FanFiction story help..

Since this topic is apparently about The Ninja Turtles now...

Did anybody get The Complete Season Box Sets on DVD?

 

JADEN :glomp: hehe i din't know you like ninja turtltes i got the game X3 who else got the game and boxset? :3

 

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To ZW: Listen, it's good that you're starting to write. I had the same problems when I was starting to write (well, without Bushido's constant flaming, but I did have my share of flames due to my grammar fails).

To be completely honest, your character is the standard definition of a Mary Sue. I thought for a moment that you were faking the character, but that obviously wasn't the case.

For fanfics, if you have an OC, you need to be really careful. They can't be related to 5 different characters, fall in love with the other ones who aren't related to her, be a "secret" princess, AND be a princess of heart. I don't know if she had a keyblade, too, but that just adds to it. For OC's, they need to be one of the above (minus the keyblade. That's just tacky now.) at the most. For example, you could have a girl for Riku. Or you could have her be Zack's daughter. But she can't be both, and she certainly can't be that mash of intertwining of characters you had.

As for grammar, ask you English teacher for some help in how to write a story, or look it up online. Or take a creative writing class. All of these will help A LOT with your writing.

Now, all of this is going to take a lot of time and practice to get down. I'm happy to help and/proofread if you want to, so just drop me a PM if you want.

 

okay i will!

 

I WIN


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*about to click*
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*sees "Turtles Forever"*