Well...I'd definately get a more solid idea on what you want the people to hear, because at times I couldn't exactly get a feel for this...You're pretty good with vocal, but the screams...those could be changed to a more punkish scream or bettered, your choice. As for the lyrics...those are good, so I won't tell you what to improve, because I found them really nice. As for a band....how many members, and what do they play, so far? I think you should atleast get a guitarist to do a track...but it be better if you didn't use that mic....it's a bit bad. Overall...I believe you can do something good with this.
So after this post...I can't post anything? Not even my little input on the story?Or any thoughs or anything at all...? The fact that the says "the story is written for your enjoyment" Who's enjoyment, exactly? After all almost no one comes to check stories more than once or twice, unless the story involves them in any way. Sad, but true. That's why I don't post stories unless I want critique. Btw....sperm missiles....that's kinda....weird in a funny and creative kind of way. And the narrative through the eyes of such a.....interesting character is pretty cool, too. That was all. And now I guess there will be no more posts, aside from the story?
There's gotta be something done soon....Or we'll all get bored to death. And I don't think that's a good thing.
Funny, and yet we seem to be the only site who is boring, and still maintains some members. I mean,what do we do here? Nothing...there's no...
Well, clearly....this site is basically stuck in a rut. I wish something could be done.
Well...I'm a prem, and I feel crappier than when I was a norm :/
Yes, and now you can change your usertitle. Which is kinda cool, and also visit the prem area...which is kinda...Lame.
A prem now, eh? it's not that big of a deal, but congrats.
Well...I am extremely frustrated to no end with my wii. If it wasn't for my Tales game I would probably throw the thing and smash it(or trade it in, which sounds more fruitful xD) It has no RPG'S...And I mean serious RPG's, not crap like oopona, or whatever it's called. This is horrible, and my PS2 is getting no love with the RPG's that come out with it, so I'm buying(hopefully) A 60gig PS3, which means I could still enjoy my Ps2 games, without the Ps2. The wii is too focused on family games...they don't give RPG players some love....but the PS3 will change all that. I can't wait, and can't believe I found a PS3 60gig in my closest gamestop store :) ....now, if I buy it I can play Valkiria Chronicles. Regarding to the wii....I'll keep it...so it can gather dust, 'cause it seems it's no good for me...Unless they release 3 good RPG's in the next month in Trading it in.
Thank you so much. I really needed someone to point things out. And, yes...they used that needle again...they told me it was one of the thickest...
I'm kinda doing horrible. I'm in a wheelchair, and today I'm gonna get my stiches out, but I think they're gonna use a thick needle to extract...
Hey Styx. Just leaving my banal text here. >.> Anyhow...What are you gonna do with "being"...I mean...I think I'm the only one who actually...
I'm sorry Jason...but R3c0Nzi13 is the poet...or atleast better at it than both of us. I never imagined this, though. It's such a vivid poem, the message is clear and it kinda tells of standing up and all. It's a very enjoyable read.
Yes...I read it, it's kinda crudely rough in fights and all...not that that's a bad thing. What was more interesting was the fact that a kid just shot him, it seems like a "U gotz owned buy a kaid!!!1!!11" Kinda thing xD. I'm guessing some people enjoy this much fighting and shooting. It is kinda not my cup of tea, but that doesn't mean it was bad. It is an interesting read, aside from my calm taste.
This is just exaggeration...You're just someone who played P4 first, and then played the third. I greatly enjoyed the third...and P3FES would be the way to go if you want a long game...it is repetitive, but it's not something to pull the game off over. But if you can't handle or don't like a steady repetitive pace, then P3 might not be for you.
Arrghh...I can't believe I might have had a chance to see you in person...why, oh why? Well....anyways my school doesn't allow proms, so it might have been nice to go to one....*slit slit slit* Nah, not really. I was told I need to work on my confidence, and whatever...only pretty girls get comments. >.> Btw Summer, I didn't know you sang gospel. Maybe I'll post some pics later. I have to adjust to my photogenic-ness(what!?) Well, yah...
For some reason I think you need to find a new theme for your songts, because love seems to be out the door...and to be sure...time can always be re-arranged, but feelings, baby those can never change. Your most fierce songs are the backlash ones..these they just make me feel sad because of the comment at the start. Are you feeling okay?
By a Thread Spoiler You know how easy it is. The breakage of the soul It breaks just like a twig. Between today’s and tomorrow’s And all the day’s past Leaving all the traces of sorrow How hard it is to say goodbye How hard to remember the past Maybe too hard, perhaps Friendships do last a lifetime And maybe, even more Memories fall away through time The sad, the happy The everlasting The Eternal Untying the bonds The hopes, dreams nurtured And making new pacts They do not last a lifetime A clamor An ode to the days of past For they are never coming back Innocence Traded for wisdom Has amounted onto our senses Taking the place Of what so dear we held Let’s build this thread once more From beginning to end Comment: This poem actually goes by the hand with "the child" and another poem I can't seem to find....which make...3 poems that are related. this one doesn't deal with understanding the mind of a child, but more about honoring memories. Forever & Never Spoiler Our hearts they are dying Displacing the pumping emotions Into a Frenzy of flurry The promise of eternity broken Vermillion running through the sun's kiss Into the embrace of a night woven The cold embrace of solitude Hope that revels into the air My ever foolish attitude I hold onto scraps of that eternal Into the morning's dawn embrace Forever now just seems... Infernal Our hearts they are dying Into the morning's dawn embrace, Vermillion running through the sun's kiss Only for us to know... That love isn't eternal Comment: This one...this one is a way to vent...I haven't been feeling too well...and this poem...it's message kinda blurted out of me...this one is new I did it today.... Moonlit Nightmare Spoiler To be awake and see the moon Under it's ebony gowns of lavish Among its splendor and glamour Under it's radiance and glow To dance surreptitious Among the darkness and it's flow The zephyr our accomplice The dance our tool of trade The darkness our enchantress Our shadows & nightmares To break free from confinement In this dance they shall be delighted To be awake and see the moon among the land of great carnage To dance and shimmer among the darkness 'cause by the morning they'll be no chances. Comment: this one is kinda a last minute...I'd figure it look un-organized if I did not post 3 poems...so I saw the moon...it seemed to be radiating this intense yellow color, and so...I'm currently in a dark room, and sometimes it feels like something might walk up to me, so...
Well...since this was bumped...I have something else to say in this matter. Your little pen name? It's fizzled with almost borderline purple prose. What I mean is....Unless Catherine looks like the bride of frankenstein, this sounds melodramatic...but it only borders slightly on that, so that is not to say a good number of people wouldn't read that...unless of course the writing only gets drenched on and on by constant overuse of lavishly crafted (amuzing to some point) thread of words that almost borderline on melodrama(unless of course, as stated before....she truly Is a freak, and not some teenager with issues) Meanwhile...The twilight paragraph is in first person..."Eve's" was in third person...clearly, unless bella was a poetic little melodrama queen(which she was, except without the poetic portion) She wouldn't ever amount to anything more than the imitation of the mind of a teenager created by Stephanie Meyer. Her writing even so....feels so toned down...it's almost as if a kid wrote it. That alone shows how much she underestimated the intelligence of teenagers. In conclusion...Eve's(Styx's) is better, but at the same time fails to deliver due to the exhausting amount of lavish prose woven into every single sentence(sounds nice, but ain't so nice once you read too much), and twilight fails due to it being writen by someone who could have done a better job. Books are supposed to maintain a nice pace for the reader and maybe even go into chunks of prose and cleverness once in a while, but at others raw emotion is key...and showing the picture..not telling it(like meyer did in that paragraph) I believe a good writer(instead of trying to be better than Meyer or any other writer)should work their own little scale...taking the good from what they read and apply it, until they transform it into something their own. Most books don't need to impress the top english students, sometimes it's fine just pleasing the people who actually read the books for enjoyment Now...My decision would go with Eve's book , because it promises to be much more...but in the end I can only hope to read 1 page atleast 3 times to fully understand, and hold an theasaurus with me...which could potentially break my reading concentration. call me slow or whatever, but that is what I will stand by. I'm not the smartest person in the world, and much less have a dictionary stuck in my brain to know all the words. I certainly would not enjoy breaking away from a promising book because it is heavy laden with purple prose. That is my honest and true opinion. I was reluctant to say it, but I remembered you said something about wanting to better yourself...and me holding back on my honesty wasn't doing you any justice. I'm sorry Styx.
Oh, so true...this thread just made me feel so much better now, thanks guys. but..maybe lelouch is the wagon driver...why would they zoom in on him if he wasn't? Or he could be like marianne....or he could be the origami....I never understood where the power of geass came from and how little importance they gave to the whole technical thing....I mean....most things like C.C. being the org leader and then leaving, and the being a witch and how did Nunnaly break the geass, but couldn't break lelouch's? And V.V. what!? *Wiki's*
