actually, the houl...it was supposed to be "howl" , the thing is that i wrote this on a notebook, and when i did, i wrote howl...but it looked like i wrote houl, and in it stayed houl, because i forgot to spell check. i will explain everything. the cymbals of lyre.....my friend asked me the same thing...,when i use lyre im refering to the literary genre , not the instrument used...because there is an literary genre called "lyre" also. and "it will howl through the fire like the cymbals of lyre" means, that the person is comparing the gunshot to be like the sound of cymbals used in the literary genre "lyre"...or in music, whatever you want to call it. and "Marrows" is a clear use of personification.
if she was thrown to be hunted upon..... i would agree with that. the wolves are far more deserving creatures of life , than she will ever be....
again? well, i guess its all mental.... wow, you passed the test shades, your work is good to go.. :)
It will howl through the fire like the cymbals of lyre. the scorching earth spills its sorrow it cries through its marrows. Pull it now the voices say pull it now so you won't regret stop the trembling and destroy. Everything I've worked for Just destroy. watch the scarlet run through my face pull it now Just don't forget its only a trigger pull it now without any remorse or regret pull it now. ------------------------------------------- i need critique, this one is rather experimental. and was supposed to be my poem for septembers contest, but the competition is too major for me.
lol this truly captures the essence of a man , in a moody day. or atleast a very bad day and a cranky man. nice work. everything that might otherwise be something normal turns irritating. thus the smart craking comments.
yeah, i figure he would look something similar to that. anyways, his pants look like sora's. but i really like it that way. i think this is one of your best drawings yet.
well, thanks. anyways CnC , but you can call it critique. to tell the truth i dont really know. but its critique. when you ask for CnC youre asking for critique.
is this talking about the devil? well what a hip way to do it. the c4 part was specially good.
the best way to put a person in their place is to actually show that you can be way more controlled than they are , and not stoop to their lvl. verbal abusse also works...but meh. anyways, that woman has no right to call you what she called you. you should definately put her in her place, in front of your father! or you could work things out. but the putting her in her place...sounds more fun. but the working things out is the right thing
this is really nice its really teen driven, and for its purpose its perfect. its really good SoS.
youre not understanding are you now? its your story, you do whatever you want with it. but whatever you do now, its okay because you learned from your mistakes, and will most likely fix them.
poetic justice? anyways, they are really amazing. the dregree of these poems...it far surpasses mine. hats off to you. btw. the portfolio idea is very good. would keep things cleaner.
i was speaking to CTR, about the word "Alture" and then, after hearing something this came to mind, its not very good. but please CnC. "Alture" I will climb to the end were i can finally find rest. the end that breaches everything in sight within all it's glory and might. away from conflicts and war i'll sleep this night without darkness or blight. I'll outstrech my arms to the sky. and i'll reach toward the light. in this high and mighty place. i will finally see everything again. all the things that fall into place. among this grand scheme of life. let me reach higher among the grasp of angels. Don't let me fall into the den of Devils. where i can only find something horrendous. let me see light one last time. before i fall into a painful demise.
well, you can check it if you want. can't promise you anything. anyways , her dubbing was really proffesional , at least has proffesional as it could get.
if im not mistaken, this is also being done by another member, and it was pretty good if i might add. unless she stopped doing it, the episodes should be in the user portal.
yes, i understand... i mean, when youre so close and yet so far...yeah i totally understand. but those are about the only options. or you can be a vase, holding everything, but at a certain point the water will pour, you can't hold forever. know what im saying?
well, sad to say, but you need to stop thinking about liking her. not only that, but your anger may lead to some dire consequences. well, you need to relax(plain and simple) think of something that will help you relax, something that will let you see things clearly. organize your thoughts. but you have to play your part, you have to be open minded and receptive to things that are relaxing and calming.
thanks CTR because i was having a little trouble. and fixed some things for better enjoyment.
this is awesome. the rhyme and rhythim are great. and the feelings are really strong in this poem.
well, thanks . im glad you liked it.
