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I like that this feels more fluid than some of your past works. I really can't nit-pick at anything, because it's all good. It's shown me a part of disney that isn't all fun and games. And you finally returned to writing.

Most of your works are so dark, so passionate. It's not strange to see a moment of happiness being turned 360 into a darker and deadlier piece. I really think like Destined in regard to the fact that you've got this down.

Yet, I found some sentences somewhat choppy. It felt somewhat forced at the beginning, and it felt a bit off. I'm guessing this was you cutting some things. It's nice to practice different things, and after a while you'll get better at it. Just remember that your writing reflects you. I've always thought that, because they are very strong works, yet beautiful all the same. I've always loved that about your writing.

Not as amazing as other works, but still in the same vein, and you got the dialogue down very nicely.

That's really something I don't wish on anyone because it's really painful. But, if you must go through it, then at least you have your dog at home, and can nurture and love him in his final moments.

I think DPwolf is giving you the best advice. I really hope that pain diminishes over time. And about getting a new dog, it doesn't have to be right away, but you should really consider it. This being said, we know a new dog can never replace the one that will pass away but it can establish a new place and bring happiness.

This is really lovely. I like how you blended everything and the colors. You made the right choice by washing them out. I'm guessing you used the texturizer for the background? Also the text is simple, yet you know how to work it so it looks great.

One thing is that the red in the grunge that is blended with the rainbow doesn't have the same shade of red. And the pink grass needs to be blended in the roots. Slight details that I think most won't notice, but still should be pointed out.

If she ignores it or not, there's nothing I can do. It's her decision if she wants to write badly or not, and thus ignore it or not. But I know that my decision wasn't to go all out on caps and rudely to make my point. Whatever she decides won't affect me, it's her decision. And if next time she comes out showing her writing with no progress...well, then it's her choice.

I'll just choose to turn a blind eye or something.

Why don't you cool off somewhere, you know this just makes you look like an exaggerated idiot. You don't have to read this if you don't want to. So excuse me, Bushido, since you so obviously know how to make a perfect story.

Now, Zexion's real wife. I recommend you reconsider, re-read, and examine your story. While Bushido is being out of place, he is right in the fact that this isn't very original. Writing well takes quite a bit of effort. I advise you read some good fan-fictions and see how they integrate their characters and plot into an already established world.

Mary sues, in this case, your character is kinda born into the lap of protagonism. It's like she's everything perfect and everyone wants to be her friend, everyone wants to love her. Not only that she has [Insert power/Weapon/Ultimate death move] that makes her seem like she's the best. If you can see the picture shown by inuyasha with a face, you can see the girl has violet eyes and red hair, just to make her look outstanding. She's related to the main plot by whatever convoluted idea the author gets, and is instantly thrown into being a main character.

Doesn't that sound a bit...well, a lot like what you're thinking for your fan-fiction? '

Also, if you really want to write something, you really should practice grammar and spelling. There's also a nice guide created in the creativity corner here. It's written simple for anyone to understand, so you should check it out.

Dalk this is really sad. I can't say I can empathize with what you're feeling at the moment, because I've never gone through that. But I can still sympathize. It's never easy losing someone, and for a while it may feel like you've come to a stand still that, in itself, is also okay. No one can expect you to go on without first letting everything sink in. Now's the time to slow down, and think on these events. Afterwards, the only thing you can do is accept them, and move on. But, as Cariad said, time helps circumstances heal us. It's up to you to decide how much time you need. In the end we can only continue living...

While I think two members offering support is enough, I offer myself if you want to talk. Just send me a PM or catch me on MSN.

Oh look, it seems this is alive. I guess I'm up for it. Anyone interested, just say the word. I don't mind starting, or ending, either one is fine.

I'm not so sure, in fact, I daresay I'm sure what you're saying isn't right. If we were only looking for lyrics, we could easily dispose of the melody of a song, and just go poetry-esque. When we buy a CD, we aren't expecting a half-baked thing, and thus some artists rely on auto-tune. Whereas some just over-use it. Lyrics are important, but so is the talent, and the melody. What is the purpose of being a singer when you can just use a program to "fix" your voice? It's been a help, sure, but it's overuse has only been a doorway for any no-talent to enter the industry. Too much of everything is always a problem, and this is no exception.

As for Ester Dean. It's a catchy song, but that's all. It's nothing original or outstanding. It's just good, and very colorful. But, the song is really dominated by Chris Brown, since he seems to overpower her. I checked info on Ester Dean, and it seems like she's been trying, and now she's finally gotten her chance after songwriting in the background for a while. I think she at least deserves to release her first album before any deliberation.

She can make it, added she starts acquiring her place among things and coaches her voice. We'll see how she fares.

It's his family we are talking about here. And by the information given, it seems like his parents are actually comprehensive, and are willing to listen. I'm not really sure there's a need to go into "war" with them.

Crisp, you should just be plain with them, but still courteous and kind. You should tell them your beliefs and why you decide to be an atheist. Tell them that they shouldn't try to convert you, and that you hope that you can still keep living as you have been normally. It's really about going calmly and steady. This doesn't guarantee that they'll go with it, but at least it lessens the friction.

Omg, What? you are the cutest thing! I could just squish you all day. You seem so hug-able. I would pull on your whiskers, and play with your fangs... No, but seriously, those walruses are so cute

Misty you naughty, naughty girl.

This is great. I read non-stop since the third part, and it is steady and flowing nicely. Like Catch the Rain said, I feel you can put other writers here to shame. It's really a great story you have here, and I do hope you continue on with it.

Overall, I saw some spelling and grammar errors: the he's and she's; sometimes you used he for a girl, and vice-versa. The other things are commas, you aren't using them in some places where they are necessary.

As for the plot, I can see how these characters have a connection, and a very peculiar one. It would also be nice to know exactly what will happen with the coin, and the demon thingy. I think you should do at least one more chapter where you mix goodbyes with rising action. I think it's time for decisions and more explanations.

Cuidado, cuidado
que mi corazon esta colgando
en tus manos.

The comments xDDD "you have disgraced our family, son"

But, it's so true...barely anyone buys music anymore.

For these kinds of things it's kind of hit-or-miss. The main point is interpreting the theme we are given in the most passionately driven and intricately versed way. The point here is trying to do something good, connecting with the theme to create something great. I encourage you to keep trying. Everyone's bound to win at some point.

Anyways, speaking of entering. Can I judge this one, Styx? I'd really love to do so. I know you do this normally, but could I please do it this once?

Oh, so you finally did it...Yeah, I was checking to see if you'd do something to revive it now and then. But, I still must say that I pass by this place rather scarcely because it is so lost inside the thread. Most of the time there was nothing to do.

I wish to be a member. Please remove Forgotten Hymn out of the list, and add me as a current member. I'll try harder to keep visiting. Since you're new at this, then I've no trouble helping you if you have any inquiries, or need help elaborating something. In fact, I'd like this to be more active too. If you're really serious about this, I could share my ideas with you, so that you can at least think on them, and who knows? Maybe you'll cook up something good.