This is my new Fan Fic! please tell me about my mistakes... :) Chapter 1 Larxene roamed around the castle looking for something to do...She was very bored and all the nobodies weren't home...they had gone to the beach...but Larxene hated going to the beach.... "Hmm..What to do," she thought... She looked around her room for something to do...All she found was a stack of paper and a pencil... She sat down and looked at the paper...thinking of what to do...She thought of a special someone...The guy who made her laugh, who made her smile...the guy she had feelings for... "How can I love him...I have no feelings..." she said sadly...She tapped her pencil on the desk in her rom. She's sat down and started writing...She didn't know what she would write...She just...started, and couldn't stop... She kept writing and writing...until she heard a big slam downstairs... "LARXENE! WE"RE HOME!" Demyx yellled... "What are they doing back so early?" she thought...She loked down at the note and shw knew she had to hide it...She folded it and put it in her coat pocket...Demyx burst through the door... "Hey Larxene!" He said smiling...She gave a furious look... "HOW MANY TIMES DO I GOTTA TELL YOU TO STAY OUTTA MY ROOM!" she yelled loudly. She shoved (hence the word SHOVED) him out of her room and she walked out of the room...Demyx had fell to the floor once she shoved him... "What have we kearned?" She asked Demyx... "To stay out of your room," he said rubbing his head... "Good little Demyx!" she said teasingly.He stood up and walked down the hall...She walked back in her room, shut the door and locked it... Beofre Demyx walked all the way down, he turned around and looked at her door, then saw something in the floor...He ran over, picked it up...then read it.... He ran down the hall and into Axel's room... Larxene looked at the floor, then back at her desk... She walked over and reached into her pocket for her poem...It wasn't there...She fretted...She searched her other pocket...it was missing... "Oh no!" she thought...She looked in the floor and througout her room...IT had fallen out...She opened the door and looked on the ground....It wasn't there... "DEMYX!" she yelled.... Demyx came out of Axel's room alongside Axel... "What do you want?" he asked...She gave him a furious face... "What did you do with my poem?" she asked furiously... "What poem?" Demyx asked as if he knew nothing.... "You know what! I dropped it out in the halway and now it's gone!" she yelled...She stared at Axel who was blushing... "Did he read it?" she thought... Demyx was staring at LArxene who was staring at Axel... "Listen Larxene, I haven't seen your poem and I never will...Just leave us alone," Demyx said... Larxene looked at Demyx....For that instant...she believed him... She turned around and walked back into her room... "Where could it be?" she asked herself
poor Axel! Good Story! I like them....Message me whenever the next chapter comes out! please!
Can't wait for the next chapter...you give really good detail..
Sce13 says, "Hi!"
*gives sad face* please can I join?
Can I join? PLease!!! Name: Sce13 (Sarah) Age: 14 Gender: Female Appearance: Pirates of the Carribeian pajamas Personality: I love to tell joke, dance...Partay! I'm outgoing, I'm neat, and I love to flirt... (hehe...) *hey boys!* Interests: RIKU!!!!!!!! (he's too hot for Kingdom Hearts) Other: ummm...just message me if you wanna know anything else about me...
okay then...I'm going to the dance with him and I'll ask him then...mmks?
none taken...I believe that 6th grade through your sophmore year is puppy love...as you get older, you will understand it more..! I get it...but I feel like I could hug Justin right now and actually tell him I never should've let him go and that I want him back... I'm not being picky or anything...but I've been single all year long because I don't know if I love him or not...but now I do know...
Don't feel bad...I thought he was 16...seriously...and I thought Larxene was about 17 too...
The whole reason I broke up with him was because I wasn't sure if i really loved him...but I asked him to the 8th grade lual (idk how to spell that)..only 8th graders are allowed to come and he said yes...I asked him if he would dance with me there and he said yes...I'm worried....
I'm thinking of datin my ex and I need some advice...I went out with him last year and he's REALLY Cool... Here's a pic of us 2gether!: IS he cute or what??? *don't answer that! lol* boy! you should've seen my boyfriend before that...In a minute I will show you after I get it uploaded, lol...
That question haunts my every waking moment.... *gives mad emo face* Oh, and you spell his name Xemnas....
Please don't take this the wrong way, but you're chapters are too short, not enough detail, and you aren't allowed to post any polls in the creativity cornor... sorry, but it's against the rules... You're really good at writing these stories...just try to follow my advice....I use to suck until someone had the nerve to TELL me....I hope you write more...these are awesome!
Chapter 1: http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=11974 Chapter 2: http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=11988 Chapter 3: http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?t=12007
Chapter 3 “There’s nothing we can do Roxas…We just have to wait for the ambulance…†Vexen said trying to calm him down… “God I’ll be dead by then!†Roxas yelled… “Hold on Roxas...I’m going to check your back and see where the fracture is…†Vexen said… Vexen lifted the back of his shirt up and started poking on his back… “Tell me when it hurts,†Vexen said… Vexen poked about 3/4s a way down his back until he screamed… “Does it hurt here?†Vexen asked… “Yeah,†Roxas said calmly... “Okay, we are going to roll you over Roxas…It’s not too bad of a fracture…†Vexen said… “Okay,†Roxas said with his eyes closed calmly… Vexen rolled his body over while Larxene supported Roxas’s leg. Axel sat down behind Roxas to hold him up… “Uh…Vexen,†Larxene said shockingly… “What?†Vexen asked… Larxene showed him her hand, which had a little blood on it… Vexen looked at the back of Roxas’s leg, and it was drenched in blood… “They better hurry,†Vexen thought… About 8 minutes later… “Do you hear something?†Larxene asked… She looked down the highway and saw an ambulance coming towards them… “Finally they’re here…†Axel said… “Axel,†Roxas said quietly… “What?†Axel asked… “I feel dizzy,†Roxas said while putting his hand on his forehead… “Vexen…Roxas said he’s feeling dizzy,†Axel said… Vexen looked at Roxas, who was pale… “He’s probably lost too much blood,†Vexen said… The ambulance parked on the side and brought out the stretcher... “Axel…†Roxas said weakly… Roxas then passed out… “Roxas?†Axel yelled… Two men came up and put a board on the ground and lifted Roxas carefully on to it, then on the stretcher… “Roxas please wake up,†Roxas heard… “Who….who are you?†Roxas asked… “Please wake up…Please…†He heard the voice say again… “I think…it’s too late sir…†Roxas heard someone else say… Roxas heard a flat line on a heart scan… “Roxas isn’t dead!†he heard Axel shout… “Axel?†Roxas asked…He opened his eyes and saw about 3 doctors and Axel… “Axel?†Roxas asked… Roxas could barley see, but he saw his self in a white room on a white bed… “Roxas!†Axel yelled… Axel walked over to his bedside and put his hand on the guard rail next to him… “He’s alive,†one of the doctors say in shock… “It’s not possible!†another said…The heart scan started beeping… “Well, now it is…You can survive through anything can’t you?†Axel asked… “Yeah,†Roxas said weakly before collapsing… “Roxas? Roxas? What’s wrong with him?†Axel questioned… “He will be fine, but it is best that you go home…We will call you when he is ready for departure…†a doctor said… “I guess it’s the only thing I can do…â€Axel said…He stood up and walked out of the room, then teleported back to the castle… Axel was greeted by Xigbar… “Is he dead yet?†Xigbar asked… Axel looked at Xigbar with so much hatred… “Don’t say that! Don’t EVER say that!†Axel screamed… “Well is he okay?†Xigbar asked… Axel stared at Xigbar… “He is fine…He’s doing a lot better now, but he won’t be able to skate board or anything for a while… ya know?†Axel asked “Yeah…when is he coming back?†Xigbar asked… “Sometime soon I hope,†Axel said. *3 Days later* The telephone rings… “Hello?†Axel answered… “Hey Axel…They’re releasing me,†Roxas said… “Oh man! How are you doing about your injuries? Do you have stitches? A cast? Tell me!†Axel pleaded… “I have 5 stitches below my eye; a metal plate in my lower back with 6 screws and a cast because I snapped my bone in two…so I was pretty messed up…†Roxas said… “Do you need me to pick you up?†Axel asked… “Yeah, I do…†Roxas answered… “Alrighty, I’ll be there to pick you up…†Axel said then hung up… “Roxas is coming home?†Larxene asked popping out of no where… “Yeah, I’m picking him up…†Axel said… “Cool…if you need me, I’ll be at the skate park, okay?†she asked… “Okay…†Axel said… Axel then teleported to the hospital lobby. Axel walked into the lobby and saw Roxas in a wheel chair with the stitches s eye and in a cast… “Hey Roxas,†Axel waved as he walked up to him… “Hey there Axel,†Roxas waved… “You ready to go home?†Axel asked. “You bet…†Roxas said… Roxas got on his crutches and they walked out and teleported home… Once the two reached the castle, everyone wanted to see Roxas and sign his cast... The phone rang… “I’ll get it,†Vexen said… Vexen went down stairs to answer the phone… Everyone heard Vexen on the phone but couldn’t make out what he said…But they did hear… “Are you kidding me?†as loud as Vexen could yell… They heard Vexen run back into the room… Once he opened the door, he said… “Larxene broke her foot,â€â€¦ “Not again!†Everyone else yelled at the same time… The End :D
April here...the 22nd and on Earth Day1 YES! WHOO HOO!!!!! I WAS BORN ON EARTH DAY!
DAMNIT!!! I"M SORRY!!!!!!!! DISREAGEARD MY VOTE!!!! I MEANT TO PUT It's okay... I'm SORRY!!!:(
That's what I thought, so the next chapter will be the last... but don't worry, I'll make some more stories dealing with skateboarding injuries and and bike riding and what ever I think of..
Well, I won't be able to write about the tricks becuase I already did, lol...and the next chapter will be up soon! I promise! I'm already half-way through and it's a LONG chapter... How many chapters do you have to have to submit it to the Story of the Week thingy?
Chapter 2 Roxas and Xaldin waited for everyone to show up before they even started…Once everyone was seated…(Xaldin’s group and one pick nick table, and Roxas’s at another)… Xaldin and Roxas both parked their bikes beside of each other while they were still on them...They were about 2 yards apart, and Xemnas stepped forward… “Flipping a coin, call either heads or tails… Winner chooses game and goes first†Xemnas said…He tossed it into the air… “Tails!†Roxas yelled… It landed on heads… “Yes!†Xaldin yelled… “What’s the game Xaldin?†Xemnas asked… “Copy-cat…†Xaldin answered… “Okay…†Roxas answered… “One round...3 tries…person with the most lands win…†Xaldin said… “Fine with me,†Roxas said… Xaldin got in front and was getting ready for his copy-cat move… “I’m getting this on tape!†Xigbar yelled…He got out a handheld video camera and started rolling… “Try this,†Xaldin said… Xaldin raced down the bowl… He peddled up a wall, and came down with a 360 left spin… Then ran back up the other wall and landed in front of Roxas… Roxas looked at Xaldin, knowing he can’t do that move… “Okay, let’s go…†Roxas said… He rode really fast downwards the wall, then rode up the other wall, he tried to do a 360 left spin, but couldn’t land it…His tire bounced off the edge as he tried to land it, and Roxas fell off front wards over the handle bars…The bike crashed just barley a little bit to the left… Roxas got on his knees and yelled.. “I’m okayâ€â€¦Axel was worried that he could really be seriously hurt… “One for me…†Xaldin said…Roxas looked at him with a mean face… “My turn,†Roxas said as he pushed his bike up the wall, then climbing out… “Okay, what are we going to do, a grind?†asked Xaldin… Roxas stared at him. “No, we are going to do a 360 back flip…†Roxas answered… “You got to be joking Roxas… You can’t do that move yet!†Xaldin yelled… “What do you care? Afraid I’ll get hurt?â€â€ Roxas asked… “I actually am Roxas…I’d rather forfeit than you get hurt…†Xaldin said… “Okay, watch this,†Roxas said… He ran down the hill and up the other side of the wall, he turned around, went up the other wall, and came back down… He peddled really hard, an went up the other wall, and did a 360 back flip over the ground and into the next bowl, then rode up that wall and landed it… Xaldin was speechless… “C’mon Xaldin, beat this punk!†Marluxia yelled… Xaldin nodded, then attempted the move… He ran up the wall, then down, like Roxas did, but when he did his back flip, he pulled to hard and landed on the pavement, instead of inside the bowl, luckily he wasn’t hurt… “The score is tied Xaldin… What’s your last call?†Roxas asked as he and Xaldin met up at the pick nick tables… “Skate boarding while grinding off the wooden rail,†Xaldin said while pointing to a staircase… “Okay, let’s get going,†Roxas said… Roxas put his bike next to all of his gear and got out his skateboard, but forgot to put on protective gear…Xaldin did… “Okay, let’s go!†Xaldin said…They both ran to the top of the staircase… Xaldin got on the skateboard and headed for the ramp…He jumped onto the rail and slid down the 10 foot long rail… He landed perfectly… “Yes!†yelled Xaldin… Roxas’s last chance was coming up…Everyone was counting on him… Roxas got on his board, and headed for the rail… Once he jumped on he slide about halfway down…That’s when the problem started… His board slid to the side, and at the end, he fell off his board, landing on his back with his leg under it He rolled and hit his face on the pavement…He was skidding down the pavement the come to a halt. “AHH!†Roxas yelled…Everyone ran over… “GOD!†Roxas yelled again…Roxas had his arms over his leg and he was on his side after he rolled…. “Roxas are you okay?†Axel asked… “GOD DOES IT LOOK LIKE I’M OKAY?†Roxas yelled again… Roxas screamed out in pain… Xigbar came over and started filming this…Roxas was lying on his side, while holding his leg… Axel tried to remove Roxas’s shoe. “GOD DONâ€T TOUCH IT! IT HURTS!†Roxas yelled… “Okay man…where does it hurt?†Vexen asked… “God! It hurts on my back and leg for god’s sake!†Roxas yelled… “Okay, nobody touch him…†Vexen said… Roxas was surrounded by everyone… Larxene go cell phone and dialed for an ambulance… “GET THAT CAMERA OUT OF MY FACE!†Roxas yelled at Xigbar who was right in front of him… Xigbar backed up... “How bad is it?†Roxas tried to ask calmly… “You’re face is scratched up pretty bad, and you possibly fractured your femur…†Vexen said… “Oh god,†Roxas said while starting to cry…Roxas closed his eyes tightly… “They’re sending an ambulance…†Larxene said as she got off the phone… “How soon will they be here?†Vexen asked… “In about 10 minutes…†Larxene said… “God someone help me please!†Roxas yelled…
