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The End. \\ Ending will be expanded on in Act II.

Good job to everyone and good luck to you for future seasons.

Spoiler: Nights

First off, thank you for your promptness. I appreciate you posting so soon after the challenge was written. Secondly, that was very cute. I liked the romantic aspect of it. I also liked how you organized it all and used different colors to represent who was speaking.

Now for the critique. Recall that we 'don't know' anything about your characters. Meaning this was an opportunity to introduce them in full. What I got from this from that they're in love, Luna is emotional and Nights...loves her. From this entry, I still don't know their ages and I don't know what they look like.

Regarding the plot/reason for them leaving, I think the forbidden love concept is always fun to play around with, but it would have been nice to explain why they had to leave and why they wouldn't be able to see each other.

I like that Luna developed in her thought process and decided she would rather leave, but I felt that it was a bit rushed. It would have been nice for it to draw on a bit longer, respectively.

So for future entries, I suggest you work on adding more detail and tying the post together more efficiently. Other than that though, nice job.

Spoiler: Tale_Wind

Make sure you use proper capitalization. There were a lot of non-capitalized he's and she's.

I felt this was a bit too short. Nothing really happened. Same as with Nights, I have no idea what your characters look like or how old they are, or even their personalities and this post didn't really introduce them at all. I felt it kind of missed the purpose of the challenge, which was to introduce your characters in detail to the judges.

You had good dialogue, though. Spunky and energetic. Just wish there was more here.

My suggestion for the next challenges is to be more detailed, and keep on track with the challenge. If the challenge wasn't met, it doesn't matter how good your post was, if that makes sense.

Spoiler: FlowerGothic

Was a very interesting approach, but there was no finish or conclusion. Still don't know anything about the characters, which was the point of the challenge. Creative idea, but it fell flat on my end. Cliffhangers are generally not a good idea when the challenge calls for a conclusion. Either way, nice idea.

My suggestion for the next challenge is not to leave off on a cliffhanger, put more detail into it, and stick with the challenge.

Spoiler: miaulement

I felt you started off rather strong, but I got to know Bloom much better than I got to know Nacho. I still don't know what happened. I think she killed someone? Idk. You could have been a bit clearer with this, but I think you may have been trying for some mystery. ~ I really liked your descriptions in this. Her hair, her voice. If you had kept up that type of detail consistently, I wouldn't have very much to say about this post. You did well. Good organization, good language/word choice.

My suggestion to you is to say consistent in your writing. Make sure you explain things thoroughly.

Spoiler: MoK

I like how right away you specified that they were friends, stating the relationship. I also like the tails or heads idea, giving you a resolution. However, this was rather bland. It was short and not much happened. It's good that you stated why they left, but you didn't really explain why they'd get in trouble for doing so. Dunno how old they are or where they're from.

I suggest you add more detail in the future.

If you want to talk to me about your critique, PM or VM would be best. Not here. Thanks.

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Thank you Kelly.

Locking the main thread in one hour.


edit; kay. i'll replace my post with something logical later.

ikr? c:

Thank you.

Alrighty, thank you all. Wigglz won't be able to post, so us judges can start critiquing. Please do so in the next couple of days.

Thanks .

Nah. Anything goes.

ooc: No worries. You aren't.
Updated.

Updated. I think I got you, Moshii.

OOC: Thank you, Kelly. Knowing myself (I tend to just kind of self-destruct), I probably won't act on the invitation, but it does make me feel...some better emotion that isn't suicidal, lolol. ​

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Adding you. Enjoy, have fun. ~

@thread: Is there anything else I need to update that I missed?
Also, your reputation. ;__; Let's all rep him, plz.

Oh, hello again, thread. Let's see if I've changed any.​

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Spoiler: 2008

Spoiler: 2009

Appearance

I still don't care much. I fall for who I fall for, race, build, etc just doesn't matter to me unless they're deformed in some way, as explained above. I just don't pay much attention to it.

Personality​

Girls

Sweet.
Accepting.
Gentle.
Compassionate.
Emotional.
Empathetic.
Kawaii Desu mannerisms.
Affectionate.
Sensual.
Artistic
Expressive.
Warm, loving.
Literate.
Intelligent.
Interesting. Will lose interest if they have no special quirks.

Boys

Assertive.
Dominant.
Driven / Goal-Oriented.
Literate.
Funny without trying too hard.
Understanding / Compassionate.
Opinionated.
Tolerant.
Loyal.
A bit dorky.
Riskier than I am, willing to take chances.
Comfortable with sexuality.
Musically inclined / appreciative.
Confident.
I will lose interest if they aren't persistent or if they say they care about me or are interested in me and then vanish/don't care enough to talk to me, lol.


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Welcome back, Drew.
I hope things were fine with you while you were away. ​

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It's okay to feel the way you do, LARiA. I think a lot of people do, but just don't say anything about it. The below vent is specifically for you and I'll probably delete it once you've seen it so don't super quote it.
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As for my theme, it changes. A lot. Because I am emotional. With how I'm feeling right now ... actually, it's inappropriate for the site, never mind. I'll find something else later. c:
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Yeah, I think the compression overly-compressed some parts but everything sounds different in my headphones, sorry. :'c

Blayn is me.
Nobody believed me when I had my gender as male on KHV.
But alas. v:​

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Waiting ...
warning post. you have today and tomorrow.

Anyone else have an opinion?

;P


Mhm! I'm accepting them until I post the album.