Quiet*ultima shot'd* :guns: teehe! I'm glad we all agree. :)
Silly boy, and your overactive imagination, *Ultima shots with vincent's pistols* :guns: Now, is there anyone objecting to the fact that Crimson is a flirt? *points gun* Good, then we all agree!! :)
Why, thank you. I always thought your name was pretty cool too.
no other choice but to whip your manliness out mori. I really don't care if people think I'm a girl....well actually, I do. But, its better to clarify since Crimson would hit on you or start flirting if you actually were a girl. >.>
I'm not so sure, I mean, Im not against it, but It could get out of hand and the word "Religion" centralizes it too much. I would say no, but not completely against it. I believe that it might only give inmature members(or tempted mature members) to flaunt their belief on others and it could lead to a lot of flaming and also oppinionated statements. I don't mean to sound harsh by saying this, but a LOT of the people at KHV would just bash and burn any member that differs their believe. Not only that, but if we add that we have christian children in the website, older members flaming them and downright overpowering them with their advanced cognitive abilities could just make things worst. We can all say that it could be avoided , but there will aways be someone who will destroy any effort to order. So to conclude, I would say. No.
Well, now this is becoming grander scale, and now I want to see where this is going.I've been very busy lately, but I'm glad I was able to read this part, its somewhat delving into the grander scale. I couldn't spot any errors, but that's just me.
Okay, I'm bumping this, its not really nice having it on a second page when I still update it. Update Not a very long update, remember this is the second part of chapter 3. I'm not sure how I'm doing in the suspence department so, I'm sorry for that. I really tried, but I'm still getting the hang of writing. Enjoy.
I just meant, the changing of scenes. Much like in some parts you're reading about Aryane and after a few you see someone else completely. That in my opinion should merit something like this example: Spoiler But of course that's up to choice, I don't want to ruin your story and all.
I wish I could understand this better, perhaps its the writing, perhaps its the spacing or maybe its the amount of characters that keep the simple situation at hand a bit smothered under something. Now, If you are changing a scene, then perhaps you should consider showing something to portray the change. It doesn't mean its a bad story(but I don't think I need to tell you that) I just would advice at a clearer presentation to this, not because its bad but I wanted to read it, but struggled with it. I do like that you keep this at a very realistic level and there's something that picks the interest, but again I feel it is not presented in the best way.
I can't give you any critique, as I've said you surpass me, I can't find anything wrong. :) I will say that I'm puzzled as to why you divert from "this" to 'this' in dialouge; I normally never see that, but I believe its just something aesthethic. Spoiler Most good stories ARE ignored, while the less-elaborated ones are a the most recognized...There are exceptions. If you write a KHV story, expect people to see it. >.>;
I've never left you any sort of notes or anything.....xD What's up shades?
hello. ^_^
Well, I believe school is the cause for the slowdown, no need to worry. School and Real life come first of course. Just as long as you remember to write once in a while.
Yeah, I know he is a badass, but he's lived with her his whole life. He truly is one of the most badassed protagonists I've ever seen.
The characters are just so badass and trampy. That's so peculiar. Can't say its such a bad thing either. This part was kinda sick and twisted; I mean i'm just suprised at how leisurely he took the thing with Marie. Now we wait for another chapter.
Well...most of the time Kiddy anime is just better...besides there's nothing good on.....yeah, right >.> It's not the fact that I was embarassed at the fact that I saw Aika. It's just that at every take.....PANTIES! The wind blew....PANTIES! A girl is shown....PANTIES! Everything....PANTIES! At first you think it's cool, then you see girls going crazy around each other as high ranking officials in an all-girl evil army and their panties are shown every scene(literally). And I must admit it made me laugh as the girls got beaten by the main protagonist(which was also a girl) and it was a panty-fest. So, if that's your thing go ahead and watch it.
We all Know it was you.
You are in a really tough situation. Seriously, you should consider leaving scheduled plans to the people at your gaming company, so if something does happen, they could atleast keep things going. As for your "Mommy dearest" I'd say try to stay on her good side, until you've discovered some way to escape and save your brothers. Perhaps you could talk to a trusted family member, after that you could call social services and force her to change her ways. You and your brothers aren't little kids anymore, I wish I could tell you you could count with my personal help, but there's really nothing I can do, but give you advice.
okay, reported. thanks for pointing that out. Anyways, you should come clean with your friend, its not an easy thing, but you have to try, It will be better than having to stand his behaviour.
Hopefully, not. So, this Mike I believe you should try and be accertive with him, maybe he could turn over a new leaf, its not like he could be that bad, can he? Anyways, tell him strictly how you don't like his attitude and that you wouldn't want to ruin the friendship because of his rotteness, he needs to stop being so bothersome, girls get irritated easily and that's normal, he shouldn't add to the fire.
