Anyone here good at proofereading for grammar and runon sentences?

Because apparently I cannot.

 

*Waves* Uhhh anyway uhhhhhhhhhhhhh

 

I can be pretty picky, if that's what you mean

 

HERE, SOMEONE PROOFREAD THIS FOR ME.
Warning, it has MAJOR spoilers for Professor Layton and the Unwound Future.

http://crazyclever.livejournal.com/993.html?mode=reply#add_comment

 

ow, that's harsh to look at. So many things wrong

 

PLEASE. GUIDE ME.
*begging*

 

*run-on
Yeah, I'm pretty good. Why do you ask?

 

KHV's personal spellcheck here. How may I be of assistance?

 

FOR THOSE OF YOU JUST JOINING US;
http://crazyclever.livejournal.com/993.html?mode=reply#add_comment

halp plz.

 

did you make this yourself?
And also, since I know nothing about this game, I can only help with what I see, I can't do anything about details.
Also, you should know that when you ask people for help, make sure they don't start turning your stuff into their writing, because then it might get annoying. I get that with my father when he tries to help with my papers.

 

Ooh. That's a lot. I'm going to need an actual computer for this one. iPhones don't work in this situation...

 

I did, everything is typed by my own hand.
I don't really care about that, I just need to fix the grammar and run-on sentences and whatnot. Everything else about the piece is fine.

Well, kinda want this done before 10pm (Eastern), because I have other work to do. :\

 

well, I'm not going to be able to do the whole page unless I copied then pasted onto my Open Office Writer and then commented and sent it to you in a email, but since I don't think i'll be able to get that done fast enough, I might just ask you a couple questions on here for a few things I notice.

One such question being about this. "He's a good problem solver, and can get himself out of (and into) many situations."
This sentence, I don't know, it sounds awkward. When you say "He's a good problem solver," are you talking about all types of problems, or math problems, puzzles? What type of problems solver is he? And when you say he also gets in/out of situations, what type of situations are these? It's like you're saying it as if people already know what's going on

 

It's explained in more detail in the history section.
Also... that's not really grammar or anything, is it?

 

Ohay, you use Open Office too?

 

Here's something else.

"Both of Clive's parents were killed, while Clive survived, stopped from entering the burning remains to try to find his parents by none other than Professor Layton himself."

Run-on sentence if I've ever seen one. You've basically got 2 sentences in one. My dad told me that when you want to add a comma, sometimes it's just better to put a period and make a new sentence. I'm just going to giv you an example of something else you could do with this.

"In the explosion, both of Clive's parents were killed; leaving Clive as the only survivor. Trying to go into the burning remains to find his parents, he was stopped by none other than Professor Layton himself."

Something along the lines of that. I wouldn't say use that exactly, but it's something.

yeah, I've been using it for about a year or so now. I kinda like it better than Microsoft Word and all the other stuff by them, just because they try to make things more simple, but instead it becomes more annoying. I like the layout of Open Offic more now

 

That.
Is a really good sentence. Mind if I use it?

 

Sure, go ahead if you like. I'm sure if you ask around though you'll find better. I'm not exactly known for making the greatest of sentences. My dad says I type like I talk, so a lot of my essays sound weird.
Still, like I said, feel free if you like

 

Okay, edited a bunch more stuff and reposted it.
Fingers crossed!

 

I just read it, and a lot of the history section still seemed strange. Just reading it I couldn't really understand too much of what was going on. You either had too much going on trying to explain it, or your wording was still funky. I can't really point them all out, but just your fist sentence is getting to me. Just read it an see if it sounds strange to you.

"Once upon a time, ten years before the start of Unwound Future, bitty Clive lived with his mummy and daddy in an apartment next to the Institute of Polydimensional Physics."