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This made me smile. It was really interesting how you describe everything. And to be honest, this is the least purple prose I've seen in your works. That is improvement, and this means that you're learning to balance it.

Even so, I think your other works stood out due to their emotion mixed in with lavish words. I don't think for a second you should stop doing that. I just think that sentences shouldn't solely run with lavish. Writers don't have to be conventional, so go crazy with everything you think might work, and if it doesn't...well, at least you learned something from it. That's key.

I must say that you pulled this off really well. It really seems to suit you. As stated earlier, purple prose is mainly frowned upon because it deviates(and often confuses) the meaning of something, in which here I understood everything pretty clearly.

Commas should be used where needed. It's grammar. A person can't tell you that there are too much. You could use sentences that use less commas or something, but that just seems kinda pointless to me unless really needed.

Things to watch out for should be the overuse of adjectives and punctuation. Comma practice, and the balance of purple prose.

As for your last bombing, if you think a person isn't truly giving proper critique, and just in it to screw you over and blow your writing into non-existence. Ignore them. You shouldn't feel blown off by anything hurtful anyone says in regards to your art. It is your expression in process of refining, and no one should take that from you.

Well, maybe some faded light textures would have been nice. As for the second one posted. It has too much lighting, and the flow in the left side is too strong. You could add some impact font text, right below his face, and behind it. I think that may look nice. Or perhaps close by the SEES band, underneath it, so it looks like the text is enveloped in flow.

It looks like you used some smudging? Or liquify? I can't really discern. Anyways, I love what you've done so far with it, though I think the smudging, and or, liquify should all follow the same pattern. You have one going up in a wavy sort of way, and the rest going flatly. I love the lightning, and just about everything. The border is okay, I guess, fits nicely.

It's not a very common sized tag, but it works. I think you could still add text, or some more effects to make it stand out a bit more.

xD, I'd knew you'd be thrilled with these. But, I must say...I love the first one. I'd really like to learn how to make tags like that. It's rather lovely, and and has a soft feeling to it. I'd really like to know how to make sigs like these you have here lol.

Shin megami tensei games Inoccent Sin and Eternal Punishment? I think Reptar will love these.

Did I get it right? They are pretty much connected, so the title makes sense. Persona FTW.

Seems like you're improving. I see you tried to do some nice things there. Yet, still I'll CnC, with all honesty.

I don't really enjoy the lack of blending here. In some tags not blending at all is nice, but here the stock needed more blending, other than similar coloring, and a shadow effect behind her. I like the use of C4D to create flow. It's really basic, but it works nicely. The text is...well, I'd go with the first one in regards to that, since I like the positioning, but it's still not great. Overall, we can see that you tried many things with the text, and that's actually good.

Overall, you should keep at it, since it seems you're really trying at this.

Lulz...and here I thought it was a breakthrough in photoshop filters or something xD.

Ehm...How did you manage to change the original(and very dark) picture, into something so crisp and soft-looking? Sorry, I've no requests, but I always like to look at signature shops, and I really would appreciate it if you told me.

You have a good eye for knowing where to crop. And that's fine and all, but these just feel like cut-outs. Some need some re-touching, so that they look more vivid.

I've never really loved the bigger sizes. But these are pretty good.

Okay that's great and all, but you should be more mindful about what you post in the Spam Zone, dear. It's really not to reccomendable to post in this part if you're new. Unless you truly know what you're doing.

Play nice now, kiddies. <3

Try using a different size to work with. See some tutorials, get textures, new C4D, look for new styles that catch your eye.

It's really all about refreshing your know-how. It's important that you don't just make a gradient, blur, some lighting, filter, done. It's not the way to go. And it seems like that's what you're doing at the moment.

Check new things out. Get refreshed.

I can't say that what you did in this is amateurish, because it isn't, but it doesn't work, because you keep doing the same thing over and over. You don't have to pen-tool every tag. The space is cramped, so maybe you should change the size of the tags you make.

Awww, how lovely. I especially loved the end.

It's a rather informal piece, picaresque actually. In this case the whole informality of it works in it's favor. I like how you mingle that with your familiarity with the subject. It gets that realism needed for these kinds of things. I really like how you actually know how to write this in a very interesting, and funny matter. And you have a sense of exactly what to write in things. it feels like you had some security regarding how to go about this. It really must have hit you hard in order to grasp the situation in this matter.

It was really entretaining to read, and well...good luck with the love life.

I really need your help now. Are you on MSN? Can I add you? It shouldn't take long, but...could you help, it's photoshop related.

...Of the Ones without Will

Hope, was it for you?
are your memories yet still?
Where is your lasting desire?
The one that burned the world under your feet.

Is it lost under the warmth, the temptress?
We were once very clear; very bright,
this happiness is merely blight;
where is your lasting desire?

I've looked, and I've searched
the corners of this dull castle
for the desire I so speak.

I've yet to see the beauty.
I've yearned to be free,
I've started to lose faith.
I've been losing myself.

One last prayer:
Save us from complacency
Save us from ourselves.

Return our desires, so pure and true.
we weep for a future that speaks thruth.
Return our desires, so noble and pure.

Where is our lasting desire?

desire isn't merely carnal desire, right? So, I took my own spin on it, even if it came out kinda bad.

You're quite good, and it's a very solid and stable start. I do hope you keep going with writing in general, because you're quite good.

I'm not completely in love with the whole other world idea, but it could work...I just don't fancy it, so it's mainly my preference. It's an idea that can greatly be explored upon, so I think you should give it a shot.

Jojoj13: I really like the smugding, which really seems nice, but other than that it's a bit too bland. You should have added some sparks, or maybe even a C4d, anything just to make it stand out more. I'm giving you the first in my votes, as to even the field somewhat.

Misty: Lovely. I really think that the best selling point is the really good stock, and the text, which is truly magnificent. Other than that, I like the simplicity, and the lighting used.

DPwolf: You actually tried at the blending pretty well, but I still don't like the combination of colors, it needed more colors, not just a green C4D that may seem to stick out a bit too much. I get the main idea, but I'm not feeling it too much.

Side note: Fayt, even though I didn't give any points, I must say that you're comeback is quite an improvement from past works. It's always nice to try new things, and you're certainly in the right direction.

I actually really like the 3rd one. Overall, these are fine. I just think some were sharpened just a bit too much. Plus, the may have too much contrast.

I suggest you work with the contrast, but overall these look really good in regards to brightness, color, ect.

O_o

I...You're great. I've heard this song before by you, and this is even more amazing. Sure it doesn't have the harmonies, but it's so sweet sounding. The piano gives it a certain tenderness.

Plus, it's great that you made the viewer warm up towards you. It was funny, and makes it seem more personal.

I thought you were going to mention something like "these just look like cut-outs"

And, thanks Misty, I'll be sure to try that with any icons I decide to do next time.