I really enjoyed this chapter. I read through it three times and didn't find any mistakes. You have a lot more detail than before and you keep people interested by making ambiguous statements. Keep it up :)
First paragraph a couple lines in, you made the mistake Dariuss Seabastian, and Annabelle
This is getting really good. You have a longer chapter with more detail and the plot is getting deeper.
I don't know if you should have told us that Seabastion is a werewolf yet. You could have made it seem like Darius was one, or even Annabelle.
When you went to add to your previous comment, it doubled what you already had instead of just adding onto it. You may want to fix it to avoid confusion.
He can see into reality? That would explain how he knew when the dreamers were getting there.
Oh really? Tell me oh great demon slayer, when was the last time you defeated a demon?
Haha, What was the last demon you defeated?
Your second paragraph has "Seabastian, like Darius, was spirited away had been in his sleep." It should either be, "Seabastion, like Darius, had been spirited away in his sleep." or "Seabastion, like Darius, was spirited away in his sleep."
Oh man... I'm scared
So what made Darius decide to tell Annabelle about himself?
and i do that how?
You know i have no idea how to do that.
Oh thanks... :P
Feedback I meant to post this earlier, so I'm not sure if you fixed it but you misspelled fashion. Other than that it looks good.
Hey, see I actually got on
