well, well the ramdom princess of hyrule decides to leave? well, i dont really know you, but your tales of randomness spread throughout the foums. anyways, ive always wanted to go to new york. and hope you do comeback after you own college...and who knows we might have a chance to become friends XD.
well...that was helpful......? anyways,try to not fall half asleep. and try to find ways to supress it , just like daxma said.
i liked the anime. especially the episode where she dances with solomon. the battle in the storage was awesome, but kinda shortend spoilers. but overall.....now some people think my username is from the anime...its not...i didnt even notice they used the term, but the series is good.
well, then no, im no good at that...
well, i think he looks 5 feet or up, brown hair, dark eyes. easy.
woah, half-asleep.....thats a problem. what is that condition? but how do you expect him to trust you while you shove your hand down his.......well thats my point. i would say you really are not to be trusted while half-asleep. because.....well youre not in your full senses. and unpredictable.
well you do know that dose....means a dose of something not like "dos" wich means two. anyways, the first one feels bland or like a multicolor thoothpaste. i would go for the second one too.
well you can always go fidel on the dog, and force him to obey. how can you resist such an adorable thing. hit him slightly with a rolled paper, in the nose, whenever he does something wrong. how hard is that?
yeah, thanks ill keep all that in mind and make everything bad go away. ill try to fix it when i get the time, and clear any grammar mistakes.
i read this a while back, and i think that how the story is going its good, i liked it, even though its a bit rough , and not for those who want something less gory.
actually, nope i dont. but yeah, im pretty busy too with school and stuff. but the chapter truly is the first one with an actual, non-beserker duel.
under construction
this is good writting. but from the preface we can tell little of the surroundings, if its meant to be that way, its great but if its not... and another thing, i found this to be a very interesting start, wich makes you wonder right from the start. though the part that says "the hotness of the angry tears" should sound something a bit like this. "the warm tears of anger that flow through my face, and fall to the floor." but otherwise this was very good. , and in the part "My arms fly over my head as i clutch my head" should not repeat head again, the reader already knows what youre talking about , so it should go like this. "My arms fly over my head as i clutch it" . there are very little grammar errors, but since you wanna get this published, you might wanna broaden your vocabulary with new words , check some stories, look for good writting advice. and try to describe things a bit more , i like the raw emotion and the mysterious idea that keeps the reader wondering "what's happening?". so, keep it up, i only began writting something small, i started today, but i prepared myself before i would. but this is good , keep it up, and i hope it works out.
its not sketchy, actually, i wasnt sure because you normally dont see demons go unoticced and more when they arent hidden, or something. its actually very good *reps*
woah, this is really great. but, they live in modern day, right? this was so good, i enjoyed reading this a lot. can't wait for the next.
yeah, but what about KH1, sora left and didn't exactly return home. her mother remembered him, and what about kairi in KH1 she remembered, im sure she should have told sora's ad riku's parents that they left home....and then forgotten , and what about school? they would need to repeat one grade....XD...no sense.
woah, nice chapter. one thing i did notice that this chapter seems rushed. and its a bit harder to follow than the others. but the lack of time does that...i barely have time for anything myself. nice drawing...though i don't get why he looks femenine...but its your concept art.
woah, i didnt notice the letters that go down. they just make it even better good work...i wanna try this.
XD....well actually, words have only as much importance as we give them. so if hello is a greeting, when most people know it as a greeting, why change it? i believe this is downright pointless. i mean, so what....now are we going to change the name of sandwitch because it sounds like its a witch of sand too?...give me a break! btw....heaveno....that sounds so long for a little greeting.
