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    That was such a touching piece. The emotion I felt pouring out of it as I read was breathtaking. In all manor of speaking, I'm left speechless. I've read a lot of poetry and if a quarter of what I've read contained as much emotion I'm sure I'd be out of tears to shed. The entire piece was powerful, though powerful might be an understatement, but one part in particular caught my eye.


    The way it was worded, the feelings it portrayed, just hit me for a ton. It's still debatable if words could describe how well written and well portrayed this piece is but I know words like amazing, fantastic, and excellent wouldn't cut it. Thank you for sharing this. It's both artistically and emotionally inspiring. I've still got the strangest, warmest feeling from reading it.


    -Nights
     
  13. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Aw! Thank you so much Nights! I really appreciate your feedback, thank you~ I'm glad it touched you.
     
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    I was a little girl
    Who didn’t understand affection
    Who couldn’t accept help
    Who was blind, angry, no direction

    From there down I could vividly see transcendence taking place and that rocked my socks. I haven't been able to capture that essence in other people's works for a while and this takes the cake easy.
     
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  15. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Aw, thank you so much nasirrich. Truth be told, I rewrote this poem at least five or six times. It's really one that I had to mull over multiple times before I declared it fully completed.
     
  16. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    I've been doing a lot of thinking lately since I started to visit this website again. I thought I put all my bad feelings to rest, but it wasn't so. I've broken down, cried, cursed the past and wished that I was different and things were different too... But then I talked to some good friends and my therapist, and they helped me gradually see that I don't need to focus on all of this. It's stupid, silly, dramatic, childish even. Things happened for a reason, and it's out of my hands. I can't dwell on it anymore. That'll only just keep me down. I need no drama or llamas...

    It's not just cause of stuff that happened here on this forum that made me think, but also my past. It's hard to explain my life story to anyone, and I didn't realize it till recently. I didn't have it exactly... normal. So not only am I trying to focus on letting go of silly stuff like this, but also the things I underwent as a kid and just recently came out of last year. I'm trying to come to terms with the demons that still haunt me and hang onto me tight, and it's a constant battle everyday. But now, for sure, I know I'm not alone like I thought I was.

    This poem I dedicate to @Hexin, @Sice, @Acє, @lockedongamer, and @Trєy... For taking the time to talk to me when you can and to help me out on my down days, talk things out with me logically, let me rant, let me cry, and just for being patient with me lately. I greatly appreciate it. I

    t's... I guess this is freestyle. I feel like I'm rusty with poems, but it came to my head and I just wrote it out the best I could.



    It's Time to Let Go

    It’s time to let go
    All the weight on me
    Heavy, steady, down
    Only I will know


    Tears that soaked sheets
    Never, ever feeling complete
    Loss, out of reach
    Anger, sorrow, pain that will soon breech


    Broken, no way to mend
    Shattered pieces, lost again
    Give up, give in, cry
    Hopeless cause, why stay alive


    It’s time to let go
    All the demons that
    Kept me company
    Kept me on the ground


    Demon called Betrayal
    Friend turned foe, stabbed me in the back
    Demon called Loneliness
    Odd ball, weird duck, no room for me

    Demons, demons, demons
    Worthlessness, Bitterness
    Anger, Isolation
    Depression, Death, and Pain

    It’s time to let go
    All the darkness inside
    To turn to the sun
    And finally see

    I am strong, I am brave
    I am loved, I am strange
    I scream, I sing
    I dream, I weep

    I cannot be what is not
    Be the perfect angel
    Be something that’s store-bought
    But be something like me

    It’s time to let go
    Of you, yes you
    The ones I held on tight
    Not giving up

    I hurt you, you hurt me
    I am to blame, but that’s okay
    No longer eye-for-eye
    Bury the hatchet, put away


    The ones that vanished
    Without saying goodbye
    I miss you, alright
    But you can’t always stay

    It’s time to let go
    All of this hate
    All of this ache
    All of this grief

    I am to live
    I know I can’t die
    I’ve already tried
    I am to write

    I am to be
    I am the one to choose
    It took this long
    I have nothing to lose