Deleted your post in the RP Idol thing because I don't want to encourage other's to reply (I told Dr_Wigglz the same thing in the first...
Jayn ;; Critiques Spoiler: Dr_Wigglz You've done very good with detail here. Also, like Arch said, the fact about the dragon not finding her threatening make sense and adds to the realisim. Howeverrrr. The challenge was danger. There's nothing in this post about her being afraid, or assessing how dangerous the situation was. It's just focusing on her being kind-hearted and not wanting to hurt the dragon. Spoiler: Master of Keyblades I just want to commend you for your improvement. Looking back on your first RP idol post up until this one, you seem to have taken our critiques for what they were and sharpened your skill. As for a critique, as mentioned before, I corrected the 'their' to 'there'. Also, the sword shield was pretty unrealistic. xD You would have been scorched. But it was creative, so I'll give you that. Spoiler: Bushy Brow I found yours very cute. xD Also, what tends to get me about your posts is though they are creative and fun, the format is a little odd. The paragraphs are broken up so that looking at it makes me feel like I'm looking at a poem, and not an RP post. This might just be a personal preference of mine, I don't know. There was only one spelling error that I corrected in red, there. As for ellipses, you've definitely cut down, but there are still quite a few unnecessary pauses. Sooo, I've tried to edit this a bit. Take from it what you will. Your posts themselves are very witty and clever, and I enjoy that. Spoiler: Marushi Yours was a tricky one for me. You've always been awesome with detail, etc. I love the letter. It was a nice touch. But, the challenge was danger. I feel like your the borderline. You did incorporate fear into your post, and you hinted at the danger. But was it actually there, is what gets me. I'm not sure if you captured the challenge in its entirety, but I thought you were very creative with what you did do. Spoiler: Chesterfield You're a very good writer, and with your creativity I think you have a shot at winning this thing. Like, a big shot. The post itself was remarkable. The only thing I have to say is that while your posts are great, I almost equate them with something I would read in one of the Prose contests on the site. I feel like I'm reading a book when I read your posts. Which is both good, and not-so-great. I do believe there's a difference between a book and a role play. This is something I personally struggle with myself when I role play. I'll write like a mini-chapter as a post at times, but because of that, I can come across as very intimidating and it's discouraging. I've been told some would prefer not to role play with me not because of me personally, but because they don't think they could keep up, or they don't want to read the long posts. Lol (/slitslit). Not very many people are going to want to write so detailed in a role play. Some people role play because they like to write, but don't like the pressure of actually writing a story, etc. People are also lazy, so they won't even bother reading a super long detailed-looking post unless it's marked essential. What also comes with long posts is the challenge of consistency. If you decide to write super long posts consistently, it can take (of course) much longer than usual to actually get around to posting (no one likes to fall behind). If your character is essential, that could lead to RP slow-downs. I'm not entirely sure what I'm advising you to do. I just sometimes feel like you're writing as you would a story, and not a role play post? Which would come naturally to you because you're obviously a very skilled writer. You're very good, don't get me wrong. You're amazing. I just wanted to point that out. Don't lose your creativity. Just keep in mind you can be witty, clever and creative without spawning a mini-chapter. This is also a matter of my personal opinion. Like I said, I struggle with doing the same thing. I'm bad at getting to the point in my posts without writing on and on and on and getting lost in the act of writing itself. A blessing and a curse, my dear. I do want to give you a chance to reply to this if you want, so you can PM me about it if you have retaliation, or something. I don't want you to feel like I'm belittling you, so I'd rather clear that up now if you feel that way. xD; Spoiler: Britishism I corrected a 'person' problem up there. You said 'her' hair instead of 'my' hair. Anyway, your post was interesting. Like Arch said, however, it was a little hard to believe she'd kill it so easily. I think for this post it would have been more creative of you to have her not slay the dragon successfully. Spoiler: Ace Your effort was incredible. You obviously worked very hard on this post. However, it sounded like something straight out of an anime, and that's what bothered me the most. I mean, it was so dramatic. xD The realism in it was completely overshadowed by the shounen in it. I think you did a good job, and I can tell you worked hard on it, and it's not a bad post. It was just unrealistic to me personally. Spoiler: Tummer Spell check is your friend. You had a lot, a lot, a lot of spelling errors in this. xD Also. I don't really understand what happened in this. I don't think she killed it. I think she just...gave up and ran? Felt very incomplete to me. Anyway. You did win the challenge so congratulations, but do try to do better next time. I know you got it in you.
Oh, and yay. <3 I just finished the series recently. Never again shall I judge an anime by it's title.
http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?115039-Role-Play-Idol-Season-One-Challenge-3-VOTING. B|
Oh, yeah, we'll be...'gentle'. ccc: HOW ARE YOU? :D
LOL. CHIN. That was great. Anyway, it was really adorable. There were some parts that were hard to read to me, but I made it all out eventually. Welcome back. ;D
I think the circumstances matter. I mean, if I get drunk, go to some dudes house and have sex with him and regret it, I'm not going to say he raped me (just because I was drunk when I said yes), nor am I going to take legal action. But at the same time, if I'm drunk in a public place like a bar or a club, and some stranger lures me to his car and takes me to his place and sexes me up using some half-unconscious mumble of a consent to justify it, then yeah. I'd feel taken advantage of--but I would still ultimately feel at fault for it happening. Personally I'm not much of a drinker and doubt I ever will be. But I know if I get drunk knowing I'm drinking alcohol, and something like that happens...As long as I DID say 'yes' in some form it's my fault.
That sounds expensive. It also sounds like a practical joke. Kind of gross though, imo. Well, the used ones. Who has the time to do something like this? WHO BOUGHT ALL OF THOSE PANTIES? I hope they find out, because it's a pretty interesting story.
And the winner is... Congratulations to the amazing Tummer! It was a tough decision, but he managed to wow the judges with his role play post. You are immune from this voting session. Go to the challenge thread for your critiques--eventually, as they are being written. Feedback! You guys did rather well again. Just keep the 'theme' in mind. Some of you strayed from the actual Danger! theme and went more into a fighting/battle mind frame. What is this? While we have a winner (who is immune from this poll), we also need to eliminate someone. In this voting session, we'll be voting off TWO people. You're voting for who you think should stay, and you MUST post in this thread with a valid, detailed critique/reason WHY. There is no voting for yourself. I'll restate my original rule which is be fair about it. Please do not vote for your friends because they're your friends. Please refer to the sign ups thread for more information on voting. (Though, you should have read it already.) You are REQUIRED to vote. You are REQUIRED to read the other contestants posts. You are REQUIRED to give a reason why. If you're in the bottom (least amounts of votes), the judges and I will decide who stays and who goes. TWO will be leaving this time around. If you need extra help, the judges will be critiquing each role player in the main challenge thread. If you're just following the competition, but you've not entered in it as a contestant, you can vote too. But you're still required to follow the same rules and give a valid reason. If I feel your (or anyone elses) reason is not detailed enough, I will call you out on it. c: (You guys can do the same to me if I seem vague) Members who have yet to vote... Bushy Brow - Izzy Kumo [m] + Ilia Kumo [f] Marushi - Lance [m] + Kara [f] Dr_Wigglz - Gexln [m] + Rosalina [f] master of keyblades - Allen [m] + Mina [f] Britishism - Rory [m] + Keira [f] Ace Phoenix - Kyatchi [m] + Mizume [f] theonly9one - Heather [f] + Brad [m] Tummer - Hannah [f] + Luis [m] Happy role playing. :]
Oh noooo. D: *Virtually takes care of*
Yay for days off. xD And alrighty.~ Also, I'm already trying to ween myself off of the anti-depressants. Not doing too good on them. ;_;
Just lots of hunger *Just woke up* <<. And boredom. How about you? xD
Hey. <3 I'm feeling awful. xDD But I'm getting better. How are you?
Makaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa. <3
Thank you to everyone who took the time to reply, I appreciate it. <3 Last night I slept alright, but I still woke up way too early with nausea and nervouness. @Makaze/Luxord; I have to say, I think I agree at this point. As Chesterfield said, the drugs take a while to get into your system, but I feel like like crap--And once they do get into my system, I'm afraid of becoming dependent and not being able to stop taking them without some even more serious side-effects. I don't want to be on these forever. I've contacted my doctor as a few of you have suggested. When I was prescribed, she said she would set me up with therapy. Drugs for 'chemical imbalances' and actual therapy for whatever is lurking deep down in there. So I told her I would like to continue the therapy, but not-so-much the drugs. She said maybe this drug is just the wrong one for me, or the dosage needs to be lowered. Ehh. So anyway, I have another appointment with her to discuss alternatives and get help. I didn't take a pill today (my mom took the pills and hid them, anyways) and I'm hoping it won't affect me since I didn't take too many before stopping cold-turkey, but we'll see. I'm feeling antsy and nervous, so I am going to try some of the things you guys suggested. We have Lavender Candles, so I'll try that, along with some tea. I'm sure it'll still be hard to sleep, since it IS the drugs. But if I can at least fight some of the anxiety and the feeling like something terrible is going to happen...Well, calming things can't hurt that.
why is there guy porn on your profile :c
Go to sleep. :c
http://www.kh-vids.net/showthread.php?51696-Hakumei-Twilight
You recognize it? O:
Hey, guys...Um. I don't want to go on for too long so simply put, I have issues with OCD and depression and recently I've been prescribed anti-depressants. 20mg of Prozac daily. I was told to stick with it for about a month and then make another appointment to see how I'm coping. Some of the side-effects are hitting me pretty bad now and it's only day three. I'm having a hard time with nausea, headaches, loss of appetite and insomnia. I can sit through the nausea, eat when I don't feel like it, and ibuprofen helps with the headaches. But the insomnia is driving me nuts. I'm so tired. The first night I slept, tossed and turned and woke up five hours after I finally fell alseep. I was unable to sleep again for another four hours, and it was the most unrefreshing nap ever. (I took the prozac the night before). So I took it earlier the next day, and I did not sleep last night at all. Not at all. I just laid there in bed. No matter how tired I was, or how still I laid, or how comfortable I got, not a pinch of sleep. Not anything but lying there. So today I took it in the morning. (Still running on zero sleep). Dunno how this is going to turn out but I'm starting to fix my sleeping schedule now... I'm wondering if any of you have insomnia, or trouble sleeping. And what you do to deal with it? Also, if anyone's dealt with anti-depressants before, how it went for them overall? I'm really scared, lol. I've never taken a drug so invasive before, and I dislike it. :c [ Also, this isn't a departure thread or anything but I do want to say that until I feel better, I really...can't seem to find the will to be too active. I don't want to sit at my computer. I want to just collapse on my bed and cry. It's really hard to be up right now, and I don't like this feeling but...I'm going to spend most of my time waiting out these side effects in bed, or with family, and not on the Internet. I will be on KHV, though. On my iPod, mostly. I'll get on my laptop if something happens. If you need me on MSN or something, contact FuzzyBlueLights. I just...need time to adjust to this medication. I feel so sick. ]
