That's right you.
Well you see, you take a point called z in a complex plane and let z1 be z squared plus c and let z2 be z1 squared plus c and let z3 be z2 squared plus c and so o. If the series of z's always stays close to z and never trends away that point is in the Mandelbrot set. And that means your page views go up when we don't know it's momentum or position.
Fighting the waves of sea dragonfly with the glow of a morning turn to see me behind that wall of ice cold rice in the film of my life. So I see the greys, the blues, the sky green filters rolling through the giants and roaring out the pipelines. Tear in the black pitch tar and blear the vision in the deer's headlights. So kill the engine and throw it in the junk yard, turn down the flower and plant the speaker, that's right, that's right, that's right.
Bible = Book Jesus Christ Superstar = Movie Christianity = Religion That explain it?
I thought you were being anti-Christian at first.
It looks like most of what I've seen from you, but sloppier. The proportioning and features are still awkward and I dislike the style. That said it's not technically bad or anything but nor is is technically really good or anything. I guess.
That is ridiculous and impossible.
Yeah, I suck, say what you want, criticism appreciated, I guess that's all.
If you want honest feedback: this is not good. It is a blatant imitation of a certain series mentioned twice already. It doesn't use elements from Death Note or use that series as inspiration; it is the same thing changed up enough to pass for "original" in your eyes. I assure you no one else will be under the same illusion. You also have a bad habit of putting pronunciation (incorrect ones in some cases) keys behind your names, that makes you seem like an uneducated weeaboo. You write in English, use English, if you want to describe a name as different just spell it phonetically and stop trying to pretend that you are something that you most clearly are not. Based on this I don't know if you don't know what you're doing or if you're just not trying, either way I cannot say I was particularly fond of any part of this. Perhaps you need to rethink your situation and start over with something that is your own rather than someone else's.
Color me impressed. I liked the original but the addition of color shows new shades of variance, depth and blending that you cannot really get with black and white. It's imperfect as these things are bound by nature to be but still good.
You are very good with atmosphere. Enviably so. But that isn't what I'm most impressed with. It's the fact that this reads both like an essay and like poetry at the same time. The way it's paragraphs parallel stanzas but at the same time still maintain that flow of an essay in careful prose. I wouldn't call it excellent because there are some elements that fall short of the whole piece's potential but it is still very impressive and I like it. I do not presume to make suggestions since I do not fully understand what I feel is less than excellent myself, but I may at a later time.
Don't let him fool you, he lies to get what he wants. Like dinosaurs.
Here begins the flood. Edit: Stop proving me wrong, you're all evil.
I'm guessing the raw flesh of a virgin.
This is all too Monzetsu sounding to me.
If possible try to lengthen out your chapters a little. I know you're going light with this but it's not fun coming here seeing an update and finishing it in two minutes and not getting a full chapter's worth of action, talking, or description. In a novel a chapter is more than two pages, I'd try to gradually get up to that kind of length keeping in mind that events have beginnings, middles, and ends and each chapter should exhibit this to a very subtle extent rather than separating that out into multiple chapters and leaving the reader hanging like that.
I think several legal name changes are in order.
I never tell anyone, so I've never had to deal with it.
No need to fast.
Was worth it.
