This is a poem I wrote about two years ago (March 1st, 2010) which I remembered from browsing around my DeviantArt today. I though you guys might be able to enjoy it... Hopeless Feeling something, not sure what it is Is it normal? Is it the same? Why does she feel blame? Something is different, but unsure of what, As lonely as a poor mutt If only... Will they approve? Or would she have to move? Something is not right, this feeling Is kept from revealing, Uneasily reeling, If only... If she keeps this inside, oh How can she decide? Is it real? Hard to conceal Nothing can heal this pain she feels If only they knew, How her feelings grew If only... Harder it was to conceal Curiosity bursts out without restraint The voice faint, Tainted memories overflowed, An open abode The heart, not baring to depart If only... Hopelessness overtakes the weak They can't do anything about it These feelings, surreal Hard to reveal and impossible to conceal If only... A confused feeling, was it wrong? It cannot be hidden for long If only... They love her, they care for her If only it was so easy. Under the pressure, Can't take it anymore Hopeless... So hopeless this feeling Hard to reveal and impossible to conceal She loves you Can you feel it? If only you knew how much she feels for you
Wow, I love it, the way you used Rhyming internally, externally, and unevenly, I think it is a great way to shake up what we consider to be poetry. Thank you for posting this, it's amazing.
The whole poem is lovely my dear,it flows really well,and really captures the imagination. The way it is laid out makes it easy to read,and while reading it you can really feel just what the poem is about. Very good work sweetheart,and I do hope you gift us with some more beautiful work <3~
