The goggles, they do nothing!
Sketches that look like they were sketched with a pencil on a paper and scanned on a scanner and posted by a poster. Comment, critique, or complain, but never castrate. Looking over my shoulder and seeing myself Paradise was misplaced, not lost He's got a knife My whole world in my hand I'll just leave this here If it's Jeet Kun Do then it's something I can also do Take a step back and check it out Glasses are so I can see my claws in your throat Floating tapedeck if you couldn't see it Jump on it Alone Side by side This doesn't look finished? I have no idea what you're talking about. It's a person and then that same person behind that person but different looking or something like that to give you the short version Yeah, that's it. I'll stop commenting on my own ability since no one seems to like my evaluations. Bye.
Thought everyone played each game through at least three times to get every starter.
I did as well.
Look behind you to see who they're waving at
Since I have nothing relevant to add, I'll fill the gap with a form of greeting and salutation. Hey.
I pray to his god that you're not talking to him.
Open for pleasure.
This.^ The game was vibrantly active for the first two or three iterations (I think) and the rules were virtually the same as they are now. Member participation flagging as well as people learning too many of the player's names led to this game's death in the end. I'd play if I had time to watch the thread religiously like I did during the first DN game but as things are I'd better not.
Comments are added in colors to the original text body below. Spoiler Since I don't generally read your stuff I'll start off with a very comprehensive and nitpicky evaluation. Most of my colorful language above is just as I said, nitpicking. The idea here isn't bad and the content is fine, but I'd be a fan of your working on the language and presentation of your work. Grammar needs to be improved a little as does phrasing and word choice. If I have one piece of advice that I'd want you to follow most out of everything it'd be this: use fewer semicolons. All that said and done I do like some of the things you write but they'd be a bigger plus if all the other things I noted were not there. Keep on writing. Not like you needed or wanted to hear that from me.
I pretty nearly concur on all points.
If you get a lower score than I did then you fail at life.
The chalice from the palace has the brew that is true.
William? Is that you?
One of these Maynards had the keynes to the kingdom and the other will bring you endless joyce. Perhaps you made the wiser decision in associating...
The phonies are not so easily discouraged as to follow only to the ends of the earth. They will quote your books, adapt them into plays, and...
If it can still fit in your pocket it must be too small.
At least it's only one issue then. I'm not sure if I could handle anymore of them.
Plays nicely in the role of the observer for the most part but ends in introspection and reminiscence. I like the overall direction this takes and the technical aspect needs little if any work. Personally, I like the sense of time and place that your writing always seems to capture and convey. Makes me feel like my imagination is displaying in HiDef. Strange as it sounds, I'm not joking. Nice to see a post of yours again either way. So, I guess that's it.
Back to your usual more than slightly depressing antics I see. I fell into the same hole as Cariad and read the last line first. Kinda disrupted flow for me towards the end when I began to see exactly what was happening. Either way, you've got a knack for evocation of emotion and transition from one tone to another. Probably best exemplified in a piece such as this. Nothing new to add that the three gracious commenters above me haven't gone over in terms of the flawed and the unflawed. So I'll cut it off here and let you go. Nice work.
