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Jayn ; Critiques. Spoiler: Bushy Brow Mmkay. You were the first to post, so congrats to that. Being prompt is important in a role play. Other than that, my critique will be rather similar to last time. Ellipses were still used a bit in over-abundance but you definitely show growth, which is very important. Now, content-wise...Your posts are always very real. I like that about them. It was a nice touch to include him being so worried about his sister. One thing is that you didn't state how exactly you knew Luis. Like, if he was your friend, how you knew his name, etc. Other than that, good job. Spoiler: Tummer Very good, Tummer. The book made me laugh, in a good way. Very clever to through that in. I really enjoyed your post. You were who I struggled with mostly between Theonly9one. Though neither you or Bushy stated how you guys became friends since you were both new to the school, you stated that you were very good friends, in subtle way with the 'Fate' bit. Your post was emotional, in a good way. Not over the top, but it still made me interested in the character. His self-doubt managed to be heart warming instead of generic angst, and I enjoyed it. Very, very good. Eh. I can't find much wrong with it, to be honest. You did extremely well. Spoiler: Dr_Wigglz Your initiation was very creative. Having the headmaster talk to you and send you to find Allen was a good way to start. Howeverrrr, what could have made it an even stronger move was stating exactly why the headmaster had sent Gexln to find Allen. What was special about Allen? That kind of thing. It was also a bit unclear if he was being rude on purpose due to his personality, or if it was unintentional to come off that way. But these are minor things and you, otherwise, did a very good job. :] Spoiler: THE WINNER Your post is adorable. You're the winner so I don't want to say anything except for good job. xD Your post was very real, detailed and personality-filled. I like how I could feel your character's frustration, and the innocence behind it was great. You also got into the world very well. The 'Earthy' comment was clever. Great job. You deserved your win. ;] Spoiler: Marushi At first I was confused when you said 'empath', but after realizing you were referring to her power, everything made a lot more sense. I really enjoy your posts so far. They have a consistent feel to them, with the detail and the gentleness. The way she was so motherly towards Hannah made me smile. When it disintegrated into nervousness impressed me too. Other than that, there were a couple of silly spelling errors highlighted in red. You did well. :] Spoiler: mast of keyblades I'm glad you had your character stand up for himself and point out the fact that everyone had 'talents'. That reaction had a very real feel to it, so I liked it. Something to work on might be that when you posted, you rephrased a lot of what Dr_Wigglz had already said. The parts in red are the parts that were taken directly from something he had said. I understand that it's conversation, I just advise you to make sure that your originality takes up much more of the RP post than restating something that was already done, IMO. Nothing else big, so good job. :] Spoiler: Ace Phoenix I know it was a mistake, but you changed Jensen's name to Kensen in the post a couple of times. That was distracting. xD;; I appreciate that you put a reason as to why you had to find Jensen. What confused me was why he was so sinister about it. He seemed like a bad guy, like he was harassing Jensen, even though a teacher had pointed out that Jensen wasn't used to it. So I figured it just was his personality? But it confused me. Other than that, great presentation, spelling and grammar. Spoiler: Britishism Good job, once again. I feel though that the tone of the piece contradicted the personality of the actual character. The words were rather dry, as I was reading them. But it seems that the character was actually pretty social, especially when he approached the girl. For example, the beginning paragraph made me chuckle with the sarcastic hellspawn comment, but then it doesn't continue with the witty-ness, and melts into something more casual, which was a little inconsistent to me personally. I couldn't tell what kind of 'tone' you were going for at first. But overall, a decent post. No spelling errors, perfect presentation, and a good job. c: You all did very well. I can already tell this is going to be a hard elimination process. D:
I know what it means, but I don't stop myself from saying it, or scold my friends when they say it. I understand saying, "Lol, that's ******ed." might be offensive to some people, but the definition of the word is; So the fact it, the only annoyance comes from the fact that it's used wrong. Lol. I also hate it when it's used as an insult. Like calling someone a ******, or ******ed. I've never, ever called another person ******ed, but sometimes instead of calling something stupid, '******ed' can slip out. Not often, but...Meh. I take offense to any derogatory term directed at a human being, really. Inanimate objects? Not so much.
You are an inspiration. Now go inspire your father.
Finally found the time to read everything here. x_x Wow. You are an amazing writer. I love you incorporated everyones characters and personalities so accurately. You're really good at this. I await the new chapters! xD Keep 'em coming.
And the winner is... Congratulations to the amazing Chesterfield Snapdragon McFistycuffs! She managed to wow the judges (also) unanimously with her role play post. You are immune from this voting session. Go to the challenge thread for your critiques--eventually, as they are being written. The judge Arch will have his up tomorrow. A few people are no longer with us and that is Spaze and Lilbueno who resigned, and Fuuka Yamagashi, who was disqualified for not posting. A note on that is that it is respectable to tell me ahead of time if you are going to not have time for the competition, or whatever instead of just disappearing. It's the same for a role play. You should let someone know if you'll be inactive, instead of leaving them wondering. Feedback! Good job to everyone who posted, first of all, and to everything who posted first! The reason I stressed how good of an idea that was was because promptness is also apart of role playing (and something I struggle with, lolololo.) Posting on time, and quickly (with detail, of course) helps the role play stay alive and keep trucking. Also, 'initiating' conversation can be way out of comfort zone for some of you, so it's a good idea to try doing that more often. What is this? While we have a winner (who is immune from this poll), we also need to eliminate someone. In this voting session, we'll only vote off one person. You're voting for who you think should stay, and you MUST post in this thread with a valid, detailed critique/reason WHY. There is no voting for yourself. I'll restate my original rule which is be fair about it. Please do not vote for your friends because they're your friends. Please refer to the sign ups thread for more information on voting. (Though, you should have read it already.) You are REQUIRED to vote. You are REQUIRED to read the other contestants posts. You are REQUIRED to give a reason why. If you're in the bottom (least amounts of votes), the judges and I will decide who stays and who goes. Only one will be eliminated this time. If you need extra help, the judges will be critiquing each role player in the main challenge thread. If you're just following the competition, but you've not entered in it as a contestant, you can vote too. But you're still required to follow the same rules and give a valid reason. If I feel your (or anyone elses) reason is not detailed enough, I will call you out on it. c: (You guys can do the same to me if I seem vague) Members who have yet to vote... Bushy Brow - Izzy Kumo [m] + Ilia Kumo [f] Marushi - Lance [m] + Kara [f] Dr_Wigglz - Gexln [m] + Rosalina [f] master of keyblades - Allen [m] + Mina [f] Britishism - Rory [m] + Keira [f] Ace Phoenix - Kyatchi [m] + Mizume [f] theonly9one - Heather [f] + Brad [m] Tummer - Hannah [f] + Luis [m] Happy role playing. :]
Awwwww....;___; Sorry...But yes, 100 x 100. I can make you that size an avatar, if you'd like.
I play, lawl. My name is Klaire; So if anyone sees me or wants to add me, feel free. Comments on the game. Cute, and it doesn't take up too much of my CPU. The downloading process also wasn't tedious, so I'm pretty happy with it. Gameplay is decent, and it's fun to waste time with so...
Oh? Thanks for that. I didn't know you could noparse it. I'll probably do that now. Even so...For the sake of other's or future lazyness, it'd be cool is the basic smiley's shortcuts were changed. xD;
I don't know if this is possible, but if it is, can it be brutally murdered? It's not a big deal at all, but I'd like to be able to do this; ': D' (without a space) without this ':D' Disabling smileys in your own post works fine, but as soon as someone quotes it it's back. I find the majority of them creepy, anyways. (With the exception of the custom ones), and if the feature was removed, those who wanted to use :) instead of : ) could put use to the drop down menu. Ehhh. Like I said, not a big deal, but still. <: Edit; Either that, or changing the basic smile 'shortcuts' to something less generic. like. /: D INSTEAD OF : D
Hey. c: Impressions? Where did you get the name 'Stardust' from? You're a blushing school girl, in love with a mysterious, angsty Vampire boy named Chevalant who loves you as well. Everyone knows he's a vampire but they all just kind of chill and accept it, because what are they gonna do. So anyways, you have a best friend named Sabbylina who's always been there for you. You've been friends since Kindergarden, and have had tons of sleep overs and hot sexy food fights in your kitchen and other stuff girls do. So when after a night of passionate love making to Chevalant, he kisses your neck and whispers in your ear that he totally wants to turn you into a Vampire, you're hesitant. What about Sabbylina??? You think. It's then that you leave Chevalant's early and go talk to Sabbylina, who breaks down and cries. You don't understand what the big deal is at first but that's when she yells, "I LOVE YOU, STARDUST. I ALWAYS HAVE." You realize somewhere deep down you totally dig her too. WHO DO YOU CHOOSE?! Your dark, handsome Vampire lover? Or your sexy, lesbian best friend, Sabbylina? :c Ahaha.wav?
Thank you so much, sweetheart. <3 This means a lot to me...I'll point out to 'Dadsir' that you are still aspiring to get more Cookie Points. xD I'm glad you loved the picture, too...I love you guys. ;__; AND I LOVE MY BABY BOY. /SPOILS YOU
Huh? .__. Seriously? You're not planning anything, are you? xD
All types, so long as it's not country and doesn't worship the devil. c:
Okay. Um. Yay. Now time for a list of characters so people know who's taken and who they can join as, (as more people start to join) and some rules, bro. Also, are you allowing OC's? Which are 'Original Characters' people make up? Here are some links to some KHV Kingdom Hearts role plays on the site for examples. One. Two. Three Edit; Also. If that's the battle system, then how will the rest of the RP look? For example, a random post from one of those links looks like this: Spoiler (Thanks, Awkward) So if your battle system is in the format you provided an example of in the OP, how will the rest of the RP look when you're not fighting?
You're missing an actual story. (Though it'll be KH and KH2 based, it helps to include a summary of what will actually be going on, for people who aren't as familiar with KH, or really don't know the story [yes, it's possible on a KH forum. xD], but still want to join. For example, you should explain where you'll start out in the RP, or the different worlds, keyblades, all of that junk. You don't have to go into such detail but the more info the better. You can even copy pasta from KH Wikia or something and credit to them. Just so that there's something here to go off of. A character sheet. (And/Or a list of characters from people to chose from.) And a list of Rules, essentially. I mean that role plays with the; Someone 1: *hits* Someone 2: Ow. *hits back* Format aren't allowed. As long as there's some depth like, "Someone 1 walked over to Someone 2 and hit him on the shoulder. etc, etc." Ehhh. I can't explain it very well. xD There just shouldn't be any "*"'s in your RP.
