It's very good. But you shouldn't post it all here. Maybe one or two chapters to draw us in, but leave the rest out. That is, if you plan on publishing and selling it. That way, you get our attention, but we have to pay to find out what happens next. If you post it all here, then everyone here won't want to buy it, since they'd have already read it, and can come back here if they want to read it again. But this is only if you want it published.
OOC: Sorry, it sounded like you were telling them to do that.
I drive a white '93 Mustang. That's pretty much all I know. My mom has one of those too. It's also white.
Well, last night I was going on the Home Beta and I go to the theater to see what's on. I see the trailer for this. It's a CGI movie based off of the anime Astro Boy. Now, I never really saw the show, neither the old nor the new, but the trailer looks pretty good. It was a bit short, but I liked it. Who is thinking about seeing it? I know I am. EDIT: This is the trailer I saw.
OOC: Don't tell other characters where to go or what to do. Let them do what they want as long as it follows the rules.
Kori got up and followed her.
He blushed, wanting to do it again.
"I'm sorry." he said. "I don't know what came over me."
"I meant about the kiss." he said, blushing.
"Hey." he said. "Sorry about earlier."
Kori saw her on the sidewalk and walked up to her. He sat next to her.
"See ya later." he said, flashstepping toward Nicole.
"Well, if everything is fine here, I'm going to go back to keeping watch over her." he said, turning to leave.
"Forget about it." he said.
"N-nothing!" he said.
"I was keeping watch over Nicole." he said. He blushed, thinking about how he kissed her on the cheek.
"Well, at least you two are safe now." he said.
He shook the toughts from his mind and asked "What happened?"
He then realized what he did as he arrived, blushing.
"I don't know." he said. "Apparently Sachi needs help and Kaori is unconscious. I have to go right away. We'll have to have our little lunch date some other time." And before he knew it, he kissed her on the cheek and flashstepped there.