Never was the most poetic type, but hey, why not give it a try. H.O.P.E Do you ever stare out the window sometimes? Wondering if you will ever be the one to get left behind. Do you ever sit out and watch the shining stars? Hoping life will get better but things are too hard. Take a breath and take a step forward. It's just the beginning of life's great horror. Each face has eyes. Each with a unique story to hide. Don't worry if life decides to bend. Just remember to Hold On because Pain Ends.
Hold On Pain Ends I see it kinda, but I think you were focusing too much on a slight pain not the Pain I think you were trying to get out there. Each with a unique story to hide. That's one of them Hoping life will get better but things are too hard. That's another Wondering if you will ever be the one to get left behind. That's the last one I wanted to point out I do like the poem but kinda bring out the pain a bit more. Not in a bad way just to say more when talking about the pain. Hoping life will get better but things are too hard. I'm told to shoot for the stars, but can't because they say its who you are Messed up what I was trying to really get at, but that's the sort of pain. Each with a unique story to hide To scared to come out for the fear of the darkness outside Things like that, but that's just my personal preference fantastic job none the less
This is a very wonderful piece Toxic. Spelling and grammar are excellent. The rhyming scheme is terrific. A very nice poem indeed ^^
