This is just a song I wrote one day when I just wanted to end my life. I'm talking to my ex, and telling him to just go away and that he's the cause for my death. Verse 1: Why are you here comforting me at my bedside? Just go back to her, is it too much to ask for me to die Alone in this room? I'm bleeding to death, so short of breath This is all thanks to you My heart's shattered, I've been beaten and battered Chorus: I can see the light (it's calling my name) Please end this pain tonight (I'll never be the same) I'm suffering, feeling so weak It's killing me, there's no remedy And I know you would never cry If I were to die Verse 2: This hole in my heart is expanding, don't worry, just Let it go, 'cause I didn't know this pain would be too much For me to bear That's why this knife's in my heart, yeah, I truly thought You'd give me one more chance But you pushed me away, now here I lay on my deathbed (Chorus x1) Bridge: And as my heartbeat stops, you hold me and scream, "I'm so sorry, please don't leave me" But we both know it's too late to save me now For I am gone, and she will love you (Chorus x2) I wish you still loved me I wish I could hold you one last time I wish, I wish You were still in my life
I, myself am a song writer, but I never initially write down my songs, since a lot more goes into my works than just writing it and putting a tune on it, but this is actually fairly good.
Once again very passionate. lol - my two best friends want to become song writers some day :'D Anyway, those are great lyrics ^_^
Forgive (No Way In Hell) I'm pretty pissed off today, so I decided to write a backlash song. Here's what I have. Verse 1: We used to be friends, then one day you changed You wanted to be popular while I stayed the same You'd put people down, and I'd befriend them all But in the end, you won 'cause somehow, you made my boyfriend fall for you Chorus: Now you're nothing but a lyin', cheatin', man-stealin' disgrace to the world No matter how much you bully me, you're still a stupid, insecure girl If you're gonna run your mouth, honey lemme shut it up Because there's no way in Hell I'll forgive you for what you've done Verse 2: I guess doing every guy was never enough When's that wuss gonna figure out you're nothing but a slut? You put on a fake little act, I suggest you watch your back 'Cause you never know who's gonna try and kick your ass Maybe someone like me (Repeat Chorus x1) Bridge: I guess I've seen your true colors now No one likes you anyway, so how about you not come around again And even though it's his fault, you're just making it worse! (Repeat Chorus x2)
Err...sounds like you're flaming in this poem. But I do like the strong emotion in this poem. And If you have problems, head over to the discussion section.
The first lyrics you posted could make an amazing song. I can already picture it and play it in my head. Well maybe not quite that yet but I do like the lyrics. That goes for the second one as well, with one tiny remark. In my humble opinion, this line is too long: Then again I don't know how the song is supposed to sound so it could still work well. Keep on writing!
Here's another song I'm working on called "Hey Jordan (Butterflies In My Stomach)". It's for this guy I like, although I seriously doubt he likes me back. Verse 1: I wake up, it's just another school day More homework, more crazy teachers You're the only thing that gets me by I know my ex is trying so hard to Make me jealous of his new girlfriend I'm trying to ignore him, so I can see what's been In front of me all this time Chorus 1: I probably don't stand a chance with you But it's a risk I'm willing to take These butterflies in my stomach Get worse and worse everytime you come around I think I've finally found the one Hey Jordan, hey Jordan, hey Jordan EDIT: NEW SONG! Okay, this one is not a love or hate, break-up or date kind of song. I can't really describe it, but I guess you could say it's a song about being abused. Just being lost in the world and wanting someone to love you. I'm still working on it, so if it sucks, don't be harsh. By the way, can you guys help me come up with a title? Intro: Will you please help out? Will you please help me win this fight? Verse 1: I've been abandoned, and I've been abused Nobody loves me, there's nothing I can do What did I do wrong to deserve such pain? Why am I lost in this world? Can anybody hear me? Can anybody hear me? Chorus 1: Will you please help me out? Will you please help me win this fight? I'm not begging for sympathy, just love I keep praying that you'll never leave my side
THats a nice collection of lyrisc you have there, the Deathbed I defianetly have in my head now, kinda like a female singer just rocking it out
These are very good, you have a knack for writing lyrics. I can definitely imagine these as being songs. Very emotional, Evanescence sort of songs, but that's just me. Deathbed is very well written and I came back to see these others. I love them, keep up the good work. :3
Thank you so much, everyone. I'm glad I'm getting positive feedback on these. A few people IRL say they suck, but oh well. =]
Okay, here's 3 more songs. The first song happens to be the only one with a title right now. "Nowhere Near Perfect (Just Go)" Verse 1: Is there something wrong here, Or am I just imagining everything? I could've sworn I saw you Break her heart just the other day and walk away But you didn't, no, you're too stupid To actually see what's happening Chorus 1: You're not gonna listen, so I guess you're not my problem now We're nowhere near perfect, but apparently, you wanna kick me out Of your life, of your mind, of your body and your soul And since you don't want me back, I'll just go Verse 2: Quit trying to annoy me And would you quit acting like you're the best thing that's ever happened To this freakin' place, why don't you say how you really feel to my face I guess you're so afraid of me, or you're afraid of what she'll think I'm not buyin' your big, fat lies and, And I'm not backing down from you (Repeat Chorus 1 x1) Bridge: Whatever happened to us? Whatever happened to the love we shared? You left me in the cold, and I realized you never cared about me Oh, but don't leave, if we can make this work Then I'll be so much better than her Chorus 2: You're not gonna listen, so I guess you're not my problem now We're nowhere near perfect, but apparently, you wanna kick me out Of your life, of your mind, of your body and your soul And since you don't want me back, I'll just go I'll just go as far away from here as I can When I met you, I thought I finally found a wonderful man Who would really understand what I'm going through But it seems like that man will never be you "2nd song (untitled right now)" Verse 1: And you wonder why no one loves you You kept lying to his face You're still wishing on shooting stars, 11:11, and everything else Just wishing he'll come back You can go ahead and lie, tell yourself that you're fine But it's no use He left you for her, now she's his whole world And he just hates you Chorus 1: You feel like drowning now as he pulls you down To the bottom of this bottomless pit Can anyone save you? No Can anyone help you? No, they can't Verse 2: Even if you cry a million tears He's not letting her go Everyone knows she's better than you, and you try not to listen to the cold, hard truth But it doesn't matter, 'cause you're still gonna lose And you can go ahead and lie, tell yourself that you're fine But it's no use He left you for her, now she's his whole world And there's nothing you can do (Repeat Chorus 1 x1) Bridge: Look in the mirror, are you happy with your reflection? If not, then ya gotta change, gotta change, gotta change for you Don't give up or give in or let 'em win because they want to But though you try, he'll still push you around It's hard to reach for the sky when he knocks you to the ground Just forget all about him, forget about Loving him, needing him, wanting him as he leaves you there Chorus 2: You sit alone and cry and just wanna die When you see him being happy with her You can try and save yourself But there's no way to escape from this hell You feel like drowning now as he pulls you down To the bottom of this bottomless pit Can anyone save you? No Can anyone help you? No, they can't And they won't They're not gonna rescue you or let you live "3rd song (also untitled right now)" Verse 1: Do you love ruining my life? Do you love making me cry? What the hell happened to the man I used to know? 'Cause in his place is a cocky little boy with nowhere to go Chorus: Hey, hey, hey, I'll conspire for a while On how to bring the sunshine back around Hey, hey, hey, you still try to make my smile Even though you tend to kick me when I'm down Verse 2: Don't try to keep me on a string You say you still love me, if that's true, then why did you leave? Did you know I keep dreaming about you? Did you know I'm still trying to impress you? My heart's still beating, although you tore it in two (Repeat Chorus x1) Bridge: When I see you, I wanna cry And punch you in the face at the same time No, she'll never be as great as me If only you were smart enough to see that (Repeat Chorus x2) ...Did I forget to mention that they're all about my ex?
