Come on, you know you want to :v
Dalk seems to be on a suspicious amount of polls :v
Love you too ;D Pfft, you better get used to it ;3 -*shot*
Oooft, I just look at Cupcake and get lost in that sea of sexiness and stomach rolls.
The Tardis could have been on that exact spot >3 Or Rose's boobs lolwut
[IMG] By the way, the sand this was written on is Godly. David Tenant stepped on it when they filmed on the beach xDD
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You can juggle :v [I was locked outside my house today so I taught myself] note- does not include juggling with own balls.
Cin for most overrate-*shot*
He is actually quite funny, if you enjoy intellectual humor. TMM just makes sexual puns, though Jube is pretty funny.
what, you've never had them before? http://www.freewebs.com/grayt42/711px-Mr-Brains-******s-Pack.jpg
Absol, because she's awesome.
First reaction- WALL OF TEXT. Needs to be broken down, huge chunks of words are incredibly unappealing. Pictures are a pretty good choice, you've used them to the point that it isn't annoying. The chapter 2 picture is cute <: Right so, onto the actual story. Thankfully it makes sense (as opposed to the majority of stories here) but your sentence structure is odd. Even the first sentence dragged out for too long and had far too many commas o.O Here, I'll show you. "Tabatha was just a girl, she just turned 5 and her sister promised to take her to the park for her birthday, her sister was already waiting for her outside." COULD HAVE BEEN "Tabatha was just a girl, barely past five. For her birthday her sister had promised to take her to the park, and now she was waiting outside." Also, beware of using capital letters correctly <: There are times where you've started some character dialect but the first word in the sentence isn't capitalised- remember, even within speech words and pronouns must have capital letters. Your spelling is decent, which is good x3 I think even the smallest improvements such as breaking the chapters into bitesized chunks would make the world of a difference <3 You've done well, though. Keep going 8D Oh and guys, I know you're fans of this story, but the spam in here was awful D: Ive deleted some posts- but you could always replace them with worthwhile, constructive replies. <3
Yeah, I missed it :lolface: Repliku likes his fake titties <:
Highlight of my day- seeing Misty's belly button :v
... MAKE ME A PIZZA.o
Repliku has funny knees :lolface:
kind of explains itself. :/gasp:
WE GET TO SEE BELLIES? :'Do
eh, chocolate milk gets sickily after a while.
