Xion: I'm Just A Girl [Kingdom Hearts 358/2 Days]

Not bad for your very first video! You've got the basics down - having a subject focus (Xion) and sticking to it, telling a story, relevant/suitable song choice. The next step to take is looking at having a stronger relationship between the video and music - there is isn't really any connection between what's going on in the song with what's happening in the clips. The clips aren't tied rhythmically to the song, so take a look at some editing tutorials to get an idea.