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Yes. And whhhha? XDD http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?113822-Role-Play-Idol-Season-One-Challenge-1 <--my example is at the bottom And sure.

Crtiques. ; Jayn.

Spoiler: Britishism

One thing I liked about yours--a lot, is the fact that you used first person. That might just be because I find it to be unique, and give better insight to your character in general, but it also opens you up to a lot more, emotionally. Your character had a defined personality, to me. I really enjoyed your post.

What you could work on, (possibly) is the action part of it. In a role play, while emotions get people more into it, action is what progresses the story, imo. So if your character had actually gotten up and explored, or whatever you could think of, that would have made it perfect. But you did very well. I really enjoyed it. Very nice presentation, as well.​

Spoiler: BushyBrow

You were the first one to write it as if you were expecting to be in reality at that point, but ended up in this whole other world, so I acknowledge that. What I liked about your post is that you were very detailed. The way you wrote the colors, and the sounds, and the feelings was awesome. Something to be worked on I think is the presentation. The colors were readable (default forum skin user), but the paragraphs were subtle (spaces between paragraphs = <3), and there were a lot of ellipses. "..." is a pause, remember. So when you read your post it was almost more of a poem than a 'story', to me. It was still lovely, though. Very creative.
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Spoiler: Master of Keyblades

Short and sweet. Sometimes that's best. It keeps role plays moving faster, and takes away from some of the pressure of posting. I like that about you. Another thing, is how you included his emotions and how he was feeling about the situation. What you could work on...The bird and the freedom thing was a nice touch, in terms of dramatics, but it kind of distracted me. It felt irrelevant to what was going on. Other than that, nice job.
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Spoiler: Tummer

What I liked about you was that you were the first to mention another person--without breaking the rule. I liked how he was surprised and shocked, and it came across evident that he was. It was cute that he mentioned his girlfriend, and that some of his emotional urgency came from that. I think that was the best touch in this. Very good. I also liked the branch cracking. Something to work on. The only thing I can think of right now is maybe something regarding presentation. When he said 'Hannah', it could have been separated. (Did so in the quote) for a better example. The more separation of paragraphs, the easier to read. But even that is so small it doesn't even matter. Very good job.
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Spoiler: Marushi

I really enjoyed your post. Your detail was uplifting. The wind, the bird, the rustling. Everything was well placed and flowed naturally, which was really nice. Something to work on, imo is the fact that the audience doesn't know who Lance is. We know your character was camping previously, but we don't know who Lance is in relation to her, so explaining that might have been good. But you did very well, I was very impressed.
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Spoiler: Fuuka Yamagishi

I like how you explained that Chris was your characters brother and that they went everywhere together, that was really good. Because the growing panic in the post was even more realistic because of that detail. You did very well. The end felt a bit rushed, but that's no biggy. I really enjoyed it.
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Spoiler: Dr_Wigglz

It was a good idea to climb on the trees to see what was ahead. You were very creative with that. Now, something to work on...Might be the 'in his opinion' part. You know you're in a forest, it looks like a forest, so that wasn't needed, imo. I also think the badassness seemed a bit forced. Like the light and the darkness thing, and the 'make them regret it'. I do like how you named the sword and mentioned it, though. I also like how he was expecting a trap. His paranoia was a nice touch.
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Spoiler: Spaze

Our winner, congratulations, by the way. You did very well and found a balance between action/emotion and presentation. There's not much to say here other than good job.
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Spoiler: Chesterfield Snapdragon McFistycuffs

You did very well with the detail. I like how you gave insight on the character's usually behaviors and person as well. Howeverrrrr, the person (or style) you wrote in in the beginning threw me off. I felt myself confused more often than I wanted to be, which is probably my own problem. The 'she thinks' part was a bit repetitive, to me in the beginning so I'm glad it didn't continue. As the piece went on and continued, it got better and better. You did extremely well.
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Spoiler: Ace Phoenix

You took a more humorous approach to this, and I believe that role playing should be fun. So do take a different--more humorous approach to it made me happy. So good job. It was also amusing for him to roll and fall out of the tree. The fact that you took advantage of the elements, was really special. So good job.

Only thought is, once again with presentation, to space out your paragraphs. Did so in the quote for an example. Besides that, very good.
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Spoiler: bluekingboy

You, too, took a humorous approach to it. I enjoyed your character. You stayed true to her, and that was good. But she was a bit unrealistic. Especially with the growl. A normal human being would freak out, not be excited. It's human instinct to freak out. But besides that, it was good. Another critique is presentation. When you use a quote, most times you enter; regarding punctuation. Did so in the above quote. Also remember to use the space bar after periods. ​

Spoiler: Bueno

As expected, you did wonderfully. You're very good at staying in character and playing true to their bios and all of that. The presentation was great. Your witty lines were nice too. A critiqueeee...I'm not sure, but I think you could have done a bit more in this post. I dunno if you were stuck, or didn't have enough time, or whatever, but there's something I feel was lacking. Like, there could have been more. I dunno how to explain it, but you did a great job. I love Jensen. <3​

Lol, I see this...I tried to contact you, you didn't respond to either VMs. What was supposed to happen, was yesterday you were supposed to read...

The Midland. :cc The Inland North was the runner up. /American accent​

So do you just RP with one person at a time? ._. Wondering how it works if you're in a group RP, or...what...I don't understand. /so noobish

<3 I miss you. bby com bck

You should teach me how. ;n; I don't get it.

But it made my day to stumble upon it, so thank you. :]

*Stars at webpage that's been opened all day* >>;

Does my daughter RP on Tumblr? c:

Do you have MSN?

Make sure you read all of the posts in RP Idol.

Mmkay. <3

Yeah, I can make that work. <:

This is very cute so far. Every day we shared, every moment. Every time you'd speak, made my heart jump. And of all the things, that we used...

It's so hot when you say another woman's user name over and over and over. ​

I love it so far. The only critique I see You and I, we had it all All the time, I loved it so And every day, you'd say to me. Come, let's go....

Aw, cute. Exactly 100 VMs. cccc: ...*Ruins* Make sure you read all of the posts in challenge one, we'll have to decide on a winner sometime...

I'm actually filling out my form at this moment. xD Awesome timing.