Well, you've been kinda down lately, it must be hard moving and all. Well, i'm fine, just a bit tired, but nonetheless fine.
Is this your way of venting? because to me it seems like your just bitter towards Haseo. I don't know what he's done to you, but it couldn't be that morally wrong, that you would want him dead. You didn't even add your friend Riku lover. She stood up for you (yeah in a very wrong way)but atleast she did it. If you really want haseo to stop, do you think by attacking, you're demostrating to be the better person? that is just inmature behaviour, and I think you should think a little more before posting a story of such nature . I'm pretty sure Haseo will just laugh, but that isn't to say he will. you and Haseo need to stop being so insulting towards each other. as such I will not critique this story because (this chapter) sounds like some excuse to show your hatred towards Haseo.
Not all threads are spam in the spam zone, some are placed there because of the lesser restrictions surrounding the place. Not only that, this is the most frequented area of KH-V(aside from the code vault) so getting a message through is easier. Skyler, its been a while. and even though I don't know what's going on, I'll say this. Whatever you're going through or changes you might wanna make, I wish you success. I've always tried to run from the drama epicenter, so I don't know much, but if you ever want to come back there will be people waiting for you. And while I do not know if what cin said is true or not, it would be foolish of my part to go against cin(since I have nothing against him). Skyler, take care.
Hey, how've you been doing Mike? Have you been getting better?
MSUK. since right now you're enery is drained, you should eat colorful fruit or something that tastes real good. you need light, perhaps going to a park in the morning to take in the sunlight. Draw, write, do things that make you feel good. I know you probably feel like you don't want to, but you must. This will help you regain some energy and stability, but it won't fix your problem, but its a good start.
MSUK. You might be going through a Major depressive episode. or perhaps some sort of depression. And that is not healthy at all. Try to eat something nice, go out somewhere fresh. and if you feel like you can't handle that, then you need to get help. it is no laughing matter. please do go on the safe side with this.
Just the other day....my friend said "They're calling you a *** again"because one of my other friends said to me "you're fat"(which sounded like ***) and he said it in front of some canadian teens, just to impress them with his english skills(we all speak spanish) I almost insulted him, right then and there. but I refrained, because I know he was just inmature, because he wanted to 'impress' the canadians. I know using me as a tool was just wrong, but I barely cared at all. So whenever someone calls you that ignore them, its a waste of time and fighting back is even more draining if you don't have good comebacks. So take things depending on the person who says them, and remember that brainless words mean nothing.
(I know this is gonna backfire completely or something -_-) Maybe my wording wasn't the best one, sorry. When I said that I meant religion who warps and bends religion to what they believe. So, per se. Well founded religion is not the best word, but to define what I was meaning. A religion that doesn't warp and brainwash people, but instead gives you the freedom to wonder , without being some blind sheep or warping its ways to make people mindless drones, I suppose. as the most prominent examples are how the catholic church burned people or killed them, made them suffer and pay large amounts of money. I guess that's one example of "Badly founded religion" As for "Well founded religion" I've yet to see a whole congregation and or denomination who are completely devoid of the above mentioned. but some have it to a lesser extent, so in this case its up to the person. The same could be said of Atheism, but in different ways. some Atheists bash christians and wish them eliminated, while others just don't believe in God. I'm christian but if the church did something out of line I would be against said thing, such as any human with common sense would do. but to be an Atheist extremist who would get mad because of little things. I hope that made some sense. Thought I probably said something wrong and my points might be blown away.
Do check this. I saw some slight spelling errors(around 3 only). This kind of reminds me of a book about harlem I read, and this was rather exciting and interesting, this is sure to get you a good grade. I found you used the word "pelt" "pelting" ect. there are other synonyms you could use instead of repeating the same one. that's all , otherwise this was very good.
I understand where you're coming from, but religion really isn't "Follow god or hell!, you can't do this or that, you're a sinner" I wouldn't want to follow a religion which, instead of helping the world made it worse. I do believe in God, but I also would never follow a God who tells you to be ignorant(as much people seem to think God says). Unfortunately people just jugde what they see and the rest of everything gets balled up with the blame. I do say that Atheism is slowly becoming extreme(or has always been) as much as badly founded religion. So in a way they would both cause the same kind of harm(if employed incorrectly) on society, Education and Goverment.
Well, the three girls I could tell there's something odd, the left one has a very sly look but she has a teddy bear, is that some sort of Irony? I don't really see anything wrong with her clothing, but perhaps try adding a bit more to it. perhaps a sleveless jacket that only covers her bust line and some more desing on her current clothes. As is you've improved quite a bit.
For some reason, that sounds like something you would say to consolate a person who can't get any. I'll be frank with you, my face is ugly, my body is bad, so what should I pick? Well, the thing is, I cannot expect people to come and say "He's ugly, but his personality is the best!" because it doesn't work like that. Looks are the hook, personality is the keeper. So in a way they have to compliment each other. Same with the face and body. But most of the time, if you have a healty body, your face reciprocates, so its not a matter of face or body, its more of a matter beetwen attraction and unattraction. For different tastes, a different color.
I see your point, but the thread is getting sidetracked. I will say one thing, the media is stupid for trying to destroy people's reputation and we are even stupid-er for making such a hype about it. Isn't being a celebrity another job to do in society they sing(or just make some catchy phrase and reapeat it),act, dance ect. for our enjoyment, their lifes are not ours to destroy or jugde. Now back on track. They did seem to be having some friction, I feel bad now that they still have that star tatoo. wonder what thei'll do with it.
How do you treat your family? Because let me tell you, most people cannot stand a person who mopes around apathetically at everything. After a while they get mad and stressed around a person like that. Or they could just be making a joke. but seriously, are you really that trouble making that they would say something like that?
That was very cute, the story in itself is very cute with all its mistakes and the drawings are win. The last one was cute, but funny for some reason. Such a simple story, and yet kinda nice.
or maybe he just forgot how to resume things. I cannot vote, unless there is....... MORTAL COMBAT!!!! *Ironically kill bill music plays*
For saving the "girl almost raped".
You're always coming up with very peculiar things. It was very entretaining, and kept me wondering until the very end. One thing I do find peculiar is how you expanded info on such a short descripted character as Jonathon, giving incentives of his life subtlely.
Update Added chapter 4. This one is a bit longer than most, it was going to be much longer, but I notticed most stories here aren't that long either. Chapter 5 will try to patch most things that were cut from chapter 4 and bring myself to the challenge....as you know I've begun writing and don't know much, but hopefully I can describe things well enough, from what happens in chapter 5. btw... Thanks Jiku, If anyone sees anything I should improve on, do tell. Though mostly I think I need to improve on how to capture the attention and make stylistic things.
Umm...not much....We talk so much on IM and yet we talk so little at the site. its strange really. XD
