It's odd that the first thing that struck me when I saw "Burning bright" was how fond I am of the red and black colour scheme. xD Basic rhyming, and typical similes like "as warm as fire", but overall a very neat and pleasant to read poem. (:
Awww John those are lovely! :3 You're still doing the hand thingy I see xD The gf *almost just revealed her name* has a gorgeous dress<3 And phwoar, look at Dan all grown up ;D *shot*
*currently rendering video but has to go out* Don't make it without meee ;__; I'll submit later tonight. xD
And of course, being the technologically incapable person I am, I just panicked and hit more keys.
I never mess with my keys anymore, since this weird incident when my screen went black, then flipped upside-down and zoomed in on everything. >>
I know! I shall be gone in ten days D:
Your reply leaves me very confused. Ah well. xD
It's a shame that rhyming restricts your fluency when communicating Although I don't think I've done too badly here, I'm just fixating On what I...
hi hi hi. :'D Maybe you need to update msn. o:
Not a bad start, the story was communicated pretty well. I'll comment on the actual story before I get onto structure, grammar etc. What kind of creatures were roaming the island? Surely they would have identified them as Pokémon if Riku knows the series? You mentioned the Wingull and Pelliper flying over the waters but that's about it. You would do well to focus your descriptions on important parts of the story rather than on unnecessary details like the colour of Riku's sleeping bag. Why did Sora immediately head for the cave? You didn't really explain why he went there of all places, except that he went there quickly. I thought the outcome of the chaos was a little predictable, and I can pretty much guess that Riku will become Sora's rival. However, I do look forward to seeing what Pokémon you place in what worlds, if that is the path you take with this story. Now- do us all a favour, and either ditch the é in the Poké words, or just use a normal e. The space where you use an apostrophe looks extremely messy. Your format isn't too bad, I'm glad to see you've used new lines for every new speaker in dialogue etc but I'm not happy with your sentence structure. Read your story aloud; do the sentences flow correctly? You're missing quite a few commas in vital places. Sorry for the very long comment. >> Keep up the good work. :3
Apparently a cow pregnancy test involves shoving your arm into some interesting places. Like elbow deep.
It's a .gif file, I just found him like that on photobucket. :3
Ah eff, I have until Friday to finish my latest amv then. >> EDIT- :'D http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nnr4T45j94g *wonders if any of you will know the song* >>
@Haley- that is one sexy bedcover cheesy bedroom pics go go Spoiler ...I seem to have a bit of a belly here B| I'm totally all ready for summer outfits though.
Thanks for informing me of this Night, but I check this section every day and generally don't need notifying when threads need to be merged. As stated, I'll change the name of the thread on demand. Oh and guys, I'm a girl.
Isn't he just wonderful, all spinning and such? xD
Hope you are too ♥ dA isn't really a good place to chat, hah.
Forsaken, you're so demanding. ;-;
PM a staff member if you're that curious about him, it's best not to discuss these things. ... I actually thought your second question was about La Sofa first, since he's also gone. ;;
...You sound nothing like either of them imo :v
