Hi! How are you today? ^.^
Exactly....
Um...I think someone described Iron Man and just added a y to his name...
Yep...just like they put the "supposedly scary" clips in horror movie previews.
I think u r a 10...out of 10...
The puppy is SO cute...I'm being bombarded with cuteness!! These pictures are very nice! My aunt used to have a corgie...but Cody (the dog) died one or two years ago...I miss her...You love animals just like I do...That's so awesome...^.^
I love this series. Why? It's poetic, magical, and imaginative. Truly beautiful. I read volumes 1-4 of the manga, but only watched the first episode of the anime. (Wow, Luna, I think we may have more in common than we think. We both like Harry Potter, Avatar...and MuShiShi! ^.^)
Um...9/10? *sigh*.....
For being me...*smiles* :type:
I don't like bacon....
Okay...So I edited the story a bit. And yes...there's a monologue...and suspense...(I guess) Here is: Chapter 5: Twilight Balance Raven would’ve had a very peaceful slumber; except she was having a weird dream... She was surrounded by fog, and the air was cold. She walked through the fog, noticing that it had started to clear. A figure in a hooded cloak stood on a tall boulder, not too far away. She ran as fast as she could, trying to summon her keyblade, but she couldn’t. It turned when it heard the sound of Raven’s feet. “Who are you?†she cried. It didn’t reply, jumped off of the boulder, and started to run. She ran after it, and caught up to it just as it was about to jump off of a nearby cliff. She grabbed its hood just as it pushed her to the ground. She froze as she saw a familiar face. Before she could say his name, he vanished, and she woke up feeling very cold, and sweating. Hiromi was awake, and said “Raven, are you okay? You were talking in your sleep!†“I was?†Raven asked. “What was I saying?†She told him what had happened in her dream. “It was just a bad dream...But I do wonder why you had it now.†Hiromi said, brushing his hair back. “I really do wonder if Kahlill is here...Or if it was only a dream.†Raven said. Everyone awoke at the beginning of dawn. “So, um, where do we go from here?†Cindy asked, looking nervous. “I think we should explore this world.†Lena said. They all walked, and walked until they came to the place where the field ended. The sunlight ended where the field stopped. “Um, isn’t it supposed to be day here too?†Ben asked curiously. “Yeah.†said Raven. “That is weird.†All of them stepped from the sunlight into the night. Every cottage or house that they passed by was either broken down or badly damaged. Windows were broken, bricks were on the ground, and there was an eerie silence. “What happened here?†Raven said out loud. “I have no idea.†Anna said in response. “I don’t like the feeling this place’s giving off!†Cindy cried. Just as she had finished her last word, many heartless appeared. “Somehow, I was expecting this.†Hiromi said dully, summoning his keyblade. Meanwhile, on a world not too far away, the same boy in the black hood and cloak, who had been beaten by these six keybladers, was standing inside of an immense fortress. He was faced by his master, who was concealed by darkness. “On your knees!†a cold and menacing voice shouted to him. He was trembling in fear. His blue eyes showed deep and intense fear also. “Why haven’t you captured them, Nick?†Sweat rolled down Nick’s green hair. “I...I†he started to say. “Silence you worthless fool!†the voice shouted. “What do you think I should do to you?†Nick whimpered, and cried “Please! Give me another chance! I beg you!†Nick’s pleading was no use, for he was grabbed by a bolt of darkness. Ben finished off the last heartless, and they all continued walking. Raven felt weary from all that fighting, and thought it was normal when she started to feel dizzy. She saw a boy with green hair being held up by an arm made of darkness. “No! Please! No!†he cried. He was dropped to the ground. “Finish him off!†another voice cried out from somewhere. Another figure in a hooded cloak slashed him with a keyblade, and the green haired boy disappeared into the darkness. A familiar voice let out an evil laugh. Raven woke up to see everyone standing above her. “What happened?†Cindy cried as Lena and Hiromi helped Raven to stand up. “She just collapsed.†Lena said. Raven told them about what she had seen. “I heard Kahlill laugh. I just know it.†“Who’s Kahlill?†Ben asked. “Um, one of my best friends.†Raven said quickly. “Are you sure he isn’t your boyfriend?†Anna asked. “Because it would really suck to have an evil boyfriend.†“No. He isn’t.†Raven said. “Oooh, Raven’s got a boy-friend!†Anna cooed. “He’s not my boyfriend!†Not yet, I guess... Darn Libra. Hiromi ignored all of this, and said “If your friend really is somewhere here...That means you have the ability to see what some people can’t. You have the gift of visions.†“But how can I be really sure he is, or isn’t here?†Raven asked no one in general. “Don’t worry.†Cindy said. “I’m sure he’s all right.†“Oh, how are we ever going to get off of this strange world?†Anna cried. “We don’t have a spaceship.†Ben had a mischievous smile on his face. “Don’t be silly, Anna! How did we get here in the first place? We’ll just open a portal.†“But in all of the things I’ve heard about the keyblade...opening portals was never mentioned.†Lena said. Raven thought for a moment, and said “But they did mention that keyblades can have secret abilities that no one has discovered yet, right?†“Well, yes.†Lena said. “Then why don’t we give it a try?†Ben said. “Even if we do,†Hiromi added, “Who knows where we’ll end up? I certainly don’t want to land in a pit full of heartless.†“That’s one chance I’m willing to take!†Ben cried, summoning his keyblade. “Are you with me, or not?†“I’m with you, Ben.†Anna said. “Me too.†said Raven. “So am I.†said Cindy. “Me also.†said Lena, tugging Hiromi along. They all held their keyblades at one spot in the air. Each of them focused their energy at that spot. Suddenly, beams of light were sprouting from each keyblade. They all met at the same spot, converging to form a rectangular golden gateway. They were all thrown back by the energy it had let out. “Now that’s freakin’ awesome!†Ben cried. Next, they all went through the newly created portal, and closed it behind them. All six of them stepped out onto a grassy field. A short distance away, a tall stone wall stood around a great city. Raven felt uncomfortable about going into the vast city before them. A memory had come back to her: She had been waiting for Kahlill at the bus stop near the school. After waiting for a long time, she had gone home. None of his friends knew where he was either, after a few days. What worried her was that no one else noticed that he was missing. After all, they were best friends. She followed them into the city, thinking very deeply. “Kahlill...Could he really be evil?†she thought. “The day I saw him, he wasn’t like himself. I told him how I really felt about him before he went missing. I’ve had a crush on him for a long time...everything seems to add up...but how can he...†She was knocked out of her train of thought when a loud gruff voice said “Stop right there!†All looked around to see what looked like a guard coming toward them. “Is there anything wrong, sir?†Anna asked. “All of you don’t look like you’re from around here.†the guard said. “We’re not.†said Ben. “I do have a question to ask you, though. Have you seen any kind of guy in a black hood and cloak with dark powers around here?†“No. Never seen one.†the guard said. Lena felt a sudden wave in the earth. “Ben, look out!†she cried, as a guard was about to attack him. Ben leaped out of the way just before the guard hit the floor where he stood. Many guards were now rushing at them with big swords. Their eyes were red, indicating that something was controlling them. Raven knocked some of them over with blasts of ice from her keyblade. Some of the guards dropped their swords when Ben heated them up with fire. “I knew I felt bad about coming to this place!†Raven thought. Soon, all of the guards were knocked out. “I wonder who’s behind all of this?†Cindy cried. “That would be me.†a voice cried out. All of them spotted a man in an organization coat with golden hair. “Oh my gosh, it’s Vexen!†Raven thought to herself. “But what’s he doing here? Wasn’t he killed by Axel?†“Who the hell do you think you are, coming and attacking us like that?!†Ben cried out. “So fight me, then!†Vexen cried. Ben charged at him with a powerful ice attack. “Ben, wait!†Raven cried, but it was too late. Vexen blocked Ben’s attack, and knocked him over with a powerful counter-attack. Then, he froze Ben in a block of ice. Raven broke the ice very quickly with a wave of her hand. Anna ran to Ben, who was on the ground. “Ben, are you okay?†she cried. “I’m okay!†he said, standing up. Hiromi used his keyblade to block a sudden attack with shiriken. “Who–,†he said, looking around. He saw a girl with red hair and brown eyes, who was holding many shiriken. “Hi! You’re cute!†she said. “Too bad I have to get rid of you!†Raven was helping Ben to fight Vexen. She had an advantage because she could control water, and she had also seen the way that he fights. She blocked every attack he threw at her. Anna and Cindy were fighting a man with blue hair and brown eyes. His weapon looked like a boomerang, sword, and spear combined. Ben struggled against Vexen’s attacks. Raven and Ben decided to attack him together with a large beam of energy. He was knocked back a few feet onto the ground. “Lucky shot.†he growled. “Look at you,†he said, pointing at Ben. “You can’t even pull together a decent attack without her help. How pathetic.†“What?!†shouted Ben. “Wanna bet?!†Ben threw a wind and fire attack at Vexen. Vexen blocked Ben’s attack with ease, and sent spikes of ice after him. Raven blocked them, and said “Ben, we should be fighting him together! If you’ll just charge recklessly, then I’ll take of it!†Soon, Vexen was very weak. “You mind telling us why you came here and attacked us like that, before we finish you?†Ben cried. Before Vexen could say a word, Kahlill slashed him with a yellow, black, and green keyblade; causing him to vanish into a stream of yellow and black energy. He was wearing a black cloak over a black and yellow designed shirt, and baggy black jeans with a chain hanging on them. “What did you do that for?!†Ben cried angrily. “He was mine!†Then, Kahlill disappeared. After he vanished, all of the other people in cloaks vanished. Lena came running up to Raven and Ben. “This whole city is fake.†she said. To be cont.
Okay guys...Now that I think about it...a monologue would've worked in this case. It's still not too late to edit it! ^.^ (*determined*) I'll do my best to portray their feelings, and to make this a better story....Thank you for your critique! ^.^
Wow...They're actually pretty good...Those are some "Happy Feet"....
This is so funny! LOL! The music went very well with it!
Can I have some? (We're both in NY anyway...)
That was funny! HA HA HA!
Man...and i wanted to see it...
I agree with you on that. Why? zuko's scar was an important symbol of his past and childhood, and of his relationship with his father. His scar was what motivated him to be the man he is now.
I understand, Asterisk...but this isn't anime...The characters don't spend 10 minutes thinking inside their heads. Chapter 4: Showdown! Raven picked up some sand and let it run through her fingers. The sky was blue, and two suns were visible. Not too far away was a small town with western style houses. “Hey, look, a town!†Anna cried. “We can find out where we are if we go there.†She stood up and brushed sand off of the green dress she was wearing. “That is, if it isn’t a ghost town.†Raven said as she walked with them. In a few minutes, they reached the small town. “It’s like something out of a western movie.†said Raven. All of a sudden, gunshots rang out. “Everyone, get down!†Ben cried, and they all hit the floor. When they had stopped, everyone stood up to see a tall woman in front of them. She had blonde hair, blue eyes, and had on a blue jeans jacket, brown pants, and cowboy style boots. In her hands were two futuristic style guns. “Who are you?†Anna cried. “And why did you fire at us?†“Hands over your heads!†the woman cried. “And I’ll ask the questions.†Everyone followed, and there was a slight pause. “Now tell me, what are you all doing here in this town? We don’t want any trouble here.†“We were lost, and happened to see this small town.†Hiromi said calmly. “If I may ask, what’s the name of this place?†The woman stared him in the eyes, and said after a while “This here’s the town of Cowbell. Now you said you’re lost. Where are you all trying to go?†“We’re following the person that kidnapped our friend.†Lena said plainly. “You? But you all don’t seem like any law enforcement to me. Tell me more.†“Well, for starters, have you seen a figure in a black cloak and hood with dark powers around here lately?†Ben asked. “You mean you’ve seen it too?†she asked. “It was here?†Raven asked curiously. The woman nodded, and put the two guns in their holders. “Come with me.†she said, walking. “Can I put my hands down now?†Ben cried. “Of course, dummy!†Anna cried, rolling her eyes. A little while later, they were inside of a small house. A little girl entered the room. She had brown hair and brown eyes. Her dark blue dress went well with her hair and eyes. She seemed very troubled about something. The woman said “My name is Lucy. And this is Amber.†Amber was clinging to Lucy very shyly. “Don’t worry. Tell them what happened.†Amber hesitated, then said “The figure...It took my brother.†“How did it happen?†Hiromi asked her, a concerned look in his eyes. “I just saw it carry him through the air, and they were gone. And – I couldn’t do anything to save him.†She cried into Lucy’s arms. “Three others have also been taken.†stated Lucy. “David, Isabella, and Joe.†Hiromi clenched his fists. “I’d like to know who’s behind all of this so I can teach them all a real good lesson!†he growled. “So, where do we go from here?†Raven asked. “There’s another town over those green hills.†Lucy said. “Maybe he’s there. I’ll be happy to walk you guys there.†A few minutes later, they were at their destination. The town was neatly arranged with many different colored buildings. “Be careful.†Lucy said. “What you’re dealing with is no joke.†When she was a good distance away, Ben said “Well, she was rather to the point!†“Just your typical mysterious cowgirl.†Raven added, smiling. When they all reached the middle of the town, they heard the sounds of a small battle going on. “That’s our cue!†Anna cried, and they all ran to see what was going on. A girl with black hair and brown eyes was fighting many heartless with a red, silver, and gold keyblade. Lena looked around hurriedly for the boy. “There!†cried Raven, pointing to a black cloaked figure on the top of a clock tower. Everyone summoned their keyblades. The boy in the black cloak leaped out into the air very quickly. Before he could reach the girl, Ben threw flames at him with his keyblade. The girl was surprised, but stayed focused. “Not you again!†he cried angrily. “It’s six against one. You’ve got no chance.†the girl with the red, silver, and gold keyblade cried. The boy with green hair gathered up a big sphere of dark energy, and threw it at them. They all dodged it, and attacked him together. Once again, he was knocked to the ground. “Dammit!†he cried. He opened a portal, but Ben grabbed his foot, and everyone was swept into a swirling mass of black and purple energy once more. As he kicked Ben away, Raven slammed her keyblade into a nearby wall. She almost threw up due to the velocity that they were all thrown out at. Everyone was sitting in a field of many flowers. Fluffy and colorful little furry creatures surrounded them. They were many colors of the rainbow, looked like furry little balls, and had cute beady eyes. “Aww! They’re so cute!†Raven cried. One of them made a cute “click†sound. “Oh, I can’t take all of this gushy-ness around me!†Hiromi cried. “In case anyone here wanted to know, my name is Cindy.†the girl who wielded the red, silver, and gold keyblade said dully. Everyone introduced themselves after she said this. The sun was setting behind them. “We need a place to rest. I’m beat.†Lena cried. Anna picked up one of the furry ures and petted its head very gently. “I’ve read about these creatures.†she said. “They’re fluffy migrating mush-balls. We’ll be safe if we sleep here with them for tonight.†“Wanna hold one?†Raven asked Hiromi just to tease him. “Don’t push it.†he said, annoyed. “But they’re so cuddly!†Anna cried, holding one near him.
I like this picture! The shadows and shading are very good. Her eyes are very cool too! Her chin/cheek area needed to be rounded a bit more on the bottom right, though. Good job!
