Just Remember [ A Poem]

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Lonely Breeze, Jan 27, 2009.

  1. Lonely Breeze Merlin's Housekeeper

    Jan 25, 2009
    On a planet you call Earth.
    Hello everyone! This is the first poem I'll be posting, enjoy. By the way, please comment if I need improvements or if you like it.

    Just Remember
    The distance overwhelms the both of us now
    You want to see the world, but you don’t know how
    You can travel by car or take the last flight
    Just don’t forget to call me tonight

    Your only worry is where to go
    While behind four walls, time moves so slow
    Sitting by the corner, waiting all alone
    Just don’t forget that I’m waiting back home

    You call me one day, you keep rambling on
    About cultures, histories and times long gone
    You say you love to travel, you say you love it there
    Just don’t forget I’m still saying a prayer

    When you finally come back, you’ve already seen the world
    Though I’d love to listen, I still want to be heard
    I’m glad that you’re happy, but before you go
    Just don’t forget I still love you so
  2. Chevalier Crystal Princess

    Jan 8, 2008
    Trapped on an Island
    Wow, This is so beautiful its sheer simplicity is a beauty in itself.

    Its such a simple poem, but I think it depicted so much. I enjoyed the small moment I read it. Just goes to show, there's no need for fancy wording to make a heartwarming poem.
  3. T3F Chaser

    Mar 16, 2008
    I love it. I think its a beautiful poem! very simple, I love the rythm and it was overall awesome!