Poems Inspired By My Life

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  1. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    I've seen choppier . . . (just read some of my first few pieces lol) this is actually a pretty good poem. I have noticed it's about half and half in the poem section on whether to use rhymes or not. Some people rhyme, some people don't, some people don't even make sense half the time (me) yet poetry it all is. Anyway, like you said this is a little "choppy" but nothing great ever started by looking the part. ^_^
     
    Technic☆Kitty, Aug 31, 2011
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  2. Llave Superless Moderator

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    I thought that these were very good. Sweet and simple, but get's a point across.

    However, my favorite one out of these would have to be the first one. It flows so smoothly, and it really has a good meaning. i especially love the last two lines:

    "I want to share my feelings but i'm truly just too shy
    There has never been hello so there'll never be goodbye..."

    That is so true, it really is a great way of putting it.

    All of the poems where great, but i think that one was the best by a long shot! Keep up the good work, i hope to see more!
     
    Llave, Sep 2, 2011
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  3. ShibuyaGato Transformation

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    Random, depressing improv~
    [I think all the implied Doctor/Rose fanfiction has gotten to me ;~;]

    This stress is killing me; I lay down in defeat
    But then I see your face; I think of your embrace
    Your love it gives me strength, through all the pain and fear
    Though after all is done, you leave me alone in here
     
    ShibuyaGato, Oct 30, 2011
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  4. ShibuyaGato Transformation

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    Bump.

    I figure there's no harm in putting up my entry for the third PanS.

    Life to me feels like nothing but a dream
    It never turns out right and everything repeats
    Love keeps failing and friends keep fading
    The world hurts and people are selfish; hiding away
    A new day’s arrived; start it over again

    I hide but the pain finds me; the tears repeat
    That feeling of betrayal, showing up again
    Running from my fears; just running away
    My connections disappear, kindness fades
    If this is the world then I’m happy to live in my dreams

    My sight turns to black; lines and colors fade
    Any sign of remorse and I simply turn away
    Believing the lie is nothing but a dream
    Trying, trying; the pretentious lies repeat
    I shut myself away, avoiding the hurt again

    I can see light; the clouds melt away
    I smile; I never thought I’d do that again
    Their agony’s on a loop; repeat, repeat
    Now the hurt seems so distant, like a bad dream
    In finding happiness, the hurt finally fades
     
    ShibuyaGato, Nov 14, 2011
    ShibuyaGato, Nov 14, 2011
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