well, the message goes through very clearly like most of your songs. and it rhymes....but remember not all songs have everything rhyming in each verse.
well. i know how it feels to lose pets. its a hard deal, but we have to accept it. the day your kitten died, a girl in my class had a kitten that died too. she was devastated.....so she kinda returned home. but the point is, death is an inevitable part of life, and we might never have our pets till the end, they life a much shorter span than us.
yeah it is. kinda reminds me of......you, fun in a depraved way....jk anyways, as i said this only scratches the surface. but its still somehow, creepy and disgusting.....in a totally good and poetic way , i mean. dont feel dirty.....as long as you dont lose yourtself in the person youre trying to portray
to tell the thruth. this made me feel a bit disgusted in some parts. but....this is rather harsh...but poetic at the same time. except one thing.....the person who you portray in this poem, compares his hands to gorilla hands? thats the only thing i actually thought strange. but to tell the thruth i feel as if this barely scratches the surface. but its best that way.
why such a random thing. and the video came out a while ago. but anyways, i think its kinda subliminal. i mean her eyes only open when she's looking at the light from above. and the way she raises her hands, and i love the place and the lighting the gave the place.
this...is quite different. but its quite interesting to read something new and different.
that sounds like such a strong and.....tomboish poem. i was so amazed by it, the words are really strong. specially the theme. just dont kill anyone..k?
inspiration comes in different ways, and forms, the poems made out of pure esscense are always the best ones.
just one thing about the drawing, the face looks like a skull. but you gave strato so many varying weapons. and that made me realize how weak church and callum really are.
well, there's room for improvement. one thing, you should try and describe things more. and mum?....try and diverse it beetwen mother and mom..mom only when the character is speaking to her. and you should use italics when the character is thinking something. it helps the understanding of your story. and well, this is short, just try and expand on things, and try the italics. thats really all i can reccomend im not such an expirienced writter.
kinda a sad story. each part telling a tale.... of an addiction that will never end. counting the days with great fear. waiting the moment that death comes near. the love for the addiction will never end. as much of the tears will never fade. woah, what a sad poem wich got me rhyming too. its so short yet it portrays a lot. theres really nothing wrong with it. now, i really wanna post my own poems.
it wouldnt be incest. the only thing that sora's heart was used for was to create namine, because his heart isnt completely pure .....unlike kairi's by kairi's heart being within him...well you know the rest. not only that , but the report in itself says so, sora's body and soul were only used as intermediaries. and just because sora held kairi's heart, doesnt mean that the nobodies are brothers somehow.
woah, this part uses a lot of different weaponry. and a lot of swords, i like specially skills, the blades. everything in this chapter displayed a lot of that. and it was good. i actually thought you had given up on this, since you removed the link siggy and all.
wow, now you made me want to try this. i also tried the acroustic(letters fall) thing you did, wich i dont know why i didnt think of. but i like this stuff. so you made a countour of your hand and wrote in it?
woot, i finally got a visitor message
glad to help. if you have to lock yourself in the room do so, for a while. but try and do constructive things, like putting some music and dancing to it. or write, something that will help you blow off steam, without hurting anyone. i think more than anything, you have to think in retrospect and see what the most prominent cause of your anger is. or sing if you can....im sure you can overcome this problem, if you look at things from a more relaxed point of view.
well lets help out. but i think shades said almost everything. this is lacking detail...a lot of it. as shades said it seems rushed. and its short, i consider you revise this and keep going, the plot is there , just try to expand on things.
its kinda not cool if im not there...... wait better not...or i would probably die. im not popular enough....*goes into an emo corner*
you mean something similar to how you create gummi ships? that would be pretty interesting. i would really like something like that. to create a keyblade....
the idea is nice....but i dont really see it in a KH game. but, this would also lead to some interesting combinations.
