A few of my poems

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  1. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks and I'm going to say to you what I've said to many people who say why can't they write like me...Write with what you're feeling
     
  2. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    False memory

    Did what I remember really happen?
    They say it never did
    But in my heart I feel it’s true
    What they call false memory
    Did they just forget?
    What I remember
    Or did I just make it up?

    Okay I been thinking of something that me and my cousion did when we was kid, he use to call me mum for some reason but when I was talking to him about it he didn't remeber nor did our mum so thats where this came from
     
  3. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    That was wonderful.

    People do forget things that you remember and then try to convince you that it never happened.
     
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    I like it, you're gettin better!:)
     
  5. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks you two I can alway count on you to give me good comments
     
  6. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Here with me

    Worte this last night so enjoy

    Cold water coming and going on my bear feet
    Hash winds blowing in from the sea
    All alone looking out at the sea
    Nothing could make me more happy
    But to have my friends here with me
    If not in body then in my heart
    There all here with me
    Even if I can not see them
    There here with me
     
  7. FUZZY SWEATER Hollow Bastion Committee

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    ( claps hands and cries ) BRAVOOOOOOOOOOOOO
     
  8. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks you gald you like it and i hope you like my other poems
     
  9. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    Wow, another beautiful poem. Friends are always with you in spirit, so you are never really alone. I love the atmosphere of the poem.
     
  10. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks, can alway count on you for great comments
     
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    8/10...Your pretty good at writing poems...
     
  12. ...::/final_falling\::... King's Apprentice

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    *crys*that was beautifal!(spelt it wrong i know)
     
  13. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks you two hope you like my other poems
     
  14. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Star light Moon light

    Feeling the cold wind on my skin
    Looking up at the start filled sky at night
    Star light in the midnight sky
    With the moon light along side them all
    There so far away from me
    But like my friends I know they are there
    Star light, moon light
    Not always there
    But I always know where to find them
     
  15. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    That was beautiful. You write directly from your heart. I have such a poetic and sensitive forum sister.
     
  16. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Wow did take you long to reply ha ha, anyways gald you like it
     
  17. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Two Sides of me

    Time for you to find out about my mad side haha

    Peaceful like the sea slowly coming and going
    Chaos like a fire of war raging
    A caring heart,
    A ruthless fighter
    Two side of me
    But both the same at heart

    ...Yeah I could of done better
     
  18. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    Brilliant. I can see you standing up for what you believe in!
     
  19. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks I knew you'd like it
     
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    Another good one. The beginning is a bit confusing (don't ask me why, just thought it was when I read it first time) and flows a lil less than ur others but it's stil great!
     
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