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I was asking for it implicitly.

Does sideways work too?

Should I be reading your sig when the words are upside down or right side up? My eyes are drawn to the bottom but I feel like I'm doing it wrong that way.

Usually I do it like this: If the manga came first I read that and watch the anime when it comes out for a few eps to see if I like it. If the...

Yeah, main thing I find lacking is the art direction isn't the best. Most of the fighting and movement in general seems a little off so I find it...

Do not worry. I heard George Clooney was running.

Read it since it came out on Onemanga back in early '08. I'm not really a fan of the anime adaptation but it's not bad and is slightly easier to...

As in Xerxes Break?

How can you wankers not be familiar with Winnie the Pooh?

I'm tending to agree with this.

Your pacing was rushed. That is the first thing that jumped out at me. A lot happens with very little explanation or time to allow it all to sink in. Were I you I'd draw this out a tad more, not enough to lose the effect you have but enough to make things a bit more natural to follow with the series of events, interactions and introductions. It's okay to intro some people here but they need more. That's basically all I'm saying here. There needs to be more stuff in each section to flesh it out. I guess that's it. By the way, don't stop. I see a lot of things that I review with hopes of seeing them continue and then they don't continue and I feel like I've wasted my life. So don't waste my life. I'm watching you. Bye.

Note- All chapters contain language. The English one to be specific. If you're going to go and use euphemisms then use them correctly. Strong language, foul language, inappropriate language, etcetera etcetera would all be acceptable but just language is not what you're going for. Keep in mind that you need to say everything exactly as you mean it not just well enough to be understood.

Critique- Finally got around to reading. Don't have much to say other than that you are making improvements. The last chapter and the overall story thus far has been vacillating from solid to shaky but you seem like your stabilizing things out a bit. Word choice is becoming more fluent, not perfect by a long shot but still serviceable. So you do need to improve your word use because it is slightly more than occasionally that I find myself thinking that you're using one or two words wrong but as I said you're improving so it's not a huge deal unless you stop doing so. Plot is moving along less predictably than it was at the beginning but that's neither good nor bad. I have to say your pacing is still slightly off and you might want to change your detail levels sometimes. It seems you're using too much detail at one part and too little at another.

Thoughts- Series should be Bianca centric now plz.

Ever piece of black literature I've ever read I've found far whinier than Holden Caulfield.

The Bible is too long.

Never gonna give you up Yui.

She did it badly. If you look at the text, all of the characters sound the same. Mark Twain made clear and, in my opinion, more accurate distinctions between regional dialects and added realism rather than annoyance as was the case in this text.

Grammatically my biggest gripe was she would refuse to start new paragraphs when new people started talking and she carried on inconsistent fading in and out of dialect. Pick one and make it seem like you mean it not you were just being a lazy ass and doing whatever the hell.

Also, it is not an opinion that Janie was stupid. It is a fact. Running off with men you have known for hardly even a cumulative 24 hours is stupid. Blindly obeying a man who agrees to be called Tea Cake is stupid.

I can see liking the book, but not based on any technical merits.

I totally missed the part where bad grammar, poorly constructed dialect, dead obvious intent, stupid characters, racial stereotyping, and a boring plot was a good thing.

These awards killed what little of my ego was left. T^T

lol j/k Congratulations to the winners. That was totally not a Freudian slip because I had time to edit my thoughts before releasing them to the entire world for review, consideration, or ignoring.

Now that I'm on this track, why not explore the possibilities of thought editing. If every thought on the internet was edited then everyone would have complete control over what they were posting and thus none of it would be completely and totally honest because it would be altered or abridged to make it more acceptable to the given audience. Even someone with no affinity for reading a crowd would be able to do this. That would mean that everyone is really an idealized form of themselves. Well, that would be if that were true which it might not be since there is no way of determining the veracity of anyone's statements or comments. There is also the fact that people self edit in real life just to a lesser degree. They can change what they think first thing to what they say first thing, making it a thought out response rather than a raw reaction. That makes me wonder how well I know anyone really. Seaking in lies or in truths isn't something that has a general leaning. Many have a tendency to embroider a story or exaggerate an anecdote. There are also many surgeries today meaning you don't even know if a person's physical appearance is real. But real is a mere perception. There are facts but human facts that haven't got perfect evidence are only given meaning by impressions, perceptons, and opinions. So the world could really be totally different from how I think it is and I wouldn't know the difference because I spend more than seven hours a a day reading manga on my computer. Yes, that was Seaking that you read.