i read this a while ago, and your other story also(the one in the prison...in hell?) anyways in both stories i commend you for originality. and not only interesting but i feel that you employ a lot of detail into the stories mystery. and like to get into the characters too. anyways, to CnC. you should space things a bit more, especcially if it something important, like descriptions, or convesations. and im intrigued by this story because by its description it seems interesting to mix art with Psychology and the occult. and remember the stories should be done for personal satisfaction, because sometimes people might not read yours, doesnt mean you should quit.
tecnically it is... so what is the actual problem? that you want another life? EDIT:since youre not answering , ill expand on this myself. monotony is bad, and after a certain point we just want to escape it you feel like everything is there, and yet something is missing. you want to escape and do things, like in the movies. and feel happy as oppossed to monotony. but the thruth is...your life is what most other people consider "perfect". even though you yearn for something more. some people might say your life is perfect, but its not how can something monotonous be happiness?
