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    I was invited to a few parties. But two of them, I didn't know or want to get to know anyone. And another was thrown by this guy who wants to get in my panties, so.
    And the family I live with was too busy playing FarmVille and Cafe World.
    Post by: Jayn, Jan 1, 2011 in forum: The Spam Zone
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    I'm lonely and suicidal, halp.
    Post by: Jayn, Jan 1, 2011 in forum: The Spam Zone
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    Heeey KHV

    LilBueno! c:
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    Janime6

    (...What?, Spaze, Ruki, Luna)
    Post by: Jayn, Jan 1, 2011 in forum: The Spam Zone
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    I enjoyed reading this, and I normally don't sit down to read fanfictions myself as Kellyjelly stated. Since you've gotten enough praise for it, I guess I'll critique. Because it's a fanfiction, I'm going to let the whole profanity thing slide, even though it made them seem a bit out of character. The Spanish also caught me a bit off-guard, but it's a nice twist. What I can recommend to improve is to try starting your sentences out a bit differently from time to time. In the beginning and further down in to the middle of the story, there's a lot of sentence starters with "he" used and it made it seem a bit repetitive.
    Also, you changed tenses a few times. Which just means you went from, "He says this" to "He did that". I don't know if that was intentional.

    All and all, it was an interesting read. Remember, a critique is just there to help you improve so try not to take anything personally. c:
    Post by: Jayn, Dec 31, 2010 in forum: Archives
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    How was your Christmas? D:
    Profile Post by Jayn for Firekeyblade, Dec 31, 2010
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    On the other skin though it just looks like a gray square. Which led me to believe Mixt here had gotten mega de-repped and I immediately wondered awfulness they had done.
    I was thinking that it could be the same color as the "appear offline" color.
    Post by: Jayn, Dec 30, 2010 in forum: Feedback & Assistance
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    I don't know if I like this idea...I mean, I do and I don't. The competitive side of me though must be suppressed.
    Post by: Jayn, Dec 30, 2010 in forum: Community News & Projects
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