This is just the beginning of the story and i will add more as we go along but for now this is how it all starts... Shadow Fox It was a normal day for Jack Gray, a normal 10 year old boy. He walked home from school with his head pulled forward as the wind and rain swept against him, his blonde hair flat against his head. He had gotten to the door of his house and turned the handle as there was a burst of celebration. His mother came to the door to him and said “Jack your dad has just put away the major crime boss Thomas Zicony!!!†she said hugging him. He went into the sitting room to see his father in his suit with a couple of his closest friends from work. His father looked at him then said “See jack, no matter what those people say, crime can be fought out of this city. Scumbags like Thomas Zicony try to rule this city by fear and we taking them down one by one. This battle will go on after all of us are gone but if we keep at it, no crime lord or drug dealer will rule this city again†he said to his son Jack as jack began to think of his parents and how cool they were to him. Jacks father always had stubble on him, mostly because he always stayed up late. He had short brown hair and a steely look in his eye’s which we dark blue. His mother was beautiful with long blonde hair and had brown eye’s. Jack was a bit of both of his parents. He had spiky, blonde hair, with dark blue eye’s. He aspired to be just like his father when he was older, the District Attorney of gataron and become well respected by the community. His father had been the DA for four years now and unlike his predecessors he was incorruptible. His father then said “How about we all go out to get something to eat at that new restaurant just up the street†and his colleagues and his family agreed. They all put on there coats and went down the street and went into the restaurant. A white convertible was driving along the street alongside them with a group of man inside it partying. They just looked at them with ease. They went into the restaurant and a lot of anecdotes and laughing later they exited the restaurant and they saw the same guys partying as they drove up and down in a convertible. It was very weird, thought jack. It had been raining the whole time and they hadn’t put up the roof, they looked very pale also, as if they weren’t getting much sleep. â€They must must’ve had too much alcohol†he thought to himself. When they had gotten home it was dark and everyone went to bed. The partiers had apparently gone silent but before he had gone to bed but as he looked out the window of there house the car was parked across the street from them but he couldn’t see if there was anyone in there because the roof was up. Jack was suspicious but told himself “they’re probably just relatives of the neighbours who had a wild night†he told himself out loud and then went to sleep. He woke up the next day to bad weather to most people but what he considered great weather. It was dark and rainy. He walked up the street as he went to school and the guys he noticed in the convertible were there in the convertible again, this time with the roof of there car up and they were looking at his house. He just kept walking to the school… He was just sat in the class room as usual letting all his daydreams fill his head and leaving all the knowledge leave his head. He spent six hours of just sitting in a comatose state until he was finally allowed to go home and it was still miserable outside but he didn’t care. He walked home and saw the men paying some homeless guy as he went in home. â€That’s weird†he thought. He watched television for awhile with his father and mother until there was a commotion outside and suddenly the door was being charged down. “Upstairs now†said jacks father as the went up the stairs. Jacks father went to look through the window to see the homeless bursting down the door with the guys in the convertible. Jacks father grabbed something from under the bed. He went down stairs and his mother followed. Jack watched from the top of the stairs. His father pulled out at them a double barrel shotgun. Jacks father was ready for when they came in the door. They broke down the door and they both shot his father at the same time and then a split second they shot his mother. The homeless person was standing in the background. The three guys from the white convertible wiped the hilt of their guns. â€Here†the first guy said to the homeless and they gave him the guns. â€Take what you want from the house or their bodies†said the second guy. The third guy noticed jack at the top of the stairs. He was just kneeling down at the top of the chair looking down on what had happened. The third guy then said “leave the boy. He’s too young to die yet†he said as he walked out the door and the first person looked down on the bodies “That was from Zicony†and he left along with the second person. Jack went down to his over his parents as the homeless person seemed to pity jack so he just left him with the word “Sorry†and went without taking anything. After that he just completely blanked out…. Jack woke up in an orphanage in a bed in an old room with a woman sitting in a chair near the door. She had a kind face with relatively short hair and blue eye’s. As jack saw her she came over to his bed side and said “hello, my name is Rebecca and you were brought here about a week ago after….what happened. We will be taking care of you until you are 18. When your 18 you’ll get all of your parents large sums of money and your father colleagues have pulled some strings so that you can go to the top place to study law in the country, GCU, Gataron City University. I understand if you don‘t want to talk to me so I‘ll leave the room for you to gather your thoughts†and jack appreciated it. He got out of bed. He went to the exterior of the building to see that it was a huge green Georgian house in the country-side. He went back inside to look around. He got to the living room where he saw about 20 other kids. He just walks in and looks around and they all look at him as if he has two heads. Only one of the even decided to acknowledge him. The ten year old boy came over. He had side-cut black hair and green eye’s. He had a pair of jeans and a red hoody on him. He said “Hi, my name is Wesley†he said to jack and jack replied “my name is Jack†and he knew then he had made a friend….. …Jack got out of his bed. Wesley was still asleep. Jack had always been up before Wesley ever since Wesley had asked to move in with jack when they were ten. â€I can’t believe it’s been five years since he had come here…five years since his life was changed…â€and slipped on his black jeans and then he slipped under his bed seeing the dust under here. He pushed out what was under there and put them on top of his bed. He went back under the bed again and began to do push ups with his bed as he always did at 7AM.This was one of the things that Rebecca wouldn’t allow him to do. She allowed him to do pull ups on the bar on his door, push up’s in the sitting room and weights. All the weights he had were in a case on his bed. Rebecca didn’t think it was good for him to exert himself like that. â€I will destroy crime in gataron†he said in his head as he did the push up’s with his bed. He slipped out from under his bed and threw on a black t-shirt and began to do pull ups on the door. Wesley was still asleep and it was 7:30AM.He start his pull ups and Jane and Rose passed and looked at him and giggled as usual even thought there rooms were at the other side of the house and so was the sitting room. He got off the bar on his door and just sat on his bed for a minute until he decided to slide all the stuff on his bed back under his bed. He saw two old newspaper clippings slip out of one of the boxes. The first read “Zicony realised on insufficient evidenceâ€. Jack knew why that had happened. Zicony had many of his people in the police force along with every place else. The second one read “homeless man convicted of killing john and Celia Grayâ€. Jack also knew why this had happened too. At the time that his parents were shot by those men they wiped them and gave them to the homeless person. He protested at the hearing that it wasn’t the homeless person but the judge just said that he was still in shock. The judge was working for zicony. He pushed the two newspaper clippings away from him and walked out of the room and walked down the hall. He itched the stubble on his jaw as he went into the kitchen and ate a bowl cornflakes while watching the news as Rebecca came in door. “Hey Rebecca†he said in a surly drawn out voice. He had gone over board yesterday. He and Wesley went running all yesterday and Wesley made a bet that he could do ten laps between the house and he pushed it too much just for €10. “Hey jack. Pushed yourself too hard I see†she said as she grabbed a chair and listened to the news with him, her blonde hair seemed to be wiry this morning. Jack finished his cornflakes and decided he still was hungry so gets out a knife and butters some toast. They listened to the news and the newscaster began “Thomas Zicony, famed business man in pharmaceuticals and medicines has developed a drug that suppresses the human need to eat or drink. The drug supplies the body with what it needs for three to four days. This man is a miracle worker†and at this jacks hand flew from his toast and towards the television. He threw the knife at the button to change the channel. It had switched over to a documentary on super weapons of the 17th century. He left the room and went out to go for a walk outside. He saw the girls. “Hey, Rose, Jane, want to go for a walk†and they went without another word. He then saw bell. Her long blonde hair swept with the wind. He wanted to ask her did she want to come but he didn’t have the nerve and just waved “hi†to her and went off talking with the girls. By the time he had got back from the walk it was noon. He saw bell again and decided to go over and talk to her. â€Hey bell, what’s upâ€. She replied “Nothing much, I haven’t seen you around muchâ€. “Well, I’ve been busy with Wesley lately†he said. “We should really hang around more. We hung around much more when we were younger†she said smiling, looking up and bit her lip as if to remember the events that happened so long ago. They walked in home at the same time. They separated as they reached the hall and he saw Wesley. He called “Hey Wes, as usual you were asleep most of the day. I just went for a walk with the girls. What’ve you been up to since I left?†he asked looking at the door behind him. “Well as you’ve stated I’ve been sleeping, I got some cornflakes and then looked at the news†he said. “I was wondering if you wanted to go to the movies. We could bring the girls and Rebecca as well and we can go see that new action adventure movie “Clean up Man†about an assassin who’s trying to clean up the mess started by his former boss†he said thinking of the possibilities. They both went into the living room where Rebecca and the girls were. Jack asked “you girls want to go to the movies? How about we go to see Clean up man?†and bell responded before all of them “That’s a great idea†she said enthusiastically. “Sure, why not†said Rebecca as she got up. That night they all went into the city and they were all having a laugh as they strode along the street during the night. They reached the cinema and saw the clean up man. He thought that it was quiet a good movie in his opinion. They left the cinema all nice and happy and full of talk. Bell had gone right alongside jack and she was holding oto his arm and he liked it. They had turned a corner. Suddenly out of nowhere an armed man sprung out in front of them. “Give me your money†he shouted at Rebecca who rushed to take her purse and threw it to him and he shot her right in the abdomen and she fell as he ran. As the man ran he dropped a card for Thomas Zicony pharmaceutical company.
He woke up the next day to bad weather to most people but what he considered great weather. It was dark and rainy. He walked up the street as he went to school and the guys he noticed in the convertible were there in the convertible again, this time with the roof of there car up and they were looking at his house. He just kept walking to the school… He was just sat in the class room as usual letting all his daydreams fill his head and leaving all the knowledge leave his head. He spent six hours of just sitting in a comatose state until he was finally allowed to go home and it was still miserable outside but he didn’t care. He walked home and saw the men paying some homeless guy as he went in home. â€That’s weird†he thought. He watched television for awhile with his father and mother until there was a commotion outside and suddenly the door was being charged down. “Upstairs now†said jacks father as the went up the stairs. Jacks father went to look through the window to see the homeless bursting down the door with the guys in the convertible. Jacks father grabbed something from under the bed. He went down stairs and his mother followed. Jack watched from the top of the stairs. His father pulled out at them a double barrel shotgun. Jacks father was ready for when they came in the door. They broke down the door and they both shot his father at the same time and then a split second they shot his mother. The homeless person was standing in the background. The three guys from the white convertible wiped the hilt of their guns. â€Here†the first guy said to the homeless and they gave him the guns. â€Take what you want from the house or their bodies†said the second guy. The third guy noticed jack at the top of the stairs. He was just kneeling down at the top of the chair looking down on what had happened. The third guy then said “leave the boy. He’s too young to die yet†he said as he walked out the door and the first person looked down on the bodies “That was from Zicony†and he left along with the second person. Jack went down to his over his parents as the homeless person seemed to pity jack so he just left him with the word “Sorry†and went without taking anything. After that he just completely blanked out….
Jack woke up in an orphanage in a bed in an old room with a woman sitting in a chair near the door. She had a kind face with relatively short hair and blue eye’s. As jack saw her she came over to his bed side and said “hello, my name is Rebecca and you were brought here about a week ago after….what happened. We will be taking care of you until you are 18. When your 18 you’ll get all of your parents large sums of money and your father colleagues have pulled some strings so that you can go to the top place to study law in the country, GCU, Gataron City University. I understand if you don‘t want to talk to me so I‘ll leave the room for you to gather your thoughts†and jack appreciated it. He got out of bed. He went to the exterior of the building to see that it was a huge green Georgian house in the country-side. He went back inside to look around. He got to the living room where he saw about 20 other kids. He just walks in and looks around and they all look at him as if he has two heads. Only one of the even decided to acknowledge him. The ten year old boy came over. He had side-cut black hair and green eye’s. He had a pair of jeans and a red hoody on him. He said “Hi, my name is Wesley†he said to jack and jack replied “my name is Jack†and he knew then he had made a friend…..
Very nice, I'l keep my eyes on this. There are a few grammar errors, such as 'Jacks dad' instead of 'Jack's dad', but really it's no biggie.
…Jack got out of his bed. Wesley was still asleep. Jack had always been up before Wesley ever since Wesley had asked to move in with jack when they were ten. â€I can’t believe it’s been five years since he had come here…five years since his life was changed…â€and slipped on his black jeans and then he slipped under his bed seeing the dust under here. He pushed out what was under there and put them on top of his bed. He went back under the bed again and began to do push ups with his bed as he always did at 7AM.This was one of the things that Rebecca wouldn’t allow him to do. She allowed him to do pull ups on the bar on his door, push up’s in the sitting room and weights. All the weights he had were in a case on his bed. Rebecca didn’t think it was good for him to exert himself like that. â€I will destroy crime in gataron†he said in his head as he did the push up’s with his bed. He slipped out from under his bed and threw on a black t-shirt and began to do pull ups on the door. Wesley was still asleep and it was 7:30AM.He start his pull ups and Jane and Rose passed and looked at him and giggled as usual even thought there rooms were at the other side of the house and so was the sitting room. He got off the bar on his door and just sat on his bed for a minute until he decided to slide all the stuff on his bed back under his bed.
He saw two old newspaper clippings slip out of one of the boxes. The first read “Zicony realised on insufficient evidenceâ€. Jack knew why that had happened. Zicony had many of his people in the police force along with every place else. The second one read “homeless man convicted of killing john and Celia Grayâ€. Jack also knew why this had happened too. At the time that his parents were shot by those men they wiped them and gave them to the homeless person. He protested at the hearing that it wasn’t the homeless person but the judge just said that he was still in shock. The judge was working for zicony. He pushed the two newspaper clippings away from him and walked out of the room and walked down the hall. He itched the stubble on his jaw as he went into the kitchen and ate a bowl cornflakes while watching the news as Rebecca came in door. “Hey Rebecca†he said in a surly drawn out voice. He had gone over board yesterday. He and Wesley went running all yesterday and Wesley made a bet that he could do ten laps between the house and he pushed it too much just for €10. “Hey jack. Pushed yourself too hard I see†she said as she grabbed a chair and listened to the news with him, her blonde hair seemed to be wiry this morning. Jack finished his cornflakes and decided he still was hungry so gets out a knife and butters some toast.
They listened to the news and the newscaster began “Thomas Zicony, famed business man in pharmaceuticals and medicines has developed a drug that suppresses the human need to eat or drink. The drug supplies the body with what it needs for three to four days. This man is a miracle worker†and at this jacks hand flew from his toast and towards the television. He threw the knife at the button to change the channel. It had switched over to a documentary on super weapons of the 17th century.
He left the room and went out to go for a walk outside. He saw the girls. “Hey, Rose, Jane, want to go for a walk†and they went without another word. He then saw bell. Her long blonde hair swept with the wind. He wanted to ask her did she want to come but he didn’t have the nerve and just waved “hi†to her and went off talking with the girls. By the time he had got back from the walk it was noon. He saw bell again and decided to go over and talk to her. â€Hey bell, what’s upâ€. She replied “Nothing much, I haven’t seen you around muchâ€. “Well, I’ve been busy with Wesley lately†he said. “We should really hang around more. We hung around much more when we were younger†she said smiling, looking up and bit her lip as if to remember the events that happened so long ago. They walked in home at the same time. They separated as they reached the hall and he saw Wesley. He called “Hey Wes, as usual you were asleep most of the day. I just went for a walk with the girls. What’ve you been up to since I left?†he asked looking at the door behind him. “Well as you’ve stated I’ve been sleeping, I got some cornflakes and then looked at the news†he said. “I was wondering if you wanted to go to the movies. We could bring the girls and Rebecca as well and we can go see that new action adventure movie “Clean up Man†about an assassin who’s trying to clean up the mess started by his former boss†he said thinking of the possibilities. They both went into the living room where Rebecca and the girls were. Jack asked “you girls want to go to the movies? How about we go to see Clean up man?†and bell responded before all of them “That’s a great ide€ she said enthusiastically. “Sure, why not†said Rebecca as she got up.
That night they all went into the city and they were all having a laugh as they strode along the street during the night. They reached the cinema and saw the clean up man. He thought that it was quiet a good movie in his opinion. They left the cinema all nice and happy and full of talk. Bell had gone right alongside jack and she was holding onto his arm and he liked it. They had turned a corner. Suddenly out of nowhere an armed man sprung out in front of them. “Give me your money†he shouted at Rebecca who rushed to take her purse and threw it to him and he shot her right in the abdomen and she fell as he ran. As the man ran he dropped a card for Thomas Zicony pharmaceutical company.
