this is strange normally he must have noticced the sudden slight headaches....and more so when his sugar level was that high. but seriously, is he diabetic....well, anyways, they will probably start giving him pills to help lower his sugar level. i hope he gets better.
its not bad at all....i really like the prayer part. its a desperate cry for heaven to bring deliverance.
Wow..that is a very strong poem and it's one of the best ways to vent.
Anyways....i haven't seen xaale reporting anything....but it would be good if he could come and clarify, this kinds of things need continuity(is this even a word?)....
omg XDD.....i actually covered my eyes on that he was the youngest so i thought they would save him...XDD. though the 2nd was kinda strange....they know how to prevent...but either way....they die. in the 3rd....that one was really gruesome....though the feature Evil mentioned might actually be fun to do. i actually watched the movie....in wich they show the gruesomeness....but then i watched it on TNT...they edited the scenes...so they wouldn't have so much gore. i still think that the 2 plastic girls died the worst....they didn't die instantly...
nice drawing....it looks like kiba from wolf's rain. what song is the words next to it from? "Artes Hellkitten" thats quite catchy using a romanic language. but the shading tech is pretty good.
I was gonna make the reunion longer....that way i could explain a lot of things about the characters....you know...i'll edit that...before i get on with chapter 4, i do have my doubts about placing too much description, i'm just not sure why i'm so doubtfull about descriptions....i'll try to get this...chapter done better. i will try to get this mistakes fixed...because i really wanted to expand on maria and Alphonse...but i was afraid of making things drag on...and seem slow...guess i did the contrary....okay, thanks.
....... O.o....okay...i don't think thats the kind of snow i want3d to s33. XDD
i feel your pain....here it never snows so i've never seen snow...well except in movies....*tear*
Fate 3: Intrusion *Richard* The pathway extended toward the hill, that came to a stop in the great tree that shaded it’s moderate expanse, as I followed Damian a few paces back, I could feel a tense atmosphere that created a gap between us “It truly has been a while, maybe more than I would want to remember” My thoughts felt like drifting smoke among my head, almost evanescent; but at this moment that shouldn’t have been an important matter, and yet it felt like nails being pushed through my head. “why must you neglect me?” The though kept hitting, breaking slowly through every little action. “Are you okay, Richard?” Said the voice I recognized as Maria’s “Where is he?” I said looking behind Maria’s petit figure ; trying to find any trace of the reason why I had decided to come. “My brother is over there” Maria pointed to a part of shade, where I could see a slight tall figure, to my surprise this didn’t seem very amusing, I really was looking forward to this , but my thoughts might have been focused elsewhere. "We had finally returned to the little hill, the one that held all of our childhood memories, but somehow instead of the excitement that I felt before; I felt many questions and doubts overwhelm me." “Have I really lost sight; where had these sudden doubts come from?” “Hey, Richard, come on” I could hear, Alphonse, Maria’s brother who was now extending his hand as a sign of invitation. My body was ready to react as it had done many times ago , A warm reception that involved, contact between two bodies, a hug, surely this might have been acceptable between children, but I couldn’t do that to Alphonse now. “Hey, guys, how long as it been?” Alphonse said scratching his head with a slight grin. “The Hill, it was merely just a little special place we found when we were children , but nonetheless it felt unique, to me it always held a freshness and purity , as if the problems of this world couldn’t reach this place, the great tree that stood to shade it, the grass that felt like a sheet of wool, but that alone didn’t make the place so great, it was the things we shared here, a place that rejected problems of the world.” “Five long years….” Damian said , in a tone that distilled some sort of faint disgust, as he moved toward the edge of the hill, looking at the vast expanse of city that stretched itself toward the distance of hills. To this behavior, Alphonse looked at me quizzically, the question his expression made was clear. I just shrugged slightly, after all there was no answer, or at least no answer I could give. Maria looked at both of us, and seemed pressured. “Let’s eat something” She said, as she unfolded a small blue colored blanket that was big enough to cover a small patch of grass, her intention was probably to lift the mood. Everyone sat down, but Damian sat a few feet away from us. “Five years of doing this already” Alphonse said giving a long sigh. “Well it’s your fault for being such a good athlete, maybe you wouldn’t be in the “school for the specially jerks” I said almost sarcastically. “Meh, its not my fault, besides when I’m in a professional football team, you guys can come see me, being in a sports school will pay off just you wait.” He said jokingly. “Wouldn’t be much to brag about” Maria said, her voice was always so faint, and innocent sounding. “Way to betray your brother” Alphonse said jokingly, messing Maria’s hair with his hand, with his other hand grabbing a pack of chips. There was a slight silence. “Umm….guys, do you remember the first time we came here?” Maria said as she looked slightly at Damian. “Yeah…Richard you always got lost on the maze…I always had to go get you and bring you by the hand” Alphonse said laughing, while he finished his bag of chips. There was another awkward silence, everyone was expecting Damian to actually say something, even if just slight. “Five years, five years and we still keep doing this crap, don’t you get tired of it?” Damian finally spoke, his words had a very angered tone in them. “Of what?, you being such an jackass?” Alphonse said defensively “Water and oil, Alphonse and Damian; Alphonse was a jock by trade, or at least people thought of him that way; Damian could be considered a whiner and very “emo” , but I think this was hardly the case, there was more than meets the eye, in both cases.” “Well, maybe if you weren’t so whiny about your life you would learn to appreciate it more!” Alphonse spouted as the verbal demolition continued it’s course “What would you know!? , you barely have any brains to sustain that body of yours which might be your only asset” Damian said, now standing up ,thinking of good insults which to throw at Alphonse. “Alright , that’s it!” Alphonse yelled as he got ready to throw a punch, which landed directly to Damian’s face, fortunately Damian moved just quick enough to avoid getting his face broken and only ended up with a little bruise, i just looked at the scene inmobilized and astonished. Silence… “Brother, no!” Maria said stopping Alphonse from taking further action, as she stood in the middle of them. “I don’t need this ****!” Damian spouted as he started running off towards the maze. “Alphonse!” Maria said, before quickly running off behind Damian and through the maze. There was a slight silence and I just stood there without even trying to utter a word. Alphonse just regained his composure and leaned against the great tree. “I’m sorry” He said moving toward me, and placing his hand on my shoulder. “I can’t say you did the right thing, but you should really apologize to Damian” I said as I looked at the expanse of the hill. “Maybe later…..hey how have things been ever since I changed schools?”, He said lowering his tone slightly, moving his hand away slowly. “well, everything has been okay…just your average 16 year olds” I said forcing a fake smile, the thing I had just said was a great lie. “Maria, even though it was the second day of school, was already being picked on by Rebecca and her crew, Damian had turned even more bitter towards things, and I…,I was so confused about so many things.” “I’m glad that you guys are okay, Remember I’m older than you by 2 years so if anything happens I’ll always be there to protect you guys, even Damian, okay?” He said, messing his hair slightly to spike it. “Always protect us….he was more than meets the eye in so many ways, some people might have said he was only a brute or a jock, but he was always protecting us, ever since childhood and even at the age 13 when he first left school , he still found a way to protect us” As I found myself thinking this, I noticed how close he was to me, and I felt nervous, and my stomach started feeling a bit cold, so I moved back to create distance. He just looked at me and sat down on the hill’s border, leaning back with his hand as support. “I’m just staying to watch the sundown” He said, staring at the distance. The brightly colored sphere moved through the hills as if slightly caressing them one last time, as it started falling under them, and the sky turned into shades of different light red and pink colors. “I shouldn’t stay until nightfall, I need to catch up to Maria” Alphonse said standing up and cleaning any trace of grass that might have gotten stuck in his team jacket. “I’m going, are you gonna go now?, you should, just so you don’t get lost on the maze” He said, grinning slightly. “That was only when I was a kid, I think I’ll survive on my own this time” I said jokingly. After a few minutes , silence fell on the hill, and I was alone in it, maybe I could have a chance to sort out my thoughts. “I’m not sure why Damian, seems so repulsed by things, maybe he is going through a phase, maybe I should do the same and grow up, stop silly reunions like these, face my fears…tell him how I truly feel..” My chain of thought got interrupted by some slight footsteps, which made great contrast with the silence that was just moments ago. “Alphonse….did you forget something?” I turned as I spoke, but then a throbbing pain in my chest, made me immediately know who it was… Faite… ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Edit: If you wanna give me a detailed inspection of any chapter you PM it, please?, cause i don't want an super huge post here, i know it would nail you another post, but please don't.
wow...such an old movie.... but i also loved it when i was younger. now...it doesnt really seem that good....
Welcome....i'm sure that you'll meet a lot of cosplayers here. follow the rules, spam in spamzone, make friends and....well ...have fun.
Well...as long as people don't go all wild...going around doing wild crazy stuff....just because of the sign.....i mean one thing is a healty livestyle and other is being religious. But i think that this goes under the assumption of " you are being watched" ..."you'll burn in hell" thing......which i think it's a bad thing. but the sign i see nothing bad with.
i feel that 3 girls are a lot to leave with such short descriptions. i think that you need to integrate the girls personality a bit better, because by hearing a name, the character needs to be remarkable enough for once a person reads the character's name....they can imagine them.
i know, i was just kidding. but most of the time your word IS fact, so kids always listen to Jiku neon
I actually thought you wrote another chapter so i came to look. XDD. anyways....i do hope to see more of this.
it's short and vague(but the vagueness is on purpose) i had read it quite a while ago. and i certainly think you should keep writting , maybe not this story, or maybe you should, but keep on writting.
O...M...G.....*faints* uber thrashing... kinda makes me wonder....how are my stories? hmm.... trogdor...you nitpick too much....and out of personal preference too.
she's certainly okay. but not as great looking as aqua. i mean, she looks pretty bland to me. except for the hair , she exactly looks like kairi.
Does anyone live where i live? i only know one member....
