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That's not what I implied. I was speaking of people who act as if it's the greatest food on earth.

Whenever I go to a Japanese dining restaurant I don't waste my time there on ramen. I usually get something that serves as more of a delicacy. I can eat ramen anytime...it might not be of quality but it's not like I can open up a can of unagi donburi. And if I could it would probably be the nast. DX

 

Wait... What? I'm confused...

Yeah. I don't order Ramen at a Japanese Restaurant either since I can cook it at home...

Funny how I went to a Japanese grocery store before I read all this and bought everything on my list BUT ramen. They ran out of noodles :(

 

This is great, I'm putting it on my Favourites.

 

nice dude, 2 things, after DA is knocked unconcious he screams he's not with Sara...and the says there's 6 wild seven members left, but no one from the 7 died...

 

Also.. “Your sense used to be in contact with Sara,” = "Your SON used to be in contact with Sara,"? :3

Not trying to be a betch picking apart your chapter like this but yeah.. xD;

 

That was awesome.

I loved how you went into great detail as the president got his brains blown out. "his eye hung from it's socket, and black, sponge like blood ran like tears down his face". <-- Probably not the exact wording, but still. Sara is a badass in it too. Hell yes.

 

Yah, you're being way more gory this time, I think. o.o;

 

*is still questioning how liquid can be sponge-like*

BTW Lithium [there have been a lot of people getting alias changes as of late >.>] love Thirteen. avvie= <3 ~

 

My eye twitched when I read about the president's blown/ing up head... When I'm not being evil and plotting the deaths of other people, I don't want to hear about the demise of other people in detail unless it's from my friends...

 

...wait what? Common logic would tell me you wouldn't want to hear it if it was associated with your friends. X3

 

Wow... Just wow... xD

Never mind I don't want to be in it.


Great story Roxas.

 

FROM my friends. We plot the deaths of other people every day XD

And besides. We defy all logic. If you knew me from school you'd know I'm a crazy sugar high textbook weilding freshman/otaku who has very strange thoughts. Outside of school I'm just your "average" sugar high otaku who has weird thoughts.

All my friends are insane in some way. :3 That's why if I hear about a dead person from them it's normal.

 

Evidentally, I fail at reading. XD

 

lol rat, you are init no matter what.
And thanks for all the tips, everyone. I'll edit it ASAP.

Alright I made the edits. Yay!

 

Meh, there are a few ypos in the story, but overall, amazing Roxas. I'm digging he story so far, I can only hope you keep it up.

Oh, and nice choice in Alcatraz, I picked the same place for my Battle Royale fic :P

 

lawl, Hypocrisy.

..... :L

 

Can I be in it?

BTW great chapter

 

Great beginning Roxas, i love the gory detail. I can't wait to read more. :D

 

Yay! #2 is out! Whoo hoo! Will it be a little shorter than the last, because there are only 7 people instead of 30? (I don't know how else to word it)

 

So far the beginning is better in the first one. I guess it's 'cause I like the mental torture and stuff this one kinda reminds me of the Bourne Supremacy beginning for some reason. Oh well I anxiously anticipate more. Also the last one wasn't too long, this one should be just as long if it takes that to get the effect you wanted. Yup thats it.